Part 1
Examiner
Do you prefer typing or handwriting?
Candidate
I prefer handwriting because my handwriting is near an easier for me to remember then umm write it once and for example I write in hand, I draw some diagrams and use arrows which may which make me easier to.
Examiner
Do you type on a desktop or laptop keyboard every day?
Candidate
I tell Typhoon wrapped up because it's purple and sometimes I work in cafes. I usually use it for umm, emails and browsing websites and writing reporters and some kind of that work. It's very convenient.
Examiner
When did you learn how to type on a keyboard?
Candidate
I'll learn to type on keyboard. When I was in middle school my parents bought me a new computers and then and I was so excited not to discover how I how fast I could write and how the cable sound kept me on maintaining rhythm.
Examiner
How do you improve your typing?
Candidate
I put my typing by umm using online typing games and and practice for about 15 minutes a day and which which help me improve my typing speed and accuracy and that would be very effective for me.
Do you prefer typing or handwriting?
Score: 62.0Suggestion: 질문에 직접 답하고 이유를 명확하고 간결하게 정리하세요. 불필요한 반복(예: "umm", 중복 표현)과 문법 오류를 줄여 문장을 자연스럽게 만드세요. 또한 구체적인 예시(어떤 종류의 다이어그램, 어떤 과목에 도움이 되는지)를 추가해 설명을 풍부하게 하세요.
Example: I prefer handwriting because it helps me remember information better. For example, when I take notes for lectures I draw diagrams and arrows to link ideas, which makes review much easier.
Do you type on a desktop or laptop keyboard every day?
Score: 55.0Suggestion: 질문에 맞춰 데스크탑 또는 노트북 중 무엇을 쓰는지 명확히 답하세요. 불필요한 비유나 무관한 정보는 빼고, 사용 용도(이메일, 리서치 등)를 구체적으로 나열하며 연결어로 문장을 매끄럽게 이어주세요.
Example: I mainly use a laptop because it's portable. I often take it to cafes to check emails, browse websites and write reports, which makes it very convenient.
When did you learn how to type on a keyboard?
Score: 60.0Suggestion: 과거 시제를 사용해 언제 배웠는지 분명히 말하세요. 감정이나 경험을 설명할 때 문장을 간결하게 유지하고 이유(예: 연습의 동기)를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 불필요한 반복과 문법 오류를 고치세요.
Example: I learned to type when I was in middle school after my parents bought me a computer. I was excited to practice and quickly improve my speed, and the keyboard's clicking helped me keep a steady rhythm.
How do you improve your typing?
Score: 68.0Suggestion: 개선 방법을 구조적으로 제시하세요: 방법(무엇을 사용하는지), 빈도(얼마나 자주), 그리고 효과(무엇이 향상되었는지)를 명확히 말하세요. 중복 표현과 소음어("umm", 반복 단어)를 제거하고 연결어를 사용해 논리적으로 말하세요.
Example: I improve my typing by using online typing games and practicing for about 15 minutes every day. This routine has helped me increase both my speed and accuracy significantly.
× I prefer handwriting because my handwriting is near an easier for me to remember then umm write it once and for example I write in hand, I draw some diagrams and use arrows which may which make me easier to.
✓ I prefer handwriting because it is easier for me to remember when I write it once. For example, when I write by hand I draw diagrams and use arrows that help me remember.
원문은 형용사/부사 사용이 부적절합니다. 'near an easier'는 어색하고 문법적으로 틀립니다. 비교 표현과 연결어가 혼합되어 문장이 길고 불명확합니다. 'easier for me to remember'와 같은 올바른 형용사 수식 구조로 고치고, 문장을 두 부분으로 나누어 의미를 명확히 하세요.
× I tell Typhoon wrapped up because it's purple and sometimes I work in cafes.
✓ I take my laptop because it's portable and sometimes I work in cafes.
원문에는 대명사와 단어 선택 오류가 있습니다. 'I tell Typhoon wrapped up'는 의미를 알 수 없고 'it's purple'는 문맥에 맞지 않습니다. 의도는 휴대용 기기를 가져간다는 것이므로 'I take my laptop'와 같은 명확한 명사와 대명사를 사용하세요.
× I usually use it for umm, emails and browsing websites and writing reporters and some kind of that work.
✓ I usually use it for emails, browsing websites, and writing reports or similar work.
'writing reporters'와 'some kind of that work'는 부적절한 어휘와 형용사/명사 조합입니다. 올바른 명사 'reports'와 명확한 병렬 구조를 사용해 나열하세요.
× It's very convenient.
✓ It is very convenient to use a laptop for that.
단문 자체는 괜찮지만 앞 문맥과 연결해 의미를 명확히 하는 것이 좋습니다. 문맥상 목적을 덧붙여 문장 구조를 완성하세요.
× I'll learn to type on keyboard.
✓ I learned to type on the keyboard.
질문은 'When did you learn?'로 과거 시제를 요구합니다. 응답에서 미래시제 'I'll learn'은 시제 오류입니다. 과거형 'learned'로 고치세요.
× When I was in middle school my parents bought me a new computers and then and I was so excited not to discover how I how fast I could write and how the cable sound kept me on maintaining rhythm.
✓ When I was in middle school, my parents bought me a new computer, and I was so excited to discover how fast I could type and how the clicking sound helped me keep a rhythm.
'a new computers'는 단수/복수 일치 오류입니다. 또한 'not to discover'는 불필요한 부정, 'how I how fast I could write'는 중복과 어순 오류입니다. 'computer' 단수형을 사용하고 'discover'와 'helped me keep a rhythm'으로 문장을 정리하세요.
× I put my typing by umm using online typing games and and practice for about 15 minutes a day and which which help me improve my typing speed and accuracy and that would be very effective for me.
✓ I improved my typing by using online typing games and practicing for about 15 minutes a day, which helped me increase my typing speed and accuracy and was very effective for me.
원문은 전치사 사용과 동명사/명사구 구조가 혼란스럽습니다. 'put my typing by'는 부적절한 표현입니다. 올바른 전치사 'by'와 동명사 'using' 및 병렬 'using... and practicing...' 구조를 사용해 문장을 명확히 하세요.