Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and attempts to give reasons, but it is slightly wordy and contains awkward phrases (e.g. “a sort of exercise,” “save up some special memories”). To improve, give a clear topic sentence, then one specific supporting detail, using a linking word to connect ideas. Keep sentences concise and avoid unclear metaphors.

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I often watch changing buildings and countryside because it helps me remember interesting places I pass, and I sometimes note them down so I can visit them later.

Suggestion: Your answer gives personal preference but is unclear in places and uses informal filler ("I mean"). The phrase about becoming "more confident" is vague. Improve by stating clearly when and why you take photos, use one linking word, and provide a specific example of a memorable photo.

Example: Yes, sometimes I take photos, especially when the view is striking. For instance, last month I photographed a bright orange sunset behind a line of trees because it looked dramatic, and the photos help me remember the colours and the mood of the scene.

Suggestion: The answer conveys a preference but is confused and contains grammatical errors and hesitations ("C fan," "they don't like"). To improve, state your choice clearly with a topic sentence, give two specific reasons using linking words, and avoid fillers. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g. "crystal-clear water").

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I feel relaxed by the sound of waves and the coastal air. Moreover, I enjoy walking on sandy beaches and swimming in crystal-clear water, which makes seaside holidays more enjoyable for me.

× I usually do. Sometimes I get lost in what I see while travelling and I particularly like it because it is a sort of exercise that I do to save up some special memories or views and use them later.

✓ I usually do. Sometimes I get lost in what I see while travelling, and I particularly like it because it is a kind of exercise I do to save special memories or views and use them later.

Sentence contains awkward phrasing and redundant words; 'a sort of' is informal and 'save up some special memories' is unidiomatic. Use present simple consistently: 'a kind of exercise' and 'save special memories' are clearer. Also add a comma before 'and' connecting independent clauses to improve sentence structure.

× Sometimes I do, especially when they get my attention.

✓ Sometimes I do, especially when they catch my attention.

The pronoun 'they' is vague here; better to use a verb that collocates with 'attention'. 'Catch my attention' is the correct collocation. This clarifies the subject (the scenery or scenes) without needing an explicit pronoun.

× I'm a sunset lover and I always do my best to grasp the moment and to photograph it because I mean, it's a good way to become more confident and at the same time aware of the woods surrounding you.

✓ I'm a sunset lover and I always try to seize the moment and photograph it because it's a good way to become more confident and, at the same time, more aware of the woods surrounding me.

Several issues: 'do my best to grasp the moment' is awkward—use 'try to seize the moment'. 'I mean' is unnecessary in formal speech. Pronoun 'you' should match speaker perspective; use 'me'. Add parallel structure 'more confident and more aware' and commas for clarity.

× I'm much more of C fan because they don't like particularly the mountains.

✓ I'm much more of a sea person because I don't particularly like the mountains.

Original has multiple errors: 'C fan' seems to be a typo for 'sea' and lacks article; 'they' incorrectly refers to the speaker. Use 'a sea person' or 'a fan of the sea' and first-person 'I'. Also move 'particularly' to 'don't particularly like' for natural adverb placement.

× It is a landscape which does not fit me and umm, at the sea I feel at ease.

✓ Mountain landscapes don't suit me, and at the sea I feel at ease.

Awkward passive phrasing 'It is a landscape which does not fit me' should be rendered as active 'don't suit me'. Combine sentences cleanly and remove filler 'umm'. Ensure subject 'mountain landscapes' matches the idea.

× Also the coastal landscape, the crystally water, uh, woods and beaches, et cetera.

✓ I also like coastal landscapes, the crystal-clear water, woods, and beaches, etc.

'Crystally' is not a correct adjective; use 'crystal-clear'. Use plural 'landscapes' to match list and parallel nouns. Remove filler 'uh' and replace 'et cetera' with 'etc.' or better, finish the list naturally.

× Umm about my favorite landscapes.

✓ Those are some of my favorite landscapes.

Fragment 'about my favorite landscapes' lacks a main verb and is a sentence fragment. Replace with a complete sentence that conveys the intended meaning, and remove filler 'Umm'.