Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct minor grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like "Umm" and repeating phrases (e.g. "bus or car").

Example: Yes — I often look out the window when I travel by car or bus. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes and local architecture, and I usually listen to music with headphones while I do so, which helps me relax.

Suggestion: Make your answer more structured and avoid long run-on sentences. Give one clear point about taking photos, then briefly explain why and how you share them. Use linking words like "so" or "therefore" to connect ideas and vary vocabulary (e.g. "post" vs "share").

Example: Yes, I often photograph the city while travelling. I usually take short videos or photos and then share them on Instagram or Snapchat as stories, because I like to save and show interesting scenes to my friends.

Suggestion: Answer directly and correct grammar and coherence problems. Use one clear sentence stating your preference, then give two concise, specific reasons joined by linking words (e.g. "because", "also"). Avoid sentence fragments and errors like "The is by phobia of water."

Example: I prefer the mountains because I love their dramatic shapes and peaceful atmosphere, and I also feel more comfortable there since I have a fear of deep water.

× Yes, I love to view the scenery while traveling through bus or car.

✓ Yes, I love to view the scenery while traveling by bus or car.

Use the preposition 'by' with modes of transport (bus, car). 'Through' is incorrect here. Suggestion: say 'by bus' or 'by car' or 'by bus or car.'

× I usually put on my headphones and put on some good songs while enjoying the view through the window of bus or car.

✓ I usually put on my headphones and play some good songs while enjoying the view through the window of the bus or the car.

Use of article is needed: 'the window of the bus/car' or simply 'the bus or car window.' Also 'put on some songs' is awkward — use 'play some songs.' Suggestion: 'play' for audio and include 'the' before 'bus' and 'car.'

× Yes, I usually take pictures of the city outside the car window and I mostly post it on Snapchat or on Instagram as a story and most of the time I take videos also and put on some good related song to the scenery and make it a status.

✓ Yes, I usually take pictures of the city outside the car window and mostly post them on Snapchat or Instagram as a story; most of the time I also take videos and add a suitable song to make it a status.

Several issues: plural agreement with 'pictures' requires 'them' not 'it' (pronoun error/type 12), redundant preposition 'on Instagram' can be 'on Instagram' or just 'Instagram' (preposition fine but keep parallel structure), word order and verb choice: 'take videos also' -> 'also take videos'; 'put on some good related song to the scenery' -> 'add a suitable song.' Suggestion: keep parallel structure and correct pronoun number.

× I prefer a mountains more because I love the structure of the mountains and the vibes they give.

✓ I prefer mountains more because I love their shapes and the vibes they give.

Incorrect article with plural noun: 'a mountains' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'mountains.' Remove 'a' and make plural references consistent. Also improve noun phrase: 'the structure of the mountains' -> 'their shapes' or 'the mountain scenery.'

× Also another reason to like mountains more than seas.

✓ Another reason I like mountains more than the sea is that I have a phobia of water.

Fragment: original lacks a main verb. Combine with following sentence to form a full sentence. Also 'seas' can be 'the sea' for general preference. Suggestion: merge fragments and state the reason clearly.

× The is by phobia of water.

✓ It is because of my phobia of water.

Multiple problems: 'The is by' is ungrammatical. Use 'It is because of' to explain a reason and correct pronoun 'my' to show possession. Suggestion: 'because of my phobia of water' or 'because I am afraid of water.'

× I don't feel comfortable around water.

✓ I don't feel comfortable around water.

Sentence is correct but included to confirm no change needed. 'Around water' is an appropriate prepositional phrase meaning 'near water.'