Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and vocabulary mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "spend spend") and complete any truncated words ("using smart" → "using my smartphone").

Example: No, I don't look out the window very often when I'm travelling by bus or car. Usually I read books or use my smartphone to catch up on messages or articles, so I prefer to focus on those activities during the journey.

Suggestion: Give a single clear topic sentence and follow with one specific reason using a linking word. Fix sentence fragments and choose appropriate collocations (e.g., "take photos of the scenery").

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it helps me preserve memories of beautiful places. For example, I usually photograph interesting light or coastal views to look back on later.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and two concise supporting details linked logically. Correct grammar ("I like relax" → "I like relaxing") and avoid hanging connectors like "and also." Mention one specific activity and one reason for preference.

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy water sports such as surfing, and I also find relaxing on the beach very refreshing. For instance, I often go swimming and then lie on the sand to unwind after a busy week.

× No, I don't look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car that much.

✓ No, I don't look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car very often.

The original sentence uses 'that much' which is informal and slightly awkward in this context. Replacing it with 'very often' fits standard present simple usage for habits and sounds more natural. Keep present simple because the question asks about general habit.

× It's because I usually spend spend time reading books or using smart.

✓ It's because I usually spend time reading books or using my smartphone.

There is a repetition error 'spend spend' and an incomplete noun phrase 'using smart'. Correct the duplication and supply the appropriate noun 'my smartphone'. The sentence structure requires 'spend time' + verb-ing (gerund), so 'spend time reading' is correct.

× Yes, I like taking photos of scene with the scenery outside the car window.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of the scenery outside the car window.

The phrase 'photos of scene with the scenery' is redundant and incorrect. Use the gerund 'taking' because 'like' is followed by verb + -ing. Also use 'the scenery' with 'the' to refer to the specific view outside the window.

× It because.

✓ It's because it allows me to preserve memories of beautiful views.

'It because.' is a sentence fragment (missing auxiliary verb and subject). Provide a complete clause: 'It's because...' followed by a reason. Also 'it enables me to preserve memories of beautiful scenery' is acceptable; I used 'allows me' and 'views' for naturalness.

× It enables me to preserve memories of beautiful scenery.

✓ It enables me to preserve memories of the beautiful scenery.

The original is mostly correct but adding the definite article 'the' makes it clearer that the speaker refers to the scenery seen outside the window. No tense change is needed; keep present simple.

× I prefer the sea to the mountains because I like marine sports such as surfing and also.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains because I like marine sports such as surfing.

The original ends with an extra conjunction 'and also' with no continuation, creating an incomplete sentence. Remove the dangling connector. 'Prefer...to' is correct for expressing preference.

× I like relax, relaxing at the beach.

✓ I like relaxing at the beach.

The phrase 'I like relax, relaxing' is ungrammatical and redundant. After 'like' use the gerund 'relaxing'. Remove the extra word and comma for a correct, concise sentence in present simple expressing a general preference.