Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and limit to relevant supporting detail. Give one specific example rather than an excessive number which sounds unrealistic. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I travel I usually photograph landscapes and street scenes to capture memories, and later I organize a selection into albums so I can easily look back on my trips.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference and support it with specific reasons and linking words. Avoid repetition and fillers; use correct vocabulary (architecture, buildings). Keep it within a few sentences.

Example: I enjoy both, but I prefer urban views because I like photographing architecture and lively street scenes. For example, I often capture the contrast between historic buildings and modern skyscrapers to show how a city has changed over time.

Suggestion: Provide a direct answer and follow with specific reasons using clear linking words. Remove hesitations and complete your sentences. Mention examples of what excites you abroad (landscapes, culture, architecture).

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new scenery and cultural elements I haven't seen before. For instance, I love photographing traditional markets and historic sites abroad since they provide unique colors and stories that broaden my perspective.

× I have more than 50,000 pictures on my smartphone.

✓ I have more than 50,000 pictures on my smartphone.

No change needed; 'pictures' correctly matches the plural quantity. This sentence is grammatically correct regarding singular/plural.

× So uh, everywhere I visited I take photos to remember these memories.

✓ So, everywhere I go I take photos to remember these moments.

Original uses past tense 'visited' with present tense 'take', creating a tense inconsistency and awkward word choice 'these memories'. Use present tense 'go' to match habitual action 'take photos'. Also 'moments' is more natural than 'these memories'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense for habitual actions and choose natural nouns.

× Well, I enjoy both views of urban areas and the rural areas in particular.

✓ Well, I enjoy views of both urban and rural areas, particularly rural ones.

Original redundantly uses 'the' with 'rural areas' and awkward word order. Using 'views of both urban and rural areas' is clearer; 'particularly rural ones' avoids repeating 'areas'. Check article usage and prefer concise phrasing.

× In normal areas, I like to visit architectures and, uh, I, uh, take photos of this, uh, building.

✓ In urban areas, I like to visit architectural sites and take photos of buildings.

'Normal areas' is vague; 'urban areas' fits context. 'Architectures' is incorrect — use 'architectural sites' or 'architecture' (uncountable). 'This building' is odd as a general statement; plural 'buildings' or 'buildings in general' is better. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and pluralize appropriately for general statements.

× Well, I'd like to say that I prefer views in other countries that makes me, uh, which makes me excited because Oh well, I like to explore new, uh, things that I.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because they make me excited; I like exploring new things.

Original sentence is fragmented and contains pronoun reference errors and subject-verb disagreement ('that makes me' referring to plural 'views'). Recast into two clear clauses: 'they make me excited' uses correct plural pronoun and verb; 'I like exploring new things' completes the thought. Suggestions: avoid fragments, match pronouns and verbs in number, and finish sentences.