Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Hãy nói rõ ý chính ngay đầu câu, tránh lặp từ, dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn và thêm một hai chi tiết cụ thể. Chú ý ngữ pháp (chủ ngữ-động từ: 'it helps' -> 'they help') và dùng từ phù hợp (stressful -> stress). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để kết nối ý (for example, which helps...).

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching plants, the sky and sometimes animals, which help me relax and lift my mood. For example, seeing green fields on a long trip makes me feel calm and less stressed.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ và nói rành mạch; dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng để giải thích lý do (e.g., to keep memories, to share on social media). Thay từ 'demonstrate' bằng từ phù hợp như 'show' hoặc 'share'. Giữ câu ngắn hơn và dùng linking words như 'and' hoặc 'so'.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the window. I also take pictures with my family and friends to keep memories and to share them later on social media. This way I can remember special moments from our trips.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp; bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer the sea). Thêm lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn. Sử dụng thì và cấu trúc chuẩn (e.g., 'Vietnam has many beautiful beaches').

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I love swimming, especially in the ocean. Vietnam has many beautiful beaches, so I often go to the coast to relax and enjoy water activities like snorkeling.

× Yes of course, I really want to see the sceneries such as plants, the sky and even the animals and it help.

✓ Yes, of course. I really want to see the scenery such as plants, the sky and even animals, and it helps.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun in English, so we should not use the plural form 'sceneries'. Also 'animals' is fine plural without 'the' unless referring to specific animals. The verb 'help' must agree with the singular noun 'it' referring to 'scenery', so use 'helps'. Use commas and periods to separate ideas for clarity. Suggestion: Use uncountable nouns correctly and ensure subject-verb agreement (scenery -> helps).

× It helps me reduce stressful and bring me a lot of and increase the mood.

✓ It helps me reduce stress, lifts my mood, and makes me feel better.

'Stressful' is an adjective; the correct noun is 'stress'. The original sentence has missing objects and awkward constructions. Use 'lifts my mood' or 'improves my mood' instead of 'increase the mood'. Keep verbs parallel: 'reduce stress, lift my mood, and make me feel better.' Suggestion: Replace incorrect adjective with the noun and use parallel verbs for clarity.

× Yes, of course I enjoy taking photo of the sceneries outside the window.

✓ Yes, of course. I enjoy taking photos of the scenery outside the window.

'Photo' should be plural 'photos' when speaking generally. As before, 'scenery' is uncountable, so use 'scenery' not 'sceneries'. Suggestion: Use plural for countable items (photos) and uncountable form for scenery.

× Moreover, I would love to take to take some pictures with my family and friends to keep the memory, to keep the memories and also uh, to demonstrate.

✓ Moreover, I would love to take some pictures with my family and friends to keep the memories and to show them to others.

The phrase 'take to take' is a repetition error. 'Keep the memory, to keep the memories' is redundant. 'To demonstrate' is vague; likely intended meaning is 'to show them' or 'to demonstrate later'. Restructure for clarity and remove repetition. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and redundant phrases; use clear verbs like 'show' or 'share.'

× Actually, I prefer visiting going to the sea to visiting the mountain because I love swimming, especially in the sea and I and in Vietnam has a lot of of outstanding sea that I can really want to enjoy.

✓ Actually, I prefer going to the sea rather than visiting the mountains because I love swimming, especially in the sea, and Vietnam has many outstanding beaches that I really want to enjoy.

Mixed and repeated gerunds ('visiting going') should be corrected to 'going'. Use 'rather than' for preferences. 'The mountain' should be plural 'the mountains' or 'mountain' changed accordingly. 'I and in Vietnam has a lot of of outstanding sea' is ungrammatical: subject-verb agreement and word choice wrong. Use 'Vietnam has many outstanding beaches.' Also remove repeated words 'of of' and 'I and'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer A rather than B', ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose correct nouns ('beaches' instead of 'sea') where appropriate.