Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and remove fillers (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use precise vocabulary (scenery, landscape, snapshots) and correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'they save' → 'I save them').

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. Whenever I travel, I take snapshots of landscapes and cityscapes and save them on my phone so I can share highlights with friends.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and one specific reason with an example; avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Replace vague or incorrect claims ("structure is excellent") with concrete descriptions (e.g., open fields, fresh air, traditional architecture).

Example: I prefer rural views because they offer open fields, fresh air and traditional architecture. For example, I enjoy photographing quiet villages and rolling hills, which feel more relaxing than busy city streets.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, avoid repeating words, and give specific supporting details. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for instance'. Correct grammar by saying 'beautiful landscapes and mountains' and add a brief example of a location or reason why it is special.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because it has beautiful landscapes and mountain ranges. For instance, I often visit the Blue Ridge area, where the scenery is peaceful and ideal for photography.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views when I uh, whenever I travel I take pictures of different sceneries and they save it to my mobile and share it with my, uh, friends.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views. Whenever I travel, I take pictures of different scenes, save them to my mobile, and share them with my friends.

Errors: run-on sentence and inconsistent noun form. 'Sceneries' is rarely used in English; the correct plural is 'scenes' or 'landscapes'. Pronoun agreement: 'they' referred to pictures so use 'them'. Use gerund phrase 'taking pictures' correctly; break into two sentences for clarity and add commas. Suggestion: separate ideas into sentences, use 'scenes' and 'them' for clarity and correct pronoun reference.

× I prefer views in rural areas as compared to urban areas because rural areas as has has structure.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas compared to urban areas because rural areas have more structure.

Errors: duplicate words 'as has has' and subject-verb agreement. 'Rural areas' is plural, so the verb must be 'have' not 'has'. Also use 'more structure' to compare. Remove redundant 'as' and fix verb to agree with plural subject.

× Structure of the rural areas is excellent as compared to the urban areas.

✓ The structure of rural areas is better than that of urban areas.

Errors: awkward word order and unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'rural areas' and 'urban areas' in this context. Use comparative form 'better than' and include 'that of' to compare 'structure'. This yields a clearer, more natural sentence.

× I prefer views in my country because my country contains a beautiful, beautiful landscapes, mountains where people visit and find peace.

✓ I prefer views in my country because it contains beautiful landscapes and mountains where people visit to find peace.

Errors: incorrect article usage 'a beautiful, beautiful landscapes' (singular article 'a' cannot modify plural 'landscapes'); repetition 'beautiful, beautiful' is redundant. Replacing 'my country contains' with 'it contains' avoids repetition. Add 'to' before 'find peace' to show purpose. Use plural 'landscapes' without 'a'.