Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Trim filler words and repetition, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one specific example to make your answer more natural and informative. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas and keep it within four sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views because it's my hobby and I love sharing moments online. For example, last month I photographed a sunset at the beach and posted it on Instagram because the colors were stunning. I often feel an urge to capture anything beautiful I see, so I take photos whenever I travel or walk around my neighborhood.

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct small grammar or word-choice errors ('sides' -> 'scenery'). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example, using linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer views in rural areas because the green scenery is more relaxing and refreshing. For example, a weekend in the countryside helps me unwind from the busy city routine and improves my mood.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and hesitations; give a clear preference followed by a reason and a brief contrasting statement. Use correct plural/singular forms ('country' -> 'countries') and reduce fillers. One or two supporting details are enough.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because I want to see landscapes I haven't experienced before. Although I love my country's natural beauty, traveling abroad lets me discover different cultures and scenery.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because pictures uh taking pictures is my hobby and I like to upload them on Instagram or Facebook and whenever I see something beautiful, I naturally have this urge to capture that moment.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because taking pictures is my hobby and I like to upload them on Instagram or Facebook, and whenever I see something beautiful I naturally have the urge to capture the moment.

The repetition 'pictures uh taking pictures' is redundant and disrupts sentence flow; remove the extra word to use the present participle phrase correctly. Also add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses and remove unnecessary articles for clarity. Suggestion: avoid redundant repetition and use one clear gerund phrase 'taking pictures' to express the hobby.

× So that's why I like taking pictures of wherever I go and whenever I.

✓ So that's why I like taking pictures wherever I go and whenever I find something interesting.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'whenever I' and lacks an object or clause. Complete the subordinate clause with an appropriate verb phrase such as 'find something interesting' to create a complete idea. Ensure subordinators like 'whenever' are followed by a clause with subject and verb.

× I prefer views in rural areas because when we go to rural areas they have more greenery and sides which are really attractive and they make your mood fresh so you happen to freshen up your mind and get a break from your busy routine in city life.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they have more greenery and scenery, which is really attractive and refreshes your mood, so you can clear your mind and get a break from the busy routine of city life.

The original uses 'we' and 'they' inconsistently and 'sides' is incorrect. Replace 'we' with general subject 'they' or rephrase to remove vague pronouns. Use 'scenery' instead of 'sides.' Improve verb agreement: 'scenery... is' (singular) and 'refreshes your mood.' Use 'clear your mind' and 'the busy routine of city life' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer views in other country because I've seen many views in my country, so I'll prefer views in other countries.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I've seen many views in my country, so I would like to see views in other countries.

The phrase 'other country' is singular but context requires plural 'other countries.' Also 'I'll prefer' is awkward; use 'I would like' or 'I prefer' for consistency. Correct quantifier and number agreement for natural expression.

× Uh, I like, I really like my country because it has, umm, it's, it has a lot of natural beauty, but I will go explore other countries views as well.

✓ I really like my country because it has a lot of natural beauty, but I will go explore views in other countries as well.

Remove redundant fillers and repeated pronouns 'it has, umm, it's, it has.' Use 'views in other countries' (add preposition and plural) instead of 'other countries views.' This fixes pronoun redundancy and corrects noun phrase word order. Suggestion: speak concisely and use 'views in other countries' for correct noun-modifier order.