Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and hesitations, and correct small grammar mistakes (e.g., "it soothes my nerves"). Aim for natural phrasing and smoother rhythm.

Example: I always enjoy looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I like observing local people and the green landscapes because they tell me about the place I am visiting. Also, it soothes my nerves and helps me relax during the journey.

Suggestion: Provide a direct topic sentence and one clear reason with a linking word. Remove repetition and correct grammar ("I enjoy the scenery most" or "I prefer to enjoy it rather than take photos"). Keep to 2–3 sentences for coherence.

Example: Not usually; I prefer to enjoy the view rather than take photos while travelling. For instance, I feel calmer feeling the breeze and watching the landscape, so I usually wait until I arrive to take pictures.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear preference and give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases ("sleep person") and filler words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "I prefer the sea because I enjoy the sound of waves and the breeze").

Example: I prefer the sea because I enjoy the sound of the waves and the gentle breeze, which relax me. Although I have recently started exploring mountains and like their scenery, the sea feels more calming and energizing to me.

× Surely it's my favorite thing to do whenever I am out somewhere traveling to.

✓ Surely it's my favorite thing to do whenever I am out somewhere traveling.

The preposition 'to' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect after 'traveling'. Remove 'to' to correct the prepositional phrase. Suggestion: say 'traveling' or 'when I am traveling.'

× All I want to see is the scenery.

✓ All I want to see is the scenery.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no pronoun error. No change needed.

× I want to understand the people, I want to see the greenery.

✓ I want to understand the people; I want to see the greenery.

Use a semicolon or separate sentences rather than a comma splice. This corrects sentence structure and clarifies two independent clauses.

× It suits my eyes, it suits my comes my nerve.

✓ It soothes my eyes and calms my nerves.

Original phrase is ungrammatical. 'Suits my comes my nerve' is incorrect. Use verbs 'soothe' and 'calm' with plural 'nerves' for idiomatic English. Also join with 'and' for clarity.

× So I'm always the person who is looking at the scene and looking for the scenery, uh, while traveling by.

✓ So I'm always the person who is looking at the scenery while traveling.

Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary preposition 'by'. 'Looking at the scenery' is more natural than 'looking at the scene and looking for the scenery.' Simplify to avoid repetition and correct sentence structure.

× Not necessarily.

✓ Not necessarily.

Short answer 'Not necessarily' is acceptable; no modal error. No change needed.

× I take photos when I reach to my destination, but while travelling I tend to enjoy it very much.

✓ I take photos when I reach my destination, but while travelling I tend to just enjoy it.

Do not use 'reach to'; the correct verb is 'reach' without 'to'. Also 'enjoy it very much' is acceptable but 'tend to just enjoy it' is more natural here.

× I feel calmer, I enjoy the wind, I enjoy the scenery fullest.

✓ I feel calmer, I enjoy the wind, and I enjoy the scenery to the fullest.

'Fullest' needs the phrase 'to the fullest' to be grammatically correct. Add 'and' for proper coordination of clauses.

× So not a very much not very much of a person taking photos via windows.

✓ So I'm not really the kind of person who takes photos through windows.

Original sentence uses 'not a very much' incorrectly. Use 'not really the kind of person who' and 'takes photos through windows' for idiomatic and grammatical expression.

× I consider myself as a sleep person, but recently I am umm, exploring mountains, which makes me happy as well.

✓ I consider myself a sleepy person, but recently I have been exploring mountains, which makes me happy too.

Do not use 'consider myself as'; use 'consider myself a'. 'Sleep' is the wrong adjective; 'sleepy' is correct. Use present perfect progressive 'have been exploring' to indicate recent action continuing into present. Use 'too' instead of repeated 'as well'.

× Comma as well.

✓ (remove)

'Comma as well.' is fragmentary and ungrammatical. Remove it or integrate into the previous sentence as 'which makes me happy too.'

× But I don't like the silence, uh, silence.

✓ But I don't like silence.

Reduce repetition and filler 'uh'. 'The silence' is grammatically possible but 'silence' is more natural here. Remove duplicate word.

× So what happen is when I'm near to sea, I can feel the wave, I can feel the wind, I can hear the sound that makes me so relaxed.

✓ So what happens is when I'm near the sea, I can feel the waves, I can feel the wind, and I can hear the sounds that relax me.

Use third person singular 'happens' for 'what happens'. Use 'near the sea' (no 'to'). Use plural 'waves' and 'sounds' for natural imagery. 'That makes me so relaxed' is acceptable but 'that relax me' becomes 'that relax me' requires 'sounds that relax me' since 'sounds' plural; keep subject-verb agreement. Add 'and' for coordination.

× Feels like a yoga session, whatever it is.

✓ It feels like a yoga session, whatever it is.

Sentence is missing subject 'It'. Add 'It' to form a complete sentence.