Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid slang and unnecessary phrases (e.g. "it sucks", "thank you, yeah"). Aim for 2–4 sentences and correct minor grammar errors ("busy looking at my phone" instead of "busy on looking").

Example: Not really. I'm usually busy looking at my phone, so I don't pay much attention to the view. Also, I find much of Hong Kong's scenery familiar, so it rarely catches my interest.

Suggestion: Respond directly and avoid repetition. Use a clear reason and a linking word to connect ideas. Replace vague phrases like "not worth taking photos" with a specific reason (e.g. "too familiar" or "too crowded"). Keep to 1–3 sentences and correct grammar ("is generally not breathtaking" → "is generally not breathtaking, so I don't take photos").

Example: No, I don't. The views in many areas feel quite familiar to me, so I rarely feel motivated to take photos while travelling.

Suggestion: Good content and personal detail, but make it more concise and coherent. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add two specific reasons linked with words like "because" and "also." Avoid repetition and unnecessary emotional or graphic details; a brief mention of a past experience is enough. Keep within 3–4 sentences and fix minor errors (double "the", repeated "hate").

Example: I prefer the mountains because I find green landscapes relaxing and I enjoy the sound of the wind through trees. Also, I feel less comfortable around water due to a childhood near-drowning experience, so mountainous areas suit me better.

× No, because I'm busy on looking at my phone and I think the scenery in Hong Kong is generally like, it sucks, it's not that breathtaking.

✓ No, because I'm busy looking at my phone and I think the scenery in Hong Kong is generally not that breathtaking.

The phrase 'busy on looking' is incorrect; after 'busy' use the -ing form without a preposition (busy looking). Also 'like, it sucks' is colloquial and redundant; use 'not that breathtaking' for a clearer, formal response. Suggestion: say 'I'm busy looking at my phone' and avoid filler 'like' or slang 'it sucks'.

× So I'm bored.

✓ So I get bored.

'I'm bored' describes a current state, which can be acceptable, but in context describing a habitual reaction while traveling, present simple 'I get bored' or 'I feel bored' better matches the habitual sense. Suggestion: use 'I get bored' for habitual situations.

× So I just focus on my own stuff and not look at the scenery.

✓ So I just focus on my own stuff and don't look at the scenery.

Parallel structure requires auxiliary do for negative present simple: 'do not look' instead of 'not look'. Also maintain present simple 'focus' and 'don't look' for habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'don't' before base verb in negatives.

× Uh, no, because the scenery in Hong Kong is generally not breathtaking, is not worth taking photos.

✓ Uh, no, because the scenery in Hong Kong is generally not breathtaking and is not worth taking photos of.

The verb phrase 'worth taking photos' requires the preposition 'of' at the end: 'worth taking photos of'. Also use 'and' to join the two related ideas. Suggestion: place 'of' after 'photos' and connect clauses properly.

× So I just so I generally don't and yeah.

✓ So I generally don't take photos of it.

The original sentence is fragmented and has extra filler words ('so I just so' and 'and yeah'). Reconstruct the sentence to state the meaning clearly: 'I generally don't take photos of it.' Suggestion: remove fillers and complete the clause with a verb and object.

× I prefer mountains because I love green.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I love the color green.

When referring to a general concept 'green' as a color, we often say 'the color green'. Also when comparing preferences for a category like 'mountains' vs 'the sea', 'the mountains' and 'the sea' are commonly used. Suggestion: say 'I prefer the mountains' and 'the color green'.

× The color green makes me relaxed and I think I love the the sound of nature like the wind more than the sea.

✓ The color green relaxes me, and I think I prefer natural sounds like the wind to the sea.

Use an active verb 'relaxes me' instead of 'makes me relaxed'. Also compare preferences with 'prefer A to B' rather than 'love A more than B' for clarity. Remove duplicate 'the the' and rephrase 'sound of nature like the wind' to 'natural sounds like the wind'. Suggestion: use 'relaxes me' and 'prefer A to B'.

× And yeah, I hate, I hate water because I drowned when I was little.

✓ I hate water because I almost drowned when I was little.

If the speaker actually drowned they would not be alive; use 'almost drowned' to indicate a near-drowning in the past. Use simple past 'drowned' with 'almost' to correct the factual inconsistency. Suggestion: say 'I almost drowned when I was little' to accurately convey the past event.

× So that's why I prefer mountain.

✓ So that's why I prefer the mountains.

'Mountain' singular is incorrect when speaking generally about preferring mountain scenery; use plural 'mountains' or the phrase 'the mountains'. Suggestion: use 'the mountains' for general preference.