Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and start with a clear topic sentence. Avoid repeating similar ideas and reduce filler words. Use one or two specific details (what you notice, an emotion or effect) and a linking word to connect ideas. Keep the answer within 3-4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I do. I usually look out the window when I travel by car because I find natural scenery calming and beautiful. For example, I enjoy watching forests and rivers pass by, which helps me relax during long journeys.

Suggestion: Correct unclear words and be precise about how and why you take photos. Mention one or two specific subjects and the reason, using linking words to make it coherent. Avoid confusing or incorrect nouns (e.g., "Carpenter").

Example: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because the countryside looks very tranquil. For example, I like capturing sunsets and rolling hills as the changing light creates beautiful colours in the sky.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and remove hesitations. Provide one or two specific reasons and a brief example or comparison to show depth. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to make the answer flow logically.

Example: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy seeing green hills and snowy peaks, which always relax me. For example, hiking in the mountains makes me feel refreshed and gives me a peaceful break from city life.

× Car I enjoy traveling and I look out from the window when I travel by bus or car.

✓ I enjoy traveling, and I look out of the window when I travel by bus or car.

Original sentence begins with 'Car' which is a fragment and misplaced; likely intended to say 'By car' or omit. Also 'look out from the window' is non-idiomatic; correct phrase is 'look out of the window'. Combine clauses with a comma and conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: remove the stray word 'Car' and use 'look out of the window'.

× I find natural scenery very breathtakingly beautiful and very calm which makes my journey enjoyable.

✓ I find natural scenery breathtakingly beautiful and very calming, which makes my journey enjoyable.

Using both 'very breathtakingly beautiful and very calm' is awkward: 'breathtakingly' modifies 'beautiful' and 'calm' should be 'calming' to describe effect on the journey. Combine ideas: use 'calming' as adjective describing effect. Suggestion: use parallel adjectives and correct adjective forms.

× Yes, I often take photos of scenery outside from my Carpenter because I find countryside very tranquil and I love watching changing light and colour.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside from my car because I find the countryside very tranquil, and I love watching the changing light and colour.

'from my Carpenter' is incorrect and likely a typo for 'car'. Also 'photos of scenery outside' needs article: 'the scenery outside'. 'Countryside' as a general noun here needs 'the countryside'. Add 'the' before 'changing light'. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: fix the typo, add definite articles where needed.

× For example, I love taking photos of sunset and rolling hills.

✓ For example, I love taking photos of the sunset and rolling hills.

When referring to a specific phenomenon like 'sunset' in general photo-taking contexts, use 'the sunset' or plural 'sunsets'. Adding 'the' makes the sentence sound natural. Suggestion: use 'the sunset' or 'sunsets' depending on intended meaning.

× I usually prefer mountains because I love seeing hills, uh, covered with greenery and sometimes with snow, and it reminds me how higher you can go and how higher it touches the sky.

✓ I usually prefer the mountains because I love seeing hills covered with greenery and sometimes snow, and they remind me how high you can go and how high they reach the sky.

Several issues: add 'the' before 'mountains' for specificity. Remove filler 'uh'. 'Covered with greenery and sometimes with snow' is fine but 'and it reminds me' is wrong because the plural subject 'hills' requires 'they remind me'. Use 'how high' not 'how higher'. Also 'how high they reach the sky' is more natural than 'how higher it touches the sky'. Suggestion: match pronouns to plural nouns and use correct comparative/adverb form 'high'.

× And I love seeing them because it relaxes my mind and calms me.

✓ And I love seeing them because they relax my mind and calm me.

The subject 'them' (the mountains/hills) is plural, so the verbs should be plural: 'they relax' and 'calm', not 'it relaxes' and 'calms'. Ensure subject-verb agreement when using pronouns referring to plural nouns.