Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản (thì và dạng động từ), tránh lặp từ và làm câu tự nhiên hơn. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm chi tiết cụ thể bằng liên từ phù hợp (for example, because, so). Chú ý loại bỏ lỗi như “I'm enjoy”, “when travel”, và cụm lặp “over the hill over the hills”. Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the scenery. For example, I particularly like seeing the countryside and the sunlight on the hills, which makes the journey relaxing.

Suggestion: Cần chỉnh ngữ pháp và trật tự từ (ví dụ “I often take” thay vì “I'm often take”), loại bỏ từ thừa (“also”, “too”) và cải thiện liên từ để mạch lạc. Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể (loại cảnh bạn chụp, công cụ bạn dùng, hoặc tần suất) để tăng tính phong phú nội dung. Giữ số câu trong giới hạn 3–4 câu.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car window because I like capturing beautiful views. They help me remember the trip, and I sometimes post the best shots on social media to share them with friends.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời hiện tại không rõ ràng và chứa nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng sai (ví dụ “Is Japan, but I like bowl I”, “rising still fresh air”, “sheep breeze”). Trước hết hãy nêu trực tiếp sở thích (mountains or the sea), sau đó giải thích bằng hai câu hỗ trợ với liên từ (“on the one hand… on the other hand…”) và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (fresh air, sea breeze). Tránh câu không liên quan hoặc từ sai nghĩa. Giữ tối đa 4–5 câu.

Example: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and breathing fresh, clean air. On the other hand, the sea is relaxing too, since I like swimming and listening to the gentle sea breeze, but overall I choose the mountains for outdoor activities.

× Yes, I usually look out of the window when travel by bus and car because I'm enjoy watching the scenery or the outside landscape when on the way.

✓ Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the scenery or the landscape while on the way.

The sentence misses the subject 'I' before 'travel' and uses incorrect contraction 'I'm enjoy' instead of 'I enjoy'. Add 'I' to form the present simple 'I travel' and change 'I'm enjoy' to 'I enjoy'. Use 'or' for alternatives and 'while' or 'when' consistently for time expressions.

× For example, I love watching the countryside and the sunlight over the hill over the hills.

✓ For example, I love watching the countryside and the sunlight over the hills.

Redundant phrase 'over the hill over the hills' is incorrect. Use the present participle 'watching' correctly; remove repetition and keep plural 'hills' to match 'countryside'.

× Yes, I'm often take photos of the scenery from the car window because I enjoy capturing beautiful views.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from the car window because I enjoy capturing beautiful views.

The auxiliary 'I'm' plus base verb 'take' is incorrect for habitual action. Use simple present 'I often take' to express a habitual action. Remove 'am' before 'often'.

× They help me to remember the trip and I sometimes share them on the social media so my fans also can see them too.

✓ They help me remember the trip, and I sometimes share them on social media so my fans can see them too.

Use parallel structure: 'help me remember' (not 'help me to remember' is acceptable but simpler). 'On the social media' should be 'on social media'. 'Also' and 'too' are redundant together; keep 'too' or 'also'. Place a comma before 'and' joining independent clauses.

× Is Japan, but I like bowl I.

✓ I am Japanese, but I like both equally.

Original sentence is fragmented and words are jumbled. 'Is Japan' lacks subject; 'bowl I' makes no sense. Correct to 'I am Japanese' to state nationality, and 'I like both equally' to answer preference between mountains and sea.

× On one hand, the mountains are free for hiking and and rising still fresh air.

✓ On the one hand, the mountains are good for hiking and have fresh, crisp air.

Use 'On the one hand' idiomatically. Remove duplicated 'and and'. 'Free for hiking' is unnatural; use 'good for hiking' or 'great for hiking'. 'Rising still fresh air' is ungrammatical; use 'have fresh, crisp air' to describe mountain air.

× On other hand the sea is relaxing because you can swim through the sheep breeze and enjoy the beach atmosphere.

✓ On the other hand, the sea is relaxing because you can swim in the sea, feel the sea breeze, and enjoy the beach atmosphere.

Use 'On the other hand' with article 'the' and a comma. 'Swim through the sheep breeze' is wrong: 'in the sea' for swimming, and 'sea breeze' (not 'sheep breeze') for the wind. Use commas to separate verbs in a list.