Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and article use, avoid redundancy, and limit to up to 4–5 sentences. Add a specific detail (where you rode or a memorable moment) and use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I did. I got my first bicycle when I was five, and it was my favourite toy for years. I used it for morning exercise and to ride around the neighbourhood with friends and sometimes my family. Because it was sturdy and easy to handle, I felt confident learning new tricks on it.

Suggestion: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence: give a direct topic sentence, correct subject-verb agreement, remove unclear phrases, and add one specific reason or example (e.g. cycling clubs, bike lanes). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

Example: Yes, I do. Bicycles are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting and exercise. For example, there are several active cycling clubs in my city and the local government has built bike lanes, so more people feel safe riding.

× I got a bicycle when I was like a five years old and it was one of the best bicycle I've ever had.

✓ I got a bicycle when I was about five years old, and it was one of the best bicycles I have ever had.

Two issues: incorrect past time expression 'a five years old' should be 'about five years old' and 'a five years old' is ungrammatical. Also 'one of the best bicycle' uses singular 'bicycle' after 'one of the', which requires plural 'bicycles'. 'I've ever had' (present perfect) is acceptable because it refers to life experience up to now. Suggestion: use 'about five years old' and pluralize to 'bicycles'.

× I often use it for morning exercise and to ride around with my friends and also like with my family.

✓ I often used it for morning exercise and to ride around with my friends and also with my family.

The context is past habitual action (when the student was a child), so past tense 'used' should be used instead of present 'use'. Also the phrase 'also like with my family' is awkward; remove 'like' and use 'also with my family'. Suggestion: match tense to the past context and simplify 'also with my family'.

× Yes I do but are very popular in here.

✓ Yes, I do, but they are very popular here.

Pronoun/reference problem and subject-verb agreement: 'are very popular in here' lacks a subject—use 'they' to refer to bikes. Also 'in here' is unnatural; 'here' is correct. Ensure comma placement: 'Yes, I do, but they are very popular here.'

× There are also a bunch of by community that there is still active up until now people.

✓ 'There is also a strong cycling community that is still active up to now.'

Original sentence is ungrammatical and word order is confused. 'a bunch of by community' is incorrect; use 'a strong cycling community' or 'a bunch of community' is wrong. 'that there is still active up until now people' mixes clauses and misplaced 'people'. Use relative clause: 'community that is still active up to now.' Suggestions: choose correct noun phrase and use proper relative clause structure.

× There are a lot of people really loves to ride their bike here.

✓ There are a lot of people who really love to ride their bikes here.

Subject-verb agreement and relative clause: 'a lot of people' is plural, so verb should be 'love' not 'loves'. Also include the relative pronoun 'who' and pluralize 'bike' to 'bikes' to match 'people'. Suggestion: use 'people who love' and plural noun 'bikes'.