Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, e.g. “Yes, I do.” Then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words and correct word forms. Avoid repetition and awkward phrases (e.g. use scenery not sceneries; use present participle correctly: "traveling").

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy looking out of the bus window because the changing scenery shows different villages and fields in just a few minutes, which I find relaxing. For example, I often watch farmers working in the fields and small markets passing by.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation and repetition; use clearer sentence structure. Begin with a direct answer (e.g. “Sometimes.”), then explain the reason and give a specific example. Use linking words like “because” or “so” and correct verb forms (decide/decided).

Example: Sometimes. If the view looks special—for instance, a dramatic sunset or a mountain valley—I will take a photo because I want to remember it. Otherwise, I usually just watch and enjoy the view without taking pictures.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give specific personal reasons with correct grammar and fewer repetitions. Start with “I prefer the mountains” then add two clear reasons using linking words such as “because” and “for example.” Avoid repeating words and incorrect plurals/phrases.

Example: I prefer the mountains because I grew up near them and I love the fresh air and hiking opportunities. For example, I often go on day hikes to nearby peaks to enjoy the views and exercise.

× Umm I really enjoy looking at the sceneries when I traveling by bus in because it offers it offer me to look at very so many different scenarios in few minutes, so I really enjoy it.

✓ Umm, I really enjoy looking at the scenery when I travel by bus because it allows me to see many different scenes in a few minutes, so I really enjoy it.

Problems: 'sceneries' should be the uncountable noun 'scenery' (ID 1). 'I traveling' lacks the correct verb form; use base form with present simple for routines: 'I travel' (ID 6). 'it offers it offer me to look at' is incorrect verb and structure; use 'allows me to see' (modal/verb structure issue - IDs 4 and 26). 'very so many different' is redundant; choose 'many different' (ID 13). 'in few minutes' needs an article: 'in a few minutes' (ID 22). Suggestions: use 'scenery' for general view, use simple present for habitual actions, use 'allows me to see' for permission/capability, remove redundant modifiers and include articles where needed.

× Sometimes I do, but sometimes I don't. When I when I when I don't, when I don't decided to take photos, I enjoy the scenario scenario, scenario fully and if I scenario feels very beautiful for me, I decided.

✓ Sometimes I do, but sometimes I don't. When I don't decide to take photos, I enjoy the scenery fully, and if a scene feels very beautiful to me, I take a photo.

Problems: Repetition and disfluent phrasing 'When I when I when I' is a sentence structure/fluency error (ID 26). 'When I don't decided' mixes present and past; use present: 'When I don't decide' (ID 5/6). 'the scenario scenario, scenario fully' uses incorrect noun and repetition; use 'the scenery fully' (ID 1). 'if I scenario feels' has wrong word order and pronoun use; use 'if a scene feels... to me' (IDs 12 and 26). 'I decided' incorrectly uses past; use present 'I take a photo' for habitual action (ID 5/6). Suggestions: remove repetitions, keep consistent present tense for habits, use 'scenery' or 'scene' correctly, and use 'decide'/'take' in present simple.

× I prefer mountains over sea because I grew up in a city surrounded by very beautiful mountains and I have no experience experience in sea, so I really enjoy the fresh air and hiking opportunities that they offer mountains offer.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because I grew up in a city surrounded by very beautiful mountains and I have no experience of the sea, so I really enjoy the fresh air and the hiking opportunities they offer.

Problems: Use of prepositions and articles: say 'prefer X to Y' not 'prefer X over Y' (ID 11). 'mountains' and 'sea' need articles when specific: 'the mountains' and 'the sea' (ID 22/17). 'experience in sea' should be 'experience of the sea' or 'experience with the sea' (ID 11). Final clause duplicated 'they offer mountains offer' is repetition/sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestions: use 'prefer ... to ...', include definite articles when referring to specific geographic features, use 'experience of/with' and remove duplicated phrases; keep consistent phrasing.