Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Perbaiki kelancaran dan kealamian jawaban dengan mengurangi pengulangan dan menggunakan kalimat yang lebih padat serta tata bahasa yang benar. Gunakan satu kalimat topik yang jelas, lalu tambahkan 1–2 detail spesifik yang terhubung dengan kata penghubung (mis. "because", "and"). Juga perbaiki plural/ekspresi yang tepat (mis. "scenery" bukan "sceneries").

Example: Yes, I do. I always look out of the window because I enjoy observing the changing scenery, like houses, trees and occasional animals. It relaxes me and makes the journey more interesting.

Suggestion: Perbaiki penggunaan bahasa tidak formal (mis. "wanna") dan gunakan variasi kosa kata yang lebih tepat. Gabungkan ide-ide yang sama untuk menghindari pengulangan dan tambahkan linking word untuk koherensi (mis. "however").

Example: Sometimes I take photos of the scenery because I want to capture the moment and look back on it later. However, other times I avoid taking pictures so I can fully enjoy the view without distractions.

Suggestion: Perbaiki tata bahasa, pengucapan kata kunci, dan kejelasan ide. Gunakan struktur: pendapat langsung, alasan spesifik, dan contoh singkat. Hindari kesalahan ejaan seperti "see" untuk "sea" dan frasa yang tidak jelas seperti "the few in the inside the sea in the bottom of".

Example: It's difficult to choose, but I prefer the sea because its calmness helps me relax and clear my mind. For example, I enjoy watching waves and the horizon, which feels peaceful and restorative.

× I always do that because I like the sceneries out the window and I love the feeling when I look at them.

✓ I always do that because I like the scenery outside the window and I love the feeling when I look at it.

The noun 'scenery' is an uncountable noun in English and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Use 'scenery' and refer to it with the singular pronoun 'it'. To improve, memorize common uncountable nouns (e.g., scenery, furniture, information) and use singular forms and 'it' for them. Grammar problem type ID:1

× At the houses, at the at the trees, at the animals, at the skies.

✓ At the houses, at the trees, at the animals, at the sky.

Repetition and preposition choice are incorrect. 'At the skies' should be 'at the sky' or better 'the sky' without 'at' depending on meaning. Remove the duplicated 'at the' and use singular 'sky' because 'sky' is usually uncountable in this context. To improve, read sentences aloud to catch repetition and choose prepositions that match the relationship being described. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Sometimes I love to photograph the sceneries outside the window.

✓ Sometimes I love to photograph the scenery outside the window.

Again, 'scenery' is uncountable so 'sceneries' is incorrect. Preposition 'outside the window' is fine. To improve, practice using uncountable nouns correctly. Grammar problem type ID:11

× It's simply because I wanna capture the moment and I can see it whenever I want.

✓ It's simply because I want to capture the moment and I can see it whenever I want.

Informal contraction 'wanna' is inappropriate in standard written responses; use 'want to'. Pronoun 'it' correctly refers to the captured moment or scene. Use standard forms in formal contexts. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Sometimes I don't because I just want to enjoy the moment at that time and I don't want any distractions.

✓ Sometimes I don't because I just want to enjoy the moment and I don't want any distractions.

Phrase 'at that time' is redundant when saying 'sometimes'; removing it improves clarity. Tenses are otherwise correct. To improve, avoid redundant time expressions. Grammar problem type ID:6

× It's really hard to choose actually, but if I should, I would prefer see because see is calmer for me and it gives me peaceful in a way that I can't explain.

✓ It's really hard to choose actually, but if I had to, I would prefer the sea because the sea is calmer for me and it gives me peace in a way that I can't explain.

Multiple issues: modal and conditional phrasing 'if I should' is unnatural; use 'if I had to'. Missing definite article 'the' before 'sea'. Verb 'see' is a typo for 'sea'. 'Gives me peaceful' is incorrect adjective use; use the noun 'peace'. To improve, use correct conditionals ('if I had to'), check for homophones (see/sea), and use appropriate noun/adjective forms. Grammar problem type ID:26

× And I really like the few in the inside the sea in the bottom of.

✓ And I really like the view inside the sea from the bottom.

This sentence has several incorrect words: 'few' should be 'view'; 'in the inside the sea in the bottom of' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'the view inside the sea from the bottom' or better 'the view beneath the surface of the sea'. To improve, choose the correct nouns and prepositions and simplify the structure to convey the intended meaning. Grammar problem type ID:13