Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce filler phrases (e.g., “just”) and correct small grammar points (sit in the window seat → sit by the window).

Example: Yes, I usually look out the window because I enjoy observing the changing landscape. For example, when travelling through the countryside I like to watch farms and rivers pass by, which helps me relax and feel connected to nature.

Suggestion: Provide a complete, coherent answer without hesitations or unfinished sentences. Use one linking word to add a reason or example. Avoid repeating words and finish the thought with a specific instance instead of trailing off.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery to capture memories and share them with friends. For instance, last month I photographed a sunrise over the hills from the car window, and the colours looked amazing on my social media post.

Suggestion: Be direct and use correct vocabulary and grammar. Start with a clear preference sentence, then give one specific reason and one brief contrast using a linking word (e.g., “because”, “however”). Avoid fillers and pronoun errors (which she provides → which it provides).

Example: I prefer the sea because its sound and wide views help me relax and reflect. By contrast, I avoid mountains because I have a fear of heights, so I feel uncomfortable on steep trails.

× Yes, I do look out the windows while I'm traveling as I really appreciate the beauty around me and I just cannot miss the moment.

✓ Yes, I do look out of the window while I'm traveling because I really appreciate the beauty around me and I just cannot miss the moment.

Use of 'look out the windows' is incorrect prepositional usage and plural mismatch with later singular 'the window' preference. This falls under present participle/verb phrase construction and preposition choice. Replace 'look out the windows' with 'look out of the window' (or 'look out the window') and keep number consistent. Also replace 'as' with 'because' for clearer causal connection. Suggestion: use 'look out of the window' and maintain singular/plural consistency with the rest of the sentence.

× Hence, I always prefer to sit on the window so that I can have a look around and just enjoy the beauty and nature around me.

✓ Hence, I always prefer to sit by the window so that I can have a look around and just enjoy the beauty and nature around me.

The phrase 'sit on the window' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'by' or 'at' when referring to sitting next to a window. This is an article/preposition error. Use 'by the window' to indicate location beside the window. Also 'the window' is correct as a specific window in the vehicle.

× Well yes, I love taking photographs of the scenery outside as I'm quite fond of capturing memories and later on posting them on social media.

✓ Well yes, I love taking photographs of the scenery outside because I'm quite fond of capturing memories and later posting them on social media.

Using 'as' for cause can be ambiguous in spoken English; 'because' is clearer. Also 'later on posting' is awkward; 'later posting' is better. This is primarily an incorrect conjunction and word choice issue. Use 'because' for clear causal connection and simplify 'later on'.

× Umm because it gives me quite a relaxing feeling and I feel quite happy doing so.

✓ It gives me a relaxing feeling, and I feel very happy doing so.

Beginning a sentence with 'Umm because' creates a fragment and informal filler. Remove 'umm' and 'because' at the start to form a complete sentence. Also 'quite relaxing feeling' is better as 'a relaxing feeling' and 'quite happy' can be 'very happy' or 'quite happy' depending on emphasis. This is a sentence structure and style correction.

× For example, earlier when I did did that, I got really.

✓ For example, earlier when I did that, I felt really happy.

The sentence has a repetition 'did did' and ends abruptly 'I got really.' This is a sentence structure and word duplication error. Remove the duplicated verb and complete the thought with an adjective such as 'happy' or 'excited' to make the sentence grammatically complete.

× Well I prefer sea to the mountain as it gives me a very calming and soothing effect and I can umm feel more connected to myself and I am in a very calm environment which she provides me.

✓ Well, I prefer the sea to the mountains because it gives me a very calming and soothing feeling, and I feel more connected to myself in that calm environment.

Multiple issues: missing articles ('the sea', 'the mountains'), incorrect preposition 'to the mountain' should be 'to the mountains', awkward clause 'which she provides me' is incorrect pronoun and structure. Replace 'as' with 'because' for clarity. Use 'feeling' rather than 'effect', remove 'umm', and change 'which she provides me' to 'in that calm environment'. This addresses article, preposition, pronoun, and sentence structure errors.

× Whereas mountains are a bit scary to me because I'm phobic to heights so.

✓ Whereas the mountains are a bit scary to me because I'm afraid of heights.

'Phobic to heights' is not correct English; use 'afraid of heights' or 'have a fear of heights'. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'mountains' to be parallel with previous sentence. Remove trailing 'so' which makes the sentence incomplete. This fixes pronoun/idiom usage and sentence completion.