Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct small grammar mistakes, use a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Correct collocations (e.g., 'feel relaxed'), place names ('Kathmandu Valley'), and avoid repeating words. Use a linking word to connect the example.

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel because it helps me relax and enjoy the view. For example, during vacations I go to the outskirts of the Kathmandu Valley, where I can see terraced fields and distant hills, which I find very calming.

Suggestion: Organize the reply with a clear topic sentence and specific reason(s). Fix word choice ('scenery' not 'scenario') and word order. Use a linking word (because/so) to connect reason and give a brief example of what you photograph.

Example: Yes, I take photos of the scenery whenever I travel outside the Kathmandu Valley because I want to create a photo album. For instance, I often photograph mountain ridges, traditional houses and winding roads to remember the trip.

Suggestion: Make your preference clear with a correct topic sentence and avoid unclear or incorrect phrases. Remove unfinished or confusing clauses. Give one or two specific reasons and one brief contrast if you like the sea too. Keep it within four sentences.

Example: I prefer the mountains because they give me a sense of peace and fresh air. For example, hiking among pine forests and looking at the peaks helps me relax. I do like the idea of the sea too, but I haven't had many opportunities to visit it yet.

× Yes, I do tend to look out the window when I'm traveling because it makes me feel very relax, relaxed and also helps me to observe the landscapes.

✓ Yes, I do tend to look out the window when I'm traveling because it makes me feel very relaxed and also helps me observe the landscape.

The adjective 'relaxed' is needed (not the adverb 'relax') to describe the subject's feeling. Use 'relaxed' after 'feel'. Also, 'helps me to observe' is correct but more natural is 'helps me observe'. 'Landscapes' can be singular 'landscape' when referring to scenery in general. Maintain present continuous 'I'm traveling' which fits the habitual action in context.

× For example, during vacations I go to the outskirts of Kathmandu Value where I get to see a lot of beautiful scenarios.

✓ For example, during vacations I go to the outskirts of the Kathmandu Valley where I get to see a lot of beautiful scenery.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'Kathmandu Valley' because it is a specific place. 'Value' is a misspelling of 'Valley'. 'Scenarios' is incorrect here; 'scenery' or 'scenic views' is the correct noun for landscape views. 'Outskirts of the Kathmandu Valley' is the natural prepositional phrase.

× Oh yes, I take photos all the time. I often take pictures of beautiful scenario whenever I'm going out of the Kathmandu Valley.

✓ Oh yes, I take photos all the time. I often take pictures of beautiful scenery whenever I go out of the Kathmandu Valley.

'Scenario' is the wrong noun; use 'scenery' for views. Also maintain consistent tense: use 'I go out' rather than 'I'm going out' for habitual actions. 'Kathmandu Valley' is a proper noun and should be used with 'the' as in the previous correction.

× And I take photos usually because it helps me to prepare a photo album and keep it as a memory.

✓ And I usually take photos because it helps me prepare a photo album and keep it as a memory.

Adverb placement: 'usually' typically comes before the main verb ('take') rather than after the object. 'Helps me prepare' is more natural than 'helps me to prepare'. The rest is fine, but keep word order standard for natural English.

× I'm more fond of mountains because it really provides me a serene and peaceful vibe.

✓ I'm more fond of mountains because they really provide me with a serene and peaceful vibe.

The subject 'mountains' is plural, so the verb must be plural 'provide' not 'provides'. Use 'they' to refer back to 'mountains'. Also include 'with' after 'provide me' for natural phrasing.

× However, I also do like the same but I've never been to 1.

✓ However, I also like the sea, but I've never been to it.

The original sentence is unclear and contains 'the same' and '1' which seem to be errors. Replace 'the same' with 'the sea' to answer the question, and 'been to 1' is likely a placeholder; correct phrase is 'been to it'. Also remove unnecessary 'do' in 'I also do like' for natural speech.