Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a brief example. Avoid repeating the same idea (memories/happiness) multiple times and limit your response to about 2–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas naturally.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember places I have visited. For example, when I traveled to the coast last year I photographed the sunset, which always reminds me of that calm evening. I also like capturing scenery because it lets me share those moments with friends.

Suggestion: Make your preference clear in one sentence, then give specific reasons and an example. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g., 'less developed', 'traditional aspects', 'farmland'). Use linking words like because and for example to make the answer coherent and avoid repetition.

Example: I prefer rural views because I enjoy natural landscapes and traditional village life. For example, I like seeing farmers working in green fields and simple houses, which feel peaceful compared with noisy, crowded cities.

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence stating your preference, then provide two clear and specific reasons without repeating the same point. Fix grammar (e.g., 'spread all over', 'religious sites') and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words such as because and also to connect reasons smoothly.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because it offers diverse landscapes and important religious sites. For instance, I can visit nearby mountains and historic temples in different regions, which makes exploring at home more convenient and meaningful to me.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views to keep them as memories that I have visited this place and it is beneficial for me to keep these memories for future so that I can be happy while seeing that picture.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views to keep them as memories of the places I have visited; it makes me happy to look at those photos in the future.

The original sentence is long and awkward with incorrect clause connections and redundancy. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). I combined and reordered clauses, changed 'memories that I have visited this place' to 'memories of the places I have visited' for clarity, replaced 'for future' with 'in the future', and simplified 'while seeing that picture' to 'to look at those photos'. Suggestion: divide long ideas into clear clauses, use correct prepositional phrases ('memories of', 'in the future'), and avoid repetition.

× And I can remember that I have visited this place earlier and I love to take pictures of the beautiful sceneries.

✓ I can remember that I visited a place earlier, and I love taking pictures of beautiful scenery.

This contains present perfect where simple past is more natural ('I have visited this place earlier' -> 'I visited a place earlier') and incorrect plural 'sceneries' (see next). This fits present tense issue (ID 6) and sentence structure. I changed 'love to take pictures' to 'love taking pictures' for natural phrasing and 'beautiful sceneries' to 'beautiful scenery' as 'scenery' is uncountable. Suggestion: use simple past for specific past events and use gerund after 'love'.

× I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas are not well developed and there are own traditional basis which I like the most, the fields the people work in and the scene of the land that people are working on.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are less developed and have traditional lifestyles that I like, such as fields where people work and the appearance of the land they farm.

The sentence uses incorrect adjectives and awkward noun phrases ('own traditional basis', 'the scene of the land'). This is an incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs (ID 13) and sentence structure. I replaced 'not well developed' with 'less developed' and 'own traditional basis' with 'traditional lifestyles', and clarified 'the scene of the land' to 'the appearance of the land they farm'. Suggestion: choose natural collocations ('traditional lifestyles', 'fields where people work') and simplify complex phrases.

× So I like the views of the rural areas rather than the urban areas.

✓ So I prefer rural views to urban ones.

This is wordy and slightly redundant. It's a sentence structure issue (ID 26). I shortened and made it more natural: 'prefer X to Y' and used 'urban ones' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use concise comparative structures.

× I prefer the views of my own country because I have seen different religious places to visit and different types of mountains on which environmental beauty is spreaded all over.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because I have seen many religious sites and different kinds of mountains that are very beautiful.

The original has awkward phrasing and the incorrect past participle 'spreaded' and unnatural infinitive 'places to visit.' This is a sentence structure error (ID 26) and a verb past participle error (ID 9). I replaced 'places to visit' with 'sites' and corrected 'spreaded' to 'are very beautiful'. Suggestion: use correct past participle forms ('spread' not 'spreaded') and simpler noun phrases ('religious sites', 'different kinds of mountains').

× And so I prefer the views of my own country rather than the other countries because there are several places and religious places to visit.

✓ Therefore, I prefer the views of my own country to those of other countries because there are many places and religious sites to visit.

Awkward comparison and redundancy ('places and religious places'). This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). I used 'prefer X to Y' and 'those of other countries', and replaced 'religious places' with 'religious sites' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use correct comparative structures and avoid repeating the same noun.

× I have seen different religious places to visit and different types of mountains on which environmental beauty is spreaded all over.

✓ I have seen various religious sites and different types of mountains that are beautiful throughout the area.

The phrase 'different' is repeated and 'spreaded' is incorrect. This also reflects incorrect use of quantifiers (ID 14) and past participle error (ID 9). I changed 'different' to 'various' and corrected 'spreaded' to a descriptive clause. Suggestion: vary quantifiers and use correct participle forms.