Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장이 어색하고 단어 선택과 문법 오류가 있습니다. 우선 주제문을 명확히 하여 직접적으로 답한 뒤, 연결어를 사용해 이유나 구체적 상황을 덧붙이세요. 예: ‘Yes, I like looking out of the window when I travel by bus or car.’ 그런 다음 간단한 이유와 예시(예: 드라이브할 때 풍경을 보는 것을 좋아함)를 넣고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요. 또한 단어 철자와 전치사(out of, when travelling)가 올바른지 확인하세요.

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy observing different landscapes. For example, when I drive in the countryside I often stop to take in the view, which I find relaxing.

Suggestion: 답변은 긍정적이고 관련 정보를 제공하지만 문장이 중복되고 문법 오류(‘Jeju Island is scenery is beautiful’)가 있습니다. 주제문 → 구체적 정보(얼마나 자주, 어떤 풍경) → 이유 순으로 구성하세요. 그리고 연결어(For example, because, especially)를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어주세요.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when I visit Jeju Island. For example, the coastal views and volcanic landscapes there are so beautiful that I like to stop and take pictures.

Suggestion: 답변의 구조가 불명확하고 문법 및 단어 선택에 오류가 많습니다. 먼저 직접적으로 선택을 말하고(‘I prefer the sea.’), 그 이유를 한두 문장으로 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(‘because’, ‘when’)를 적절히 사용하고 불필요한 문장 파편은 제거하세요. 표현을 간결하게 유지하고 감정을 표현할 때는 구체적 이유(예: 넓은 수평선, 소리, 색깔)를 덧붙이세요.

Example: I prefer the sea because the wide horizon and the sound of the waves make me feel calm and relaxed. For instance, when I stand on the beach I enjoy watching the endless view of the ocean and breathing the fresh air.

× Yes, I enjoy Tulip out this window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I enjoy looking out of the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car.

The original sentence uses 'Tulip' which appears to be a typo and not a verb. The correct verb phrase is 'look out of' or 'look out the window' and 'looking' is the gerund form needed after 'enjoy'. Use 'out of the window' or 'out the window' to indicate direction. Suggestion: replace 'Tulip' with 'looking' and use 'out of the window' for natural phrasing.

× My ho one of my hobbies is driving a car and I like the scenery for the window.

✓ One of my hobbies is driving, and I like the scenery outside the window.

The original has word-order problems and a typo 'My ho'. 'One of my hobbies is driving' is the correct clause. Use 'outside the window' rather than 'for the window'. Also add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: remove typographical errors and use correct preposition 'outside'.

× Yes, I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car window and my favorite driving course is Jeju.

✓ Yes, I usually take photos of the scenery outside the car window, and my favorite driving route is Jeju.

This sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma to join independent clauses. 'Driving course' is odd in English; 'driving route' or 'driving route on Jeju' is more natural. Suggestion: add comma and replace 'course' with 'route'.

× Jeju Island is scenery is beautiful.

✓ Jeju Island's scenery is beautiful.

The original repeats 'is' and has incorrect word order. Use the possessive form 'Jeju Island's scenery' or 'The scenery on Jeju Island is beautiful.' Suggestion: remove the extra 'is' and use proper noun possessive or a prepositional phrase.

× Actually I like both mountains would be but.

✓ Actually, I like both mountains and the sea, but...

The original sentence has extra words 'would be' and incorrect conjunction structure. Use 'both mountains and the sea' to list two preferences, and 'but' to introduce a contrast. Add a comma after 'Actually'. Suggestion: remove 'would be' and structure as 'I like both X and Y, but...'.

× I choose the sea because the seas wide scene is very overwhelming to me and when I saw the sea.

✓ I choose the sea because the wide expanse of the sea is very overwhelming to me, and when I see the sea I feel amazed.

Errors: 'seas wide scene' is ungrammatical—use 'the wide expanse of the sea' or 'the wide sea view'. 'Seas' needs an apostrophe if possessive. Tense mismatch: 'when I saw the sea' should match present/general preference: 'when I see the sea'. The clause also lacked completion; add an effect 'I feel amazed' or similar. Suggestion: use clear noun phrase 'the wide expanse of the sea' and keep consistent tense.