Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer communicates enthusiasm but has grammatical errors, redundancy and awkward phrasing. Keep responses concise (max 5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., omit unnecessary repetitions, use correct verb forms and articles) and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'tea gardens', 'local park').

Example: Yes, I love taking photographs of different views. I especially enjoy shooting in natural places such as tea gardens and local parks because they offer varied landscapes and peaceful atmospheres. For example, the tea gardens near my village have terraced fields and morning mist that make beautiful pictures.

Suggestion: Your idea is clear but speech fillers and repetition weaken fluency. Give a direct topic sentence ('I prefer rural areas') and follow with one or two linked reasons using connectors like 'because' or 'as'. Provide specific examples of natural attractions or animals to strengthen content. Correct grammar ('which you don’t find in urban areas').

Example: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because they have more natural scenery and wildlife. For instance, in the countryside I can photograph rivers, forests and birds that are rarely seen in cities, which makes my photos more interesting.

Suggestion: The response is unclear and contains grammar mistakes and vague phrasing. Begin with a clear preference (e.g., 'I enjoy visiting other countries for views'), then give a specific reason and an example. Avoid vague phrases like 'approved country' and repetition ('whole whole'). Use correct verb forms and articles ('they offer', 'we can learn about the culture').

Example: I prefer viewing landscapes in other countries because travelling abroad lets me experience different cultures and scenery. For example, visiting Japan allowed me to photograph unique temple gardens and learn about Japanese garden design, which I could never see at home.

× Actually I'm quite passionate about taking photos so that's why I'm I want to take photos in different natural places such as tea garden, natural attractions and along with my village park, these are the most prominent prominent place for taking photo.

✓ Actually, I'm quite passionate about taking photos, so I like to take them in different natural places such as tea gardens, natural attractions, and my village park; these are the most prominent places for taking photos.

Errors: run-on sentence, repetition, article and plural errors, and awkward phrasing. The original combined clauses without proper punctuation or conjunctions, repeated 'prominent', used singular 'place' instead of 'places', and had inconsistent articles. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses with commas and a semicolon, remove repetition, use plural nouns for multiple locations, and repeat 'photos' only when necessary. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Uh, actually pretty much both, but mostly, I guess, umm, prefer umm, be viewing our rural areas.

✓ Uh, actually pretty much both, but I mostly prefer viewing rural areas.

Errors: incorrect verb form and unnecessary words. 'Prefer be viewing' is ungrammatical; use simple present 'prefer viewing' which matches habitual preference. Also remove filler words and the possessive 'our' unless intended. Suggestion: use 'I prefer' + gerund or 'I prefer rural areas.' Grammar problem type ID:6

× Uh, which is, is, it offers some positive aspect such as I can see natural attractions, umm, as well as many animals, uh, which don't find in urban areas.

✓ They offer positive aspects, such as the opportunity to see natural attractions and many animals that you don't find in urban areas.

Errors: awkward relative clauses, subject mismatch and missing subject for 'don't find'. 'Which is, is, it' is redundant and unclear. 'Which don't find' lacks a subject. Suggestion: use 'They offer' to refer to rural areas, combine ideas clearly, and use 'that you don't find' or 'which are not found' to complete the clause. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I mostly recommended to visit foreign country because they offers some positive aspects from where people can easily explore the whole whole country and earn many knowledge about this country.

✓ I mostly recommend visiting foreign countries because they offer positive aspects; people can easily explore the whole country and learn a lot about it.

Errors: wrong verb form 'recommended' (past) instead of present 'recommend', incorrect use of 'to visit' after 'recommend' (use gerund 'visiting'), singular/plural mismatches ('foreign country' -> 'foreign countries', 'they offers' -> 'they offer'), and awkward phrase 'earn many knowledge' (use 'learn a lot' or 'gain knowledge'). Suggestion: use present simple for general advice, use gerund after recommend, match subject and verb number, and use 'learn' or 'gain knowledge'. Grammar problem type ID:4

× Along with when we visit any approved country we can learn about that.

✓ Also, when we visit any foreign country, we can learn about it.

Errors: incorrect preposition/phrase 'along with when' and wrong word 'approved' instead of likely 'foreign'. Use 'also' or 'in addition' to connect ideas, and replace 'that' with 'it' to refer to 'country'. Suggestion: simplify connectors and use correct referent pronoun. Grammar problem type ID:11