Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 在回答中要更直接并且精简，減少停頓詞（如 umm, uh）和重複，並使用一到兩句具體細節來豐富內容。例如說明一次具體的旅行經歷或描述看見的景色，使用連接詞使語句更連貫。

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when travelling by bus or car. For example, on a recent trip in Switzerland with friends we drove between cities and I enjoyed watching the rolling hills and small villages pass by, especially the fields and rivers.

Suggestion: 回答要更準確地表達動機並避免重複。把重點放在原因和一個具體例子上，使用清晰的主題句和一個支持句，並避免多次自我修正。

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window because I want to remember the view later. For instance, during a bus ride in Switzerland I photographed mountain villages and lakes so I could look back at them and share them with my family.

Suggestion: 回答要更流暢並使用更準確的表達來說明理由。先直接給出偏好，再用一至兩句具體理由支撐，並用連接詞（for example, because）讓論述更有條理，同時減少語音填充詞。

Example: I prefer the sea because it relaxes me and makes me feel calm. Mountains are beautiful too, but I find hiking tiring, whereas sitting by the coast and listening to the waves helps me unwind.

× we we're traveling to the another city by bus a lot of time.

✓ we were traveling to another city by bus a lot of the time.

句子中使用了定冠词“the”与不定冠词“another”重复，且“another”已包含“不定的另一个”含义，前面不应再加“the”。此外原句时态为过去进行，保留“were traveling”。建议去掉“the”并在“a lot of time”前加定冠词“the”以符合习惯用法：“a lot of the time”。

× I check photos of the scenery outside the car because I I want to memorize them not only in my eyes, but also in my telephone, in my, in my, in my phone.

✓ I take photos of the scenery outside the car because I want to remember them not only in my eyes but also on my phone.

原句中“check photos”用词不当，应使用表示拍照的动词“take photos”。“memorize”通常指刻意记忆，用于此处不自然，改为“remember”。“in my telephone/phone”介词使用错误，电子设备上通常用“on my phone”。此外去掉重复词并简化语序更符合英语表达。

× the mountain is also very, uh, magnificent.

✓ the mountains are also very magnificent.

前文谈论“mountains or the sea”为复数对比，随后把“mountain”改为单数会造成不一致。将其改为复数“mountains”更符合上下文。

× I really feel really tired to climb the mountain,

✓ I really feel tired when climbing mountains,

英语中常用结构是“feel tired doing something”或“feel tired when climbing”，而不是“feel tired to climb”。此外保持复数“mountains”与前句一致；去掉重复的“really”。建议用“feel tired when climbing mountains”。

× the sea gives me a feel that a very inclusive and uh, make me calm.

✓ the sea makes me feel very relaxed and inclusive.

原句中“gives me a feel that a very inclusive”结构不自然，应使用“makes me feel”来表达感受。“inclusive”通常不用于描述让人平静的感觉，改为“relaxed”更合适。另外原句时态和主谓需一致，故用“makes me feel”。