Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and reduce fillers (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Mention concrete examples (when/where) to make your answer more vivid.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I love capturing sunsets, so I often go to the beach at golden hour to take photos of the sky and reflections. Also, on holidays I scout viewpoints—such as hilltops or city promenades—to get a breathtaking shot.

Suggestion: Open with a direct preference sentence, then provide two specific reasons and a brief contrast using a linking word (however/but). Avoid vague phrases like "etcetera" and replace with concrete examples.

Example: I prefer urban views because I enjoy dramatic skylines and architectural details. For instance, I like photographing the illuminated skyscrapers of London and Paris at night. However, I also appreciate some rural scenes, such as a misty countryside, for their unique atmosphere.

Suggestion: Be direct and avoid hesitation and unclear words. Start with a clear statement, then give specific contrasting examples. Correct grammar and pronunciation issues (e.g., unclear word "Devar"). Use linking words like "for example" or "for instance" to organize details.

Example: It depends on the landscape; I don't mind photographing views at home or abroad. For example, in Italy there are many spectacular scenes—from rocky cliffs and coastal sunsets to mountainous panoramas—so I often travel there to capture different types of landscapes.

× I define myself as a sunset lover and that's the reason why when sunset comes up, I tend to take photographs of it.

✓ I describe myself as a sunset lover, and that's why when the sun sets, I tend to take photographs of it.

The verb 'define' is not idiomatic for describing oneself; 'describe' is better. 'When sunset comes up' mixes noun and verb forms and uses incorrect word order; 'when the sun sets' is the correct third-person singular present form and natural phrasing. Also adding 'the' before 'sun' is standard. Suggestion: use natural verbs like 'describe' and the correct third-person singular present tense 'sets'.

× And uh, also on holidays, I try to find the right spot to have a breathtaking picture.

✓ Also, on holidays I try to find the right spot to take a breathtaking picture.

The phrase 'to have a breathtaking picture' is awkward; the verb 'take' followed by a noun is the correct collocation for photography. The original used an infinitive correctly but with an incorrect verb choice. Suggestion: use 'take a picture' or 'get a picture' instead of 'have a picture'.

× I mostly prefer views in urban areas because I'm quite fond of skyscrapers, tall buildings and blinding lights in skyline such as London's or Paris etcetera.

✓ I mostly prefer views in urban areas because I'm quite fond of skyscrapers, tall buildings and bright city lights in skylines such as London's or Paris's.

'in skyline' is ungrammatical; use plural 'skylines'. 'Blinding lights' is acceptable but 'bright city lights' is more natural. Possessive forms for city names require 'London's' and 'Paris's' to modify 'skylines'. Suggestion: use plural 'skylines' and correct possessive forms or rephrase as 'the skylines of London or Paris'.

× But there are some rural areas which are quite characteristic and unique I must admit.

✓ But there are some rural areas that are quite distinctive and unique, I must admit.

The clause runs on without proper punctuation; add a comma before 'I must admit'. 'Characteristic' with 'unique' is redundant; 'distinctive' is a clearer choice. Also use 'that' for defining relative clauses referring to places. Suggestion: add punctuation and choose non-redundant adjectives.

× The views I prefer mainly depend on the kind of landscape that is in front of my eyes.

✓ The views I prefer mainly depend on the kind of landscape in front of me.

'In front of my eyes' is wordy and less natural than 'in front of me'. Sentence structure can be simplified by removing unnecessary words. Suggestion: use concise expressions like 'in front of me'.

× But umm, in Italy, uh, Devar many spectacular views which may differ from uh, coastal landscapes to cliffs or mountain like scenarios.

✓ But in Italy there are many spectacular views, which may range from coastal landscapes to cliffs or mountain-like scenery.

The original is missing the verb 'are' after 'Devar' (likely meant 'there are'); this is a 'There be' issue combined with article/use errors. Use 'there are many' to introduce existence. 'Mountain like' should be hyphenated as 'mountain-like' and 'scenery' is the proper uncountable noun rather than 'scenarios'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'there are' for existence, hyphenate compound adjectives, and choose correct nouns.