Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve clarity, grammar and cohesion. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct verb forms and pronouns, and use one or two specific supporting details linked with short connectors. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the changing scenery helps me relax after a busy day. For example, I enjoy watching city streets gradually change into green fields on longer journeys, which also gives me ideas for photography.

Suggestion: Work on sentence structure, verb forms and more precise vocabulary. Begin with a direct statement, link reasons simply, and give one clear specific example. Avoid awkward phrases like “have me remember the zoning.”

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when we pass picturesque places like mountains or historic towns. These photos help me remember the trip and share the changing landscape with friends; for instance, I often photograph the sunrise lighting up a nearby hill.

Suggestion: Give a clear choice and reasons using correct grammar and vocabulary. Use one topic sentence stating preference and one or two supporting reasons linked with simple connectors. Correct pronunciation-based spelling errors in writing (e.g., 'destination', 'relaxed') and replace unclear phrases like 'thread had wave ways' with concrete descriptions.

Example: Both are beautiful, but I would choose the sea because I feel very relaxed there and the sound of the waves helps me unwind. I also enjoy swimming and watching the horizon, which makes seaside holidays restful.

× That I often look out of the window when traveling by bus or car because I find the changing scenery relaxing and a good way to to unwind after a busy day.

✓ I often look out of the window when travelling by bus or car because I find the changing scenery relaxing and a good way to unwind after a busy day.

The original sentence begins with 'That' which creates an incorrect sentence structure (extraneous demonstrative). Also 'to to' contains a duplicated word. Remove the leading 'That' and one 'to' to form a correct main clause. Maintain consistent spelling 'travelling' or 'traveling' depending on variety; here 'travelling' is used to match formality.

× For example, I enjoy watching city street transforming to Greenfield on longer journey.

✓ For example, I enjoy watching city streets transform into green fields on longer journeys.

Problems: 'city street' should be plural 'city streets' to match general observation (singular/plural issue), 'transforming to' is an awkward verb form and preposition—use base verb 'transform' with 'into' (verb form and preposition issues), 'Greenfield' seems to be a common noun phrase 'green fields' and 'longer journey' needs plural 'journeys' for general statements. These changes correct noun number, verb form, and preposition choice for natural English.

× We also give me idea for photography.

✓ They also give me ideas for photography.

The subject 'We' conflicts with 'me' (object) and creates a pronoun reference error. Likely intended meaning is that the scenes give the speaker ideas, so use 'They' (referring to the scenes) and plural 'ideas'. Also add article or plural as appropriate and 'for photography' is acceptable.

× That I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when traveling to picturesque area like mountains or cultural capturing.

✓ I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when traveling to picturesque areas like mountains or cultural sites.

Again the sentence should not start with 'That'—remove it. 'picturesque area' should be plural 'areas' for generalization. 'cultural capturing' is incorrect; replace with 'cultural sites' or 'cultural attractions'. This fixes sentence structure and incorrect noun phrase usage.

× Those moments have me remember the zoning and share the changing landscape with friends.

✓ Those moments help me remember the places and share the changing landscape with friends.

'have me remember' is not correct; English uses 'help me remember' or 'make me remember' (verb selection). 'the zoning' is unclear; likely intended 'places' or 'zones'—use 'places'. This corrects verb usage and noun choice.

× For example, I frequently photograph sunrise light on hill.

✓ For example, I frequently photograph the sunrise light on hills.

Use definite article 'the' with 'sunrise light' for a specific phenomenon, and plural 'hills' to reflect general locations. Also word order 'sunrise light on hills' sounds natural.

× Both of them are really beautiful, but if I had to choose a detination I would you see because when being when I'm in the sea, I'm very relaxed and feel unwind.

✓ Both are really beautiful, but if I had to choose a destination I would choose the sea because when I'm at the sea I feel very relaxed and able to unwind.

Multiple errors: 'Both of them' is acceptable but 'Both' is more natural. Spelling 'detination' corrected to 'destination'. 'I would you see' is ungrammatical—should be 'I would choose'. Remove duplicated 'when being when'. Use 'at the sea' or 'by the sea' and 'feel very relaxed and able to unwind' for correct adjective/adverb usage and verb phrase structure.

× The sea has a thread had wave ways.

✓ The sea has gentle waves.

Original phrase is unintelligible ('thread had wave ways'). Replace with a clear, natural phrase 'gentle waves' to convey the intended meaning. This corrects word choice and produces a coherent sentence.