Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, phát âm một số từ, và tổ chức câu rõ ràng hơn. Cụ thể: (1) Dùng danh từ không đếm được và số nhiều đúng (scenery không thêm -s; furrow có thể thay bằng fields), (2) Tránh từ thừa và tiếng lấp (uh), dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, such as, and), (3) Viết câu ngắn gọn tối đa 3–4 câu: mở đầu trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể và cảm nhận cá nhân. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cảnh bạn nhìn thấy (màu sắc, hoạt động) để tăng tính cụ thể.

Example: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car or bus. I enjoy watching natural scenery, such as green mountains, a blue lake and cultivated fields. For example, last week I saw farmers working in the fields and a group of birds flying over the lake, which made me feel relaxed and more energetic.

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp (singular/plural và động từ), trật tự từ và dùng liên từ rõ ràng. Cụ thể: (1) Sử dụng thì và dạng từ đúng: "taking photos" (plural) hoặc "take a photo", "it's" cho chủ ngữ rõ ràng; (2) Dùng liên từ để so sánh và giải thích (so, because, therefore); (3) Nói rõ lý do bạn thích quay video (ví dụ: lưu lại chuyển động, ánh sáng). Hạn chế lặp từ như "better" hai lần liên tiếp.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, but sometimes it is difficult to capture a clear picture. Therefore, I usually make a short video instead because videos record movement and changing light more accurately. For example, a video of a sunset over the fields shows the colours and motion better than a single photo.

Suggestion: Cần rõ ràng trong phát biểu và dùng từ vựng chính xác. Cụ thể: (1) Tránh tiếng lấp (uh) và chỉnh cụm từ không chính xác ("screaming" sai; có thể là "swimming"), (2) Nêu rõ lý do với cấu trúc mạch lạc: nêu sở thích, giải thích và ví dụ; (3) Sử dụng liên từ để liệt kê lý do (for example, because, and). Nếu có thể, mô tả 1–2 hoạt động cụ thể bạn thích ở biển.

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains because there are many activities to enjoy, such as swimming and sunbathing. For example, during summer I like to swim in the warm water and relax on the beach, which makes holidays more lively and enjoyable.

× When traveling by car or bus I enjoy looking out the window at the sceneries.

✓ When traveling by car or bus I enjoy looking out the window at the scenery.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun in English and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Use the singular uncountable form 'scenery'. Suggestion: Use uncountable nouns in singular form (e.g., 'scenery', 'furniture').

× I can see beautiful landscape like mountains, lake, furrows and I also prefer natural beauty like uh the birds, the sow and I feel more energetic when I look out.

✓ I can see beautiful landscapes such as mountains, lakes, and fields, and I also enjoy natural features like birds and trees, and I feel more energetic when I look out.

Several issues: 'landscape' as a general plural should be 'landscapes'; 'lake' should be plural 'lakes' when listing multiple items; 'furrows' is an odd word for scenery—'fields' is more natural; 'the birds, the sow' is incorrect: 'sow' (female pig) is unlikely here; likely meant 'trees' or 'snow'. Ensure nouns in lists agree in number. Suggestion: Use plural forms when listing multiple countable items and choose appropriate vocabulary for natural features.

× I enjoy taking photo of the scenery outside the car windows, but sometimes I feel that really difficult to take a photo so I instead of that I make a video.

✓ I enjoy taking photos of the scenery outside the car window, but sometimes I find it really difficult to take a photo, so instead I make a video.

'Taking photo' should be 'taking photos' (plural or 'a photo'); 'feel that really difficult' is ungrammatical—use 'find it really difficult'; 'instead of that I make a video' is awkward—use 'so instead I make a video'. Suggestion: Use 'find it + adjective' to express difficulty and use gerund/plural correctly ('taking photos').

× I enjoy taking photo of the scenery outside the car windows, but sometimes I feel that really difficult to take a photo so I instead of that I make a video.

✓ I enjoy taking photos of the scenery outside the car window, but sometimes I find it really difficult to take a photo, so instead I make a video.

'the car windows' is unnecessary plural and article use is inconsistent; use 'the car window' to refer to the window of the car in general. Suggestion: Use singular form with 'the' when speaking of the window you look through in a vehicle.

× It's better for me when I look at and I feel that making videos better.

✓ It's better for me when I watch them, and I feel that making videos is better.

Sentence fragments and tense/predication errors: 'look at' needs an object ('them' or 'the scenery'), and 'making videos better' lacks a verb—add 'is'. Suggestion: Provide objects after verbs and include appropriate linking verbs (is/are) for clarity.

× I prefer the sea to mountains because we have a lot of activity on the seas like uh screaming sunbathing sky and I feel that summer time go to the seas is better.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains because there are many activities at the seaside like swimming and sunbathing, and I feel that going to the sea in summer is better.

Multiple problems: missing article 'the mountains'; 'on the seas' should be 'at the seaside' or 'by the sea'; 'screaming' is wrong word for 'swimming'; 'summer time go to the seas' is ungrammatical—use 'going to the sea in summer'. Suggestion: Use correct collocations ('go to the sea', 'swimming', 'sunbathing') and include articles where needed ('the mountains').

× I prefer the sea to mountains because we have a lot of activity on the seas like uh screaming sunbathing sky and I feel that summer time go to the seas is better.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains because there are many activities at the seaside like swimming and sunbathing, and I feel that going to the sea in summer is better.

Prepositions: use 'to' for preference comparisons ('prefer A to B'), use 'at' or 'by' for location near the sea, not 'on the seas'. Also use 'in summer' for seasons. Suggestion: Learn common preposition collocations for places and seasons (e.g., 'in summer', 'at the seaside').