Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장 구조를 더 명확히 하고 불필요한 중복을 줄이세요. 예를 들어 주제 문장으로 간단히 대답한 뒤(Yes/No + 이유) 연결어(for example, especially 등)를 사용해 구체적 사례를 덧붙이세요. 또한 관사와 단수/복수 형태(“in the cars” → “in cars” 또는 “in the car” 등)를 정확히 하세요. 발화는 최대 4문장 이내로 유지하고 같은 내용(‘in Korea…’)을 반복하지 마세요.

Example: Yes, I enjoy looking out of car or bus windows, especially when I'm visiting new places such as cities in Europe. For example, I like to notice architectural details and changing landscapes as we pass. However, I rarely do this on short, familiar trips at home because the scenery feels repetitive.

Suggestion: 문법(시제와 표현)을 교정하고 문장을 간결하게 만드세요. ‘as I said before’ 같은 표현은 불필요하므로 빼고, 비교 표현은 간단히 정리하세요(‘I prefer photos to videos’). 또한 구체적 이유를 하나 추가하면 좋습니다(예: 사진으로 기억을 남기기 때문). 반복을 줄이고 어순과 관사 오류를 고치세요.

Example: Yes. When I visit new places, I usually take photos rather than videos because photos are easier to organize and share later. I rarely photograph scenery at home though, since local views are familiar and less interesting to me.

Suggestion: 좋은 답변입니다. 다만 말을 매끄럽게 하고 채우기 표현(uh)을 줄이세요. 이유를 하나 더 추가해 구체성을 높이면 좋습니다. 예를 들어 해변에서 하는 활동(걷기, 수영)이나 감정적 이유(여유, 스트레스 해소)를 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽고 풍부한 답변이 됩니다.

Example: I prefer the sea because standing on the beach I can see the wide horizon, which makes me feel relaxed and free. Also, I enjoy walking along the shore and listening to the waves, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

× I really like to watch the views while I'm in the cars or the buses, especially when I'm traveling the new places, for example, Europe or the other countries.

✓ I really like to watch the views while I'm in cars or buses, especially when I'm traveling to new places, for example Europe or other countries.

Using definite articles 'the' before plural countable nouns like cars, buses, places, countries is incorrect when speaking generally. Also 'traveling the new places' is ungrammatical; use 'traveling to new places'. Remove extra articles and use the preposition 'to' with 'traveling' to indicate destination. Suggestion: Omit 'the' for general references (cars, buses, places) and use 'traveling to new places'. Ensure word order: 'for example Europe or other countries'.

× Yes, as I said you before, if I travel the new place like Europe or the different continents, then I would like to do that.

✓ Yes, as I said before, if I travel to a new place like Europe or different continents, then I would like to do that.

'As I said you before' misuses object pronoun order; correct phrase is 'as I said before'. 'Travel the new place' is wrong: use 'travel to a new place'. 'The different continents' is unnecessary definite article when speaking generally. Suggestion: Use 'as I said before' and 'travel to a new place' and drop 'the' before 'different continents'.

× I rather than taking a video, I would like to taking a photo usually.

✓ Rather than taking a video, I usually prefer taking a photo.

Sentence structure is awkward and duplicate subjects cause error. 'I would like to taking' incorrectly mixes 'would like to' + gerund; after 'would like to' you need base verb ('take'), but here meaning suits 'prefer taking' or 'would rather take'. Rephrase to 'Rather than taking a video, I usually prefer taking a photo' or 'I would rather take a photo than a video'.

× But in Korea, as I said before, I don't like it.

✓ But in Korea, as I said before, I don't like it.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no article correction needed. Keep as is. Note: 'it' refers to watching scenery; ensure context is clear.

× I prefer the sea because, uh, in front of the beach I can see the entire horizontal line and it makes me feel free.

✓ I prefer the sea because, in front of the beach I can see the entire horizon and it makes me feel free.

'The entire horizontal line' is an unnatural phrase. Use the noun 'horizon' instead of 'horizontal line'. 'Horizon' is singular and correct here. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: say 'I can see the entire horizon'.