Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản, loại bỏ tiếng “uh” thừa và sửa các lỗi từ vựng/động từ (ví dụ: “I'll offend” → không đúng; “limit to remember” → không chính xác). Nên trả lời trực tiếp bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ rõ ràng. Sử dụng liên từ (for example, so, because) để mạch lạc. Ví dụ cụ thể: nói bạn thường nhìn ra cửa sổ để ngắm cảnh, chụp ảnh các tòa nhà/điểm thú vị và lưu giữ kỷ niệm của chuyến đi.

Example: Yes. I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing new places. For example, I often take photos of interesting buildings or landscapes so I can remember the trip later.

Suggestion: Sửa lỗi phát âm/thiếu từ và ngữ pháp; tránh cụm từ lộn xộn như “Shut up” hoặc những ký tự không cần thiết. Nên dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng: khẳng định ngắn → lý do → ví dụ cụ thể. Chú ý chia động từ cho đúng (This helps me remember). Cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể về điều bạn chụp (ví dụ: hoàng hôn trên biển, dãy núi).

Example: Yes, I often take photos of landscapes such as mountains or the sea. These photos help me remember the trip, for example I like to capture sunsets over the sea to look back on later.

Suggestion: Loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng (“uh”, “umm”) và sửa cấu trúc ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “I be further see” → “I prefer the sea”). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu 2 lý do cụ thể và dùng liên từ (because, so, and). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể như hoạt động bạn làm (swimming, sunbathing) để câu phong phú hơn.

Example: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. The sea also offers beautiful views and fresh air, so I find it more attractive than the mountains.

× I often look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car. I'll offend uh watching the scenery in sometime take photo of uh interesting building or limit to remember the trip.

✓ I often look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car. I often enjoy watching the scenery and sometimes take photos of interesting buildings to remember the trip.

The original sentence mixes future/modal structure 'I'll offend' (incorrect) and has awkward verb forms and word order. Use simple present 'I often enjoy' and 'sometimes take photos' to match habitual action. Change 'offend' to 'enjoy', 'sometime' to 'sometimes', 'take photo' to plural 'take photos', and 'limit to remember' to 'to remember' for clarity.

× Yes, of course I often take photos about the landscape Shut up mountain sea **** St. This help me remember the chief in a following the trip. I think this picture.

✓ Yes, of course I often take photos of the landscape, such as mountains and the sea. These help me remember the highlights of the trip. I like these pictures.

Use 'take photos of' not 'about', and use 'such as' for examples. 'This help' should be 'These help' to agree with plural 'photos'. 'the chief in a following the trip' is unclear; replace with 'the highlights of the trip'. 'I think this picture' is unclear in context; replace with 'I like these pictures' to express preference.

× Uh, I be further see because I enjoy swimming and relaxing uh, on the beach. The sea has beautiful scenic views in a pleasant umm, breath, which makes it more attractive to me than the mountain.

✓ Uh, I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on the beach. The sea has beautiful scenery and a pleasant breeze, which makes it more attractive to me than the mountains.

'I be further see' is ungrammatical; use 'I prefer the sea' to express preference. 'The mountain' should be plural 'the mountains' to compare generally. 'scenic views in a pleasant umm, breath' should be 'scenery and a pleasant breeze'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.