Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Focus on clarity, correct vocabulary, and concise structure. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a bike.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct words (bike, not bag), and use a linking word (because, although, so) to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and long, fragmented phrases. Pay attention to past tense consistency and simple sentence structure.

Example: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I really wanted one because many of my friends had bikes and I enjoyed watching them ride. However, my family couldn’t afford one at the time, so I only rode my friends’ bikes occasionally.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer and use specific reasons and examples. Begin with a topic sentence (e.g., “They were popular, but less so now.”), then explain why using correct nouns and verbs (bikes, bike-sharing, ride, used to). Use linking words (for example, because, however) to connect your points. Avoid filler sounds (uh) and unclear phrases; be precise about time (a few years ago) and actors (people, commuters).

Example: They used to be more popular a few years ago, but not as much now. For example, bike-sharing schemes and cheaper bicycles encouraged many people to cycle for short trips. However, with more cars on the road and better public transport, fewer people choose to ride bikes today.

× Unfortunately I don't have a bag when I was a child, but I always wanted to have one back when I was a little baby, a kid, because I have seen so many people they have back at the same age as me back that time. Unfortunately I don't have.

✓ Unfortunately I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I always wanted one when I was little because I saw so many people who had one at the same age as me. Unfortunately I didn't.

Errors: incorrect pronoun use ('they have' is redundant and wrong relative clause), wrong noun ('bag' vs 'bike'), and inconsistent tense. Grammar problem type 12 applies because the sentence uses pronouns incorrectly and redundantly. Also subject-verb agreement and tense issues exist but are fixed while following the allowed list. Suggestions: use the correct noun (bike), keep past tense consistently for past states and actions (didn't have, wanted, saw, had), and introduce a relative pronoun ('who') when referring to people. Remove repeated words ('back that time') and unnecessary phrases for clarity.

× Uh, it used to be quite popular in my country because, uh, in my country few years ago, the shared bags, the opinion, the things just just like to come out. So like many people write their bags, but right now I don't think so.

✓ It used to be quite popular in my country a few years ago because shared bikes and bike-sharing services became common. Many people rode their bikes then, but right now I don't think they are as popular.

Errors: unclear and incorrect present tense phrasing, misuse of verbs ('write' instead of 'ride'), and awkward noun phrases. Grammar problem type 6 (Present tense issue) is relevant because present-tense forms are used incorrectly or confusingly. Suggestions: use past tense 'used to' for habitual past actions and clear present tense for current state ('are as popular'). Use correct verbs ('ride' for bicycles) and precise nouns ('shared bikes', 'bike-sharing services') to improve clarity.