School— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and be concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating location, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., when you studied there or why you visit). Use linking words like “and” or “because” to connect ideas. Aim for natural phrasing and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: My school is in my home village, Alambari. I finished school there about 20 years ago, and I still visit sometimes because I have fond memories of studying with friends.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and correct grammar. Begin with a direct statement of your opinion, then give one clear reason with a concise example. Replace vague phrases like “impressive memories” with specific descriptions (e.g., friendships, teachers). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I like my school very much because it gave me strong friendships and inspiring teachers. For example, my teacher encouraged me to join the debate club, which boosted my confidence.

Suggestion: Make your reasoning clearer and use specific points. State your opinion, then give 1–2 concrete reasons (e.g., qualified teachers, good facilities). Avoid vague or circular statements and reduce hesitations.

Example: Yes, I think it was a good place to study because we had qualified teachers and a quiet library. These resources helped students understand difficult subjects better.

Suggestion: Organize the answer: start with a clear description (e.g., friendly, calm), then support with specific details (friendly teachers, green spaces). Avoid incomplete sentences and finish your thought. Use linking words like “because” and “also.”

Example: The environment at my school was very friendly and relaxed because the teachers were supportive. Also, there were many parks nearby where we played during breaks, which made the school feel pleasant.

Suggestion: Be concise and give a specific explanation and example. State your view clearly, then explain why interest matters (motivation, persistence) and give a brief example. Avoid filler words and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I think interest in study is very important because it increases motivation and helps you keep working toward goals. For example, I studied languages more effectively when I was genuinely curious about other cultures.

× My school is uh, my village and uh, the name of village is Alambari.

✓ My school is in my village, and the name of the village is Alambari.

Missing preposition 'in' to indicate location and missing article 'the' before 'village'. Use 'in' for location and 'the' with a specific noun: 'in my village' and 'the village is Alambari'. Suggestion: include appropriate prepositions and articles: 'My school is in my village, and the name of the village is Alambari.'

× Uh, I finished uh, school about 20 years ago.

✓ I finished school about 20 years ago.

Extraneous filler words removed; 'finished school' is correct past tense. Ensure simple past is used for completed actions at a specific time: 'I finished school about 20 years ago.' Suggestion: avoid fillers and keep past tense verbs clear.

× Uh, and uh, uh, sometimes uh, I visit my school because I love it very much.

✓ Sometimes I visit my school because I love it very much.

Use simple present for habitual actions: 'I visit' is correct. Remove filler words and redundant commas. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' with simple present for repeated actions.

× Honestly, I like my school, umm, and I'm into my school because, uh, it's, uh, it's a very impressive memories, uh, for me and also, uh, when I was kid.

✓ Honestly, I like my school, and I am attached to it because it holds very impressive memories for me, and also, when I was a kid,

'I'm into my school' is informal and incorrect for emotional attachment; use 'I am attached to it'. 'A very impressive memories' mixes singular article and plural noun; use 'very impressive memories' without 'a'. Missing article before 'kid': 'a kid'. Suggestion: replace informal 'into' with 'attached to', match plurality for 'memories', and use 'a kid' for childhood reference.

× School is my favorite place, uh, so far.

✓ School is my favorite place so far.

Awkward placement of 'so far' after a pause; remove filler. 'So far' is acceptable if implying up to now. Suggestion: keep adverbial phrase adjacent: 'School is my favorite place so far.'

× Yes, I think uh, the school is a good place to study because, umm, everyone, uh, starts uh, uh, studying, uh, from the school And uh, when your school is, uh, higher quality, you have a chance, uh, to give the appropriate education.

✓ Yes, I think the school is a good place to study because everyone starts studying at school. And when a school is of higher quality, it has a better chance of providing appropriate education.

Use 'starts studying at school' (preposition 'at'). 'Your school is higher quality' is better expressed as 'a school is of higher quality'. Agreement: subject 'it' for the school, and 'providing' is the correct verb form. Also capitalization and run-on sentence fixed. Suggestion: use consistent subjects and correct prepositions: 'starts studying at school' and 'a school is of higher quality, it has a better chance of providing appropriate education.'

× Their environment I like it my school is a friendly umm, friendly environment uh, because uh teachers uh uh, were uh very friendly and uh also now there are more many parks nearby where uh we.

✓ I like the environment; my school is a friendly environment because the teachers were very friendly, and now there are many parks nearby.

Incorrect use of 'Their' and redundant pronouns 'I like it'. Use 'I like the environment' or 'I like my school's environment'. 'More many' is incorrect; use 'many'. Sentence fragment 'where we' is incomplete and removed. Suggestion: simplify pronoun usage: 'I like my school's environment. It is friendly because the teachers were very friendly, and now there are many parks nearby.'

× Uh, I think, uh, interest is, uh, very important in study because the, when you have, uh, the goal and uh, when you intend to achieve something, you, umm, always have a chance to do it.

✓ I think interest is very important for studying because when you have a goal and intend to achieve something, you are more likely to do it.

Awkward phrase 'important in study' should be 'important for studying' or 'important in studying'. Remove extraneous 'the' before 'when'. 'You always have a chance to do it' is vague; 'you are more likely to do it' is clearer and matches meaning. Suggestion: use 'important for studying' and simplify clause structure: 'when you have a goal and intend to achieve something, you are more likely to succeed.'