Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cần làm rõ hơn và gọn gàng câu trả lời, tránh lặp từ và thêm một câu phụ ngắn giải thích hậu quả hoặc một thói quen thay thế. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để câu mạch lạc hơn và giữ tối đa 3 câu theo quy tắc.

Example: No, I usually don't look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I get carsick. To avoid feeling ill, I close my eyes or focus on a fixed point inside the vehicle. Occasionally, I take short walks when the vehicle stops to get fresh air.

Suggestion: Cần loại bỏ tiếng lắp (uh), sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ, tránh dư thừa từ (take some that I do). Nên nêu rõ tần suất, lý do và kết quả (ví dụ: đăng lên mạng). Dùng liên từ đơn như 'because' hoặc 'so' để liên kết ý rõ ràng và giữ 2–3 câu.

Example: Yes, sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I want to capture beautiful landscapes. If the view is especially striking, I will upload the best shots to my social media. However, I often avoid taking pictures when the road is bumpy because the photos turn out blurry.

Suggestion: Cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và trật tự từ (the my both, they're sea), làm câu rõ ràng bằng một câu chủ đề + một hoặc hai câu chi tiết cụ thể. Dùng so sánh ngắn gọn và từ vựng phù hợp (e.g., 'coast' or 'seaside').

Example: I actually love both the mountains and the sea because each has its own beauty. For example, mountains offer dense forests and diverse wildflowers, while the seaside provides wide sandy beaches and calming waves. If I had to choose, I might prefer the mountains for hiking but the sea for relaxing.

× No, I don't usually look out of the window when I'm traveling by bus or car because I get carsick. I usually close my eyes to prevent feeling ill.

✓ No, I don't usually look out of the window when I'm traveling by bus or car because I get carsick. I usually close my eyes to prevent feeling ill.

No correction needed for present participle use; 'traveling' and 'feeling' are used correctly as present participles/gerunds in these contexts. Suggestion: none.

× Yes, sometimes I do take some that I do, uh, take some photos of the scenery outside the car window because I want to capture the beautiful and breath breathtaking landscape. Sometimes I can't so that I can post on my social media.

✓ Yes, sometimes I take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I want to capture the beautiful, breathtaking landscape so that I can post them on my social media.

Original has redundant phrases ('do take some that I do, uh, take some') and incorrect word order and word choice ('breath breathtaking', 'Sometimes I can't so that I can post on my social media'). The corrected sentence removes redundancy, uses the adjective 'breathtaking' properly, places 'so that' to show purpose, and uses 'them' to refer back to 'photos'. Suggestion: avoid filler repetitions, keep purpose clauses together, and use correct pronouns for plural nouns.

× Well actually I love the my both mountains and the sea because each of them has their specific beauty. You know the mountain has many dense forests and variety of flowers and trees while they're sea.

✓ Well, actually I love both the mountains and the sea because each of them has its own specific beauty. The mountains have many dense forests and a variety of flowers and trees, while the sea has its own charms.

Errors: unnecessary definite/possessive articles ('the my both'), wrong pronoun agreement ('each of them has their' should be 'its'), singular/plural mismatches ('the mountain' vs 'mountains') and use of 'they're sea' (contraction used incorrectly). Corrections: use 'both the mountains and the sea', 'each of them has its own', plural noun agreement for 'mountains have', include 'a' before 'variety', and replace 'they're sea' with 'the sea has its own charms'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with antecedents, avoid extra articles, and keep subject-verb number consistent.