Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and produce a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Use one or two linking phrases to add a supporting detail (reason or example). Focus on specific vocabulary (e.g. 'landscapes', 'historic sites') and remove fragmented phrases.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially cityscapes with nearby mountains. For example, I often photograph historic buildings against a mountain backdrop because the contrast between nature and architecture highlights the beauty of both.

Suggestion: Start with a clear preference sentence and then give specific reasons using linking words (because, therefore, moreover). Correct grammatical forms (e.g. 'fresh air', 'lower population', 'fewer emissions') and avoid redundant phrases.

Example: I prefer rural views because I grew up in a rural community and appreciate the natural landscapes and fresh air. For instance, the mountains and open fields are peaceful and have lower pollution levels, which makes them more relaxing than crowded urban areas.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first (e.g. 'It depends, but generally...'), then compare with a clear linking word (however, although) and provide a specific example. Fix grammar and repetition, and finish the sentence with a clear point about Canada’s landscapes.

Example: It depends, but generally I prefer views in my own country because I love the familiar mountain scenery and local historic sites. However, since I moved to Quebec, I have also been fascinated by its natural and historical landscapes, such as the old towns and river valleys, which are very beautiful.

× I would like to take photos of different pictures city especially if mountains near side as well because I I like to see the beauty of the environment as well as I'm really fascinated by the historical site, particularly those.

✓ I would like to take photos of different views of the city, especially when there are mountains nearby, because I like to see the beauty of the environment and I am really fascinated by historical sites.

The original sentence has awkward structure, incorrect word choice (pictures city -> views of the city), missing 'there are' for existence (use 'when there are mountains nearby'), repetition ('I I'), and inconsistent connectors. To improve: use 'views' instead of 'pictures' for scenery, include a clear dependent clause ('especially when there are mountains nearby'), remove repeated words, and join related ideas with 'and' or separate into clauses for clarity.

× I used to live in a rural community and I love the beauty of the natural landscape especially the mountainous side as well as the the scenery of the having a fresh air as well if you live in a rural community because of less population and away from carbon footprint.

✓ I used to live in a rural community and I love the beauty of the natural landscape, especially the mountains and the fresh air you get there, because of the lower population and being away from heavy pollution.

The original has wrong prepositions and phrasing ('mountainous side' -> 'the mountains'; 'scenery of the having a fresh air' -> 'the fresh air you get there'), and 'away from carbon footprint' is not idiomatic. Fix by using correct prepositions and noun forms ('away from heavy pollution' or 'away from the city's pollution'), and correct adjective forms ('lower population').

× I think it depends where you live. But since I live in the rural community, I prefer the the beautiful scenario, the mountainous side as well as the historical beauty in our town.

✓ I think it depends on where you live. But since I live in a rural community, I prefer the beautiful scenery, particularly the mountains and the historical sites in our town.

'Depends where you live' needs the preposition 'on' (depends on where you live). 'The rural community' should be 'a rural community' unless referring to a specific one. 'Scenario' is the wrong word; use 'scenery'. Remove duplicate 'the the' and clarify noun phrases ('mountains' and 'historical sites').

× But since I came here in Canada, Quebec have not also there have natural, natural historical landscape.

✓ But since I came to Canada, Quebec also has natural and historical landscapes.

Problems include incorrect preposition ('came here in Canada' -> 'came to Canada'), subject-verb disagreement ('Quebec have' -> 'Quebec has'), and awkward word order/repetition ('not also there have natural, natural historical landscape' -> 'also has natural and historical landscapes'). Use simple, correct sentence order: subject + verb + objects.

× And I was I was very fascinated by the beauty of it and.

✓ I was very fascinated by its beauty.

The original contains repetition ('I was I was') and an incomplete trailing conjunction 'and.' Fix by removing duplication and completing the thought with a concise noun phrase ('its beauty').