Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitation sounds (umm) and repetition (inspiration used twice). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "scenery" not "sceneries").

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when travelling by bus or car because I find the scenery inspiring. For example, I often notice interesting buildings and countryside views that spark ideas for my paintings. As a result, watching the landscape helps me relax and be creative during journeys.

Suggestion: Clarify and simplify your answer. Begin with a direct response, then give a specific example and a short reason. Avoid unclear phrases ("peculiar or wet", "a week can just make curiosity") and awkward expressions ("I'm a sense of lover").

Example: Yes, I often take photos from the car window when something catches my eye. For example, I once photographed an unusual sunset reflected in a lake, which looked stunning through the trees. I take pictures because they help me remember unique moments and use them later for reference in my artwork.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid contradictions. If you prefer both, say so clearly and compare them briefly using linking words. Correct common mistakes ("see" → "sea", "U.S." → "us"). Reduce filler words and give specific reasons for each preference.

Example: I enjoy both the sea and the mountains, but if I had to choose I slightly prefer the sea because the sound of waves relaxes me and gives a feeling of freedom. However, I also love mountains for their dramatic views and hiking opportunities, so I often choose my destination based on whether I want relaxation or outdoor activity.

× I love losing myself into scenery around me and it is at the same time it's also an inspiration because umm, I love depicting umm sceneries and getting involved in what I see umm, which is quite interesting.

✓ I love losing myself in the scenery around me and at the same time it is also an inspiration because I love depicting sceneries and getting involved in what I see, which is quite interesting.

Use 'losing myself in' not 'into' with 'lose oneself in' (phrasal verb). Remove the redundant contraction 'it's' after 'it is' and reduce filler words. 'Scenery' is usually uncountable; 'the scenery' or 'sceneries' may be used depending on meaning. Use consistent gerund forms 'depicting' and 'getting' and simplify for clarity.

× When I find something very peculiar or wet, a week can just make curiosity.

✓ When I find something peculiar or unusual, it can spark my curiosity.

Original sentence has incorrect words and structure: 'wet' and 'a week can just make curiosity' make no sense. Use 'spark my curiosity' or 'arouse my curiosity'. Keep subject 'it' for the situation and verb 'can spark' to express possibility.

× Of course I do, and I like it because I love particular sunsets or scenarios taking place in front of my eyes.

✓ Of course I do, and I like it because I love particular sunsets or scenes taking place before my eyes.

Use 'scenes' rather than 'scenarios' for visual sights; 'in front of my eyes' is better expressed as 'before my eyes'. 'Particular' is acceptable but 'specific' can also work. Ensure adjective-noun collocation is natural.

× I'm a sense of lover and also I like to catch the moment and to grasp it with photography.

✓ I have a love of atmosphere, and I also like to capture the moment and preserve it with photography.

Phrase 'I'm a sense of lover' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'I have a love of atmosphere' or 'I am a lover of atmosphere'. Use 'capture the moment' (common collocation) and 'preserve it with photography' for clarity. Avoid unnecessary 'to' before 'grasp' in parallel structure.

× I generally prefer to see because, uh, when I'm at to see, I feel at ease, I feel peaceful, and at the same time I have the sense of freedom that umm, anywhere else in the world gives me.

✓ I generally prefer the sea because when I'm at the sea, I feel at ease and peaceful, and at the same time I have a sense of freedom that nowhere else in the world gives me.

Use 'the sea' (definite article) not 'to see' or 'see'. Preposition 'at the sea' or 'by the sea' is correct. 'Anywhere else' should be 'nowhere else' to express uniqueness. Remove filler words and redundant commas for fluency.

× But also the mountain gives U.S. special landscapes and views.

✓ But the mountains also give us special landscapes and views.

'U.S.' is incorrectly capitalized and formatted; intended pronoun is 'us'. Use plural 'mountains' to refer generally, and keep lowercase 'us'. Word order 'also' placement adjusted for natural flow.

× So overall, they must admit they like both.

✓ So overall, I must admit I like both.

Pronoun mismatch: 'they' does not refer to the speaker. Use 'I must admit' for the student. 'Must admit' expresses a personal concession; word order corrected for natural English.