Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, correct grammar, and use natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I currently work as a food service supervisor at a well-known restaurant in Saskatoon. I have worked there for two years, where I manage staff and oversee daily operations. Also, I am improving my English and French to advance my career and take on managerial roles.

Suggestion: Answer directly and correct tense usage. Give one clear statement about where you studied, then add one specific detail about your course or skills, using a linking word to connect ideas.

Example: I studied at Sioux College and completed a Diploma in Business in Toronto. During the course, I focused on accounting and learned practical record-keeping skills that I now use at work.

Suggestion: Be natural and avoid overly formal words like 'splendid'. Use correct grammar and fewer repetitive ideas. Give one opinion sentence and one supporting reason with a linking word and a specific example.

Example: Yes, I think it is a good place to study because the teachers are very helpful. For example, they offer extra support and quickly answer students' questions, which helps those pursuing business or technology careers.

Suggestion: Answer with one clear change and give a brief reason or example. Correct grammar and word choice (‘decorum’ is awkward here) and avoid mixing past and present unnecessarily.

Example: Overall I liked the college because the atmosphere was respectful and teachers offered extra classes for struggling students. However, I would change the dress code by introducing a uniform, because it could create a more professional environment.

Suggestion: State your main plan clearly, then add a specific reason and a linking word. Fix grammar and keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

Example: My main goal is to become an entrepreneur and open a food chain. However, I plan to pursue a bachelor's degree in business first because I want a stronger foundation in economics and accounting to run my business successfully.

× I'm working at the moment as a food service supervisor in an eminent restaurant of Saskatoon.

✓ I'm working at the moment as a food service supervisor at a well-known restaurant in Saskatoon.

Use of preposition and word choice: 'in an eminent restaurant of Saskatoon' is incorrect. Use 'at' for workplaces and 'in' for cities; 'in Saskatoon' is fine but with 'at a restaurant in Saskatoon' or 'at a restaurant in Saskatoon'. 'Eminent' is formal and uncommon for a restaurant; 'well-known' is more natural. Also ensure present continuous fits ongoing action.

× I have been working here since 2 years and working on improving my skills and my eloquency in English and French which will help me a lot in building my career strong.

✓ I have been working here for two years and am working on improving my skills and my fluency in English and French, which will help me build a strong career.

Use 'for' with a period of time and write numbers in words in formal speech: 'since' requires a point in time (since 2019) while 'for two years' is correct. 'Eloquency' is misspelled and should be 'fluency.' Parallel structure: use 'am working' for present continuous. 'Building my career strong' is awkward; use 'build a strong career.'

× I have already completed my studies from Sioux College, I have done Diploma in Business in Toronto and I had a keen interest in accounting management skills which were main subjects of my domain and learned lot of practical skills in record keeping.

✓ I have already completed my studies at Sioux College; I completed a Diploma in Business in Toronto. I have a keen interest in accounting and management skills, which were the main subjects in my program, and I learned many practical record-keeping skills.

Use 'at' for institutions: 'completed my studies at Sioux College.' Use consistent tense: present perfect 'have completed' and simple past 'completed a Diploma' are acceptable, but original mixed 'have done' and 'I had' is awkward. Use 'accounting and management' rather than 'accounting management skills.' Include articles 'a Diploma' and 'the main subjects.' Use 'many' instead of 'lot of' and hyphenate 'record-keeping' or use as two words.

× I believe it is a splendid place to study for the people who wants to be a part of business institute.

✓ I believe it is a splendid place to study for people who want to be part of a business institute.

Subject-verb agreement: 'people' is plural so use 'want' not 'wants.' Article and noun use: 'a business institute' needs the article 'a' and 'be part of' is more natural than 'be a part of business institute.'

× It is specially for the business and the technological students who wants to have a strong career in this realm.

✓ It is especially for business and technology students who want to have a strong career in this field.

Use 'especially' not 'specially.' 'Students' is plural so use 'want' not 'wants.' 'Technological students' is unnatural; use 'technology students' or 'students of technology.' 'Realm' is formal—'field' is more natural.

× This teachers are really helpful towards the student always wanted to resolve the issues as soon as possible.

✓ These teachers are really helpful and always want to resolve students' issues as soon as possible.

Plural agreement: 'This teachers' should be 'These teachers.' The structure is corrected for clarity: 'are really helpful and always want to resolve students' issues...' Also use plural 'students' and possessive form 'students' issues.' },{

× I liked the place where I studied as the environment of the institute was decent and respectful.

✓ I liked the place where I studied because the institute's environment was decent and respectful.

Use 'because' for reason rather than 'as' which is okay but can be ambiguous. Use possessive 'institute's environment.' Tense 'liked' and 'was' are consistent past.

× The teachers were really cooperative towards the students.

✓ The teachers were really cooperative with the students.

Use 'cooperative with' rather than 'cooperative towards.' Meaning is clearer and more natural.

× For instance, they used to organize extra classes for the students who were weak in their studies.

✓ For instance, they used to organize extra classes for students who were weak in their studies.

Sentence is mostly correct; remove 'the' before 'students' for natural generalization. 'Used to' correctly indicates habitual past action.

× I really want to change one thing is that they don't have the decorum or wearing uniforms.

✓ One thing I would change is that they did not have a dress code or require uniforms.

Original mixes structures: 'I really want to change one thing is that...' is ungrammatical. Use 'One thing I would change is that...' Also correct tense to past to match earlier description 'studied.' 'Decorum' is incorrect word here; use 'dress code' and clarify 'require uniforms.'

× I always have a aim of becoming an entrepreneur or wanted to start my own food chain.

✓ I have always had the aim of becoming an entrepreneur and want to start my own food chain.

Use 'have always had' to express a continued aspiration from past to present. Match parallel verbs: 'have the aim of becoming' and 'want to start' rather than mixing 'wanted.' Use 'an aim' -> 'an aim' (article correct) and maintain present relevance.

× But at some point of time, I will definitely go for having a bachelor's degree in business because I have a keen interest in economics and accounting which gives me accomplishment.

✓ But at some point, I will definitely pursue a bachelor's degree in business because I have a keen interest in economics and accounting, which give me a sense of accomplishment.

Use 'pursue' not 'go for having.' 'At some point' is more natural than 'at some point of time.' Subject-verb agreement: 'economics and accounting' are plural so use 'give' not 'gives.' 'Accomplishment' collocates with 'sense of' to be natural.