Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and clear, but reduce filler words (umm, uh), correct small grammar issues, and make the response more concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences and avoid repeating phrases like “outside the window.”

Example: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching green trees and parks pass by, which feels refreshing to my eyes.

Suggestion: Good answer with a clear reason and an example, but remove fillers and tighten sentences. Use clearer linking words (for example, so) and avoid repeating phrases. Make the past/present intention consistent (e.g., I like to take photos / I take photos).

Example: Yes, I often take photos of beautiful scenery because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I see fields of colorful flowers, I stop and photograph them to keep the memory.

Suggestion: Your answer gives a clear preference and personal reason, but grammar and phrasing need polishing. Avoid awkward constructions like “special emotion to see” and unnecessary words like “and so on.” Start with a direct topic sentence, then provide one or two specific reasons linked logically. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I grew up near the coast and have fond childhood memories. Also, the seaside offers many activities such as swimming and boating, which I enjoy.

× Yes I do, I think while traveling by bus or car, looking out the window is a good way to enjoy the scenery outside the window.

✓ Yes, I do. I think that when traveling by bus or car, looking out of the window is a good way to enjoy the scenery outside.

Error type 8: Verb + -ing form. The original sentence has awkward phrasing and repetition ('outside the window'). 'While' can be replaced by 'when' for naturalness, and 'looking out of the window' is the standard collocation. Also add 'that' to introduce the clause and split into two sentences for clarity.

× Also umm uh see some green trees and plants is helpful to my eyes.

✓ Also, seeing green trees and plants is helpful to my eyes.

Error type 12: Incorrect use of pronouns / clause structure. The clause lacks a subject; 'see' should be the gerund 'seeing' to function as the subject. Fillers like 'umm uh' are omitted in written correction.

× Yes, I do. When I see some, uh, extremely beautiful scenery, I would like to take photos because, uh, I want to use photos to help me remember this moment.

✓ Yes, I do. When I see extremely beautiful scenery, I like to take photos because I want to use them to help me remember the moment.

Error type 10: Verb in the present participle form / modality. 'Would like to' suggests conditional; for habitual action 'like to' or 'I take photos' is more natural. Also replace 'photos' repetition with pronoun 'them' and remove filler words. 'This moment' -> 'the moment' is more natural.

× For example, uh, when I see a lot of beautiful flowers, I will take photos.

✓ For example, when I see many beautiful flowers, I take photos.

Error type 6: Present tense issue. Use simple present 'I take' for habitual actions instead of 'I will take' which implies future. Also replace 'a lot of' with 'many' for countable 'flowers' and remove filler.

× Compared with mountains, I prefer the sea because when I was a child I lived beside the sea, so I have a special emotion to see and I think the sea in includes a lot of activities such as swimming, boating and so on.

✓ Compared with mountains, I prefer the sea because when I was a child I lived by the sea, so I have a special attachment to it, and I think the sea offers many activities such as swimming and boating.

Error type 25: Comparative and superlative errors and related structure issues. Problems include 'special emotion to see' (unnatural) and 'the sea in includes' (ungrammatical). Use 'lived by the sea' and 'have a special attachment to it' to express emotional connection. 'Offers many activities' correctly conveys available activities; remove 'and so on' for conciseness.