Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix verb forms and articles (e.g., 'the scenery', 'helps me relax').

Example: Yes. I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery helps me relax after a busy day. For example, I enjoy watching trees and clouds pass by since it makes me feel calm and refreshed.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer first, then explain with one specific condition and an example. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., 'it depends', 'if the car stops', 'photos will be blurred').

Example: It depends. If the car stops or moves very slowly, I will take photos of the view because otherwise the pictures will be blurred. For instance, I once captured a clear photo of a seaside sunset when our car stopped at a viewpoint.

Suggestion: Answer directly and organize supporting reasons with linking words. Use correct nouns and plural/singular forms (e.g., 'air is fresh', 'the sun shines', 'views are beautiful'). Give one or two specific examples to support your preference.

Example: I prefer the mountains because they offer fresh air and spectacular views. For example, I love hiking to a mountain summit at sunrise, when the clear sky and wide panorama make the experience especially peaceful and memorable.

× 'I would say yes I like to look out the windows at the sceneries when traveling by bus or car since it's helped me to chill up and after the the busy days help me to relax so and the beautiful things are through the window is.'

✓ 'I would say yes. I like to look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car because it helps me relax after busy days, and the view through the window is beautiful.'

'sceneries' and 'windows' are incorrect here: scenery is an uncountable noun and should be singular, and window as a general view reference is singular. Also verb agreement: use present simple 'helps' not 'helped' for habitual action. Remove redundant words and reorder for clarity. Suggestion: use 'the scenery' (uncountable) and 'the view through the window' for natural phrasing.'},{

× 'Well, I would say it depends on the situations because umm, well we sit in the car, we keep moving at least stop down so I can take the photo.'

✓ 'Well, I would say it depends on the situation because when we sit in the car and keep moving, we rarely stop, so I cannot take a clear photo.'

'depends on the situations' should be 'depends on the situation' (general noun use). Tense and aspect: use present simple for habitual truth 'we sit' can be okay but 'we keep moving at least stop down' is ungrammatical; clarify with 'we keep moving' and negative 'rarely stop' and present simple 'cannot take' to express inability in that context.'},{

× 'Otherwise the photo will get kind of blur and I will take photo if there's the scene sceneries really beautiful with like a seas.'

✓ 'Otherwise the photo will become kind of blurry, and I will take a photo if the scenery is really beautiful, for example, the sea.'

'get kind of blur' is incorrect; use adjective 'blurry' or 'become blurry'. 'I will take photo' needs the article 'a photo'. 'the scene sceneries' is redundant; use 'the scenery'. 'with like a seas' is ungrammatical; clarify as 'for example, the sea.' Adverb placement adjusted for natural flow.'},{

× 'Well, actually I prefer the mountains because mountains are a place of a great natural beauty.'

✓ 'Well, actually I prefer the mountains because they are places of great natural beauty.'

Using 'mountains are a place' mixes plural subject with singular complement. Either use singular 'a mountain is a place' or plural 'they are places'. Also 'great natural beauty' does not need the article 'a'.'},{

× 'There's more on the natural beauty view and the airs are fresh and the sun shine brightly in the clear blue sky, while we also can see the sunrise and sunshine.'

✓ 'There are more natural views, the air is fresh, and the sun shines brightly in the clear blue sky; we can also see the sunrise.'

'There's more on the natural beauty view' is awkward and uses wrong preposition; better 'There are more natural views' or 'There is more natural beauty'. 'airs' should be singular 'air' (uncountable). 'the sun shine' needs third person singular 'shines'. 'sunrise and sunshine' is redundant; keep 'sunrise' or 'sunshine' depending on intent.'},{

× 'So from on the top of the mountain is really beautiful.'

✓ 'So the view from the top of the mountain is really beautiful.'

'from on the top of the mountain' combines two prepositions incorrectly; use 'from the top of the mountain'. The sentence also lacks a clear subject; add 'the view' to complete the idea and improve clarity.'}]}} PMID:0.1234567890