Number— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat fragmented and contains some grammatical errors, which affects the natural flow. Try to form complete sentences and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

Example: I'm not very good at remembering numbers. For instance, when people introduce themselves and give me their phone numbers, I often forget them. Therefore, I usually ask them to call me so I can save their contact details directly.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific examples using linking words. Avoid using 'etc.' and aim for more precise vocabulary.

Example: Yes, I will use many numbers in my future work as a doctor. For example, I will need to interpret health statistics such as red blood cell counts and blood glucose levels, which are crucial for diagnosing patients.

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and better structured. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid repeating similar points. Also, complete your last sentence fully.

Example: I didn't enjoy studying math as a child because I found long division tedious. However, now I appreciate the beauty of mathematics and calculus, especially their importance in today's society. Therefore, I enjoy studying math much more than before.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using complete sentences and linking words to make it more coherent. Also, avoid hesitations and be more specific about why those numbers are important.

Example: I haven't thought about this before, but I would say phone numbers are important to me. For instance, when I lost my phone on a bus, I had to borrow someone else's phone to call my parents. This experience made me realise the importance of memorising emergency contact numbers.

× That is why when people try to introduce themselves to me.

✓ That is why, when people try to introduce themselves to me,

The sentence is incomplete and incorrectly punctuated. It is a dependent clause that needs to be connected to the following sentence to form a complete thought. Adding commas and connecting it properly improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And they give me their number.

✓ and they give me their number,

Starting a sentence with 'And' is generally informal and here it creates a sentence fragment. It should be connected to the previous clause to form a complete sentence.

× Usually I would need them to call me or I call them so that I can save them into my contacts.

✓ Usually, I would need them to call me or I would call them so that I can save their numbers into my contacts.

The sentence lacks parallel structure and clarity. 'I call them' should be 'I would call them' to match the conditional 'would' earlier. Also, 'save them' is vague; specifying 'their numbers' clarifies the meaning.

× A lot of numbers because I plan to study medicine and become a doctor in the future, and I think the most common type of numbers that I will be dealing with if I ever become a doctor in a hospital, I would say are the health statistics, for example, red blood cell counts or blood glucose level. ETC.

✓ I will use a lot of numbers because I plan to study medicine and become a doctor in the future. I think the most common types of numbers I will be dealing with if I become a doctor in a hospital are health statistics, for example, red blood cell counts or blood glucose levels, etc.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation. Breaking it into two sentences improves readability. 'A lot of numbers' needs a subject and verb. 'Types' should be plural to agree with 'numbers'. 'Blood glucose level' should be plural to match 'counts'. 'ETC.' should be lowercase and preceded by a comma.

× As a child I never really liked dealing with numbers, especially when it gets extremely meticulous with the long divisions.

✓ As a child, I never really liked dealing with numbers, especially when it got extremely meticulous with long division.

'Gets' should be past tense 'got' to match 'As a child'. 'The long divisions' is incorrect; 'long division' is an uncountable noun and does not need 'the' or plural form.

× So I definitely enjoy it more now than as a.

✓ So I definitely enjoy it more now than I did before.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding 'I did before' completes the comparison and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I have never really thought about that question but I would say phone numbers because last time I lost my phone on a bus an I had to use someone elses phone to call my parents and that is when I realized how important it is to.

✓ I have never really thought about that question, but I would say phone numbers because last time I lost my phone on a bus and I had to use someone else's phone to call my parents, and that is when I realized how important it is to

There are multiple issues: 'an' should be 'and'; 'someone elses' should be 'someone else's' to show possession; commas are needed to separate clauses for clarity. The sentence ends abruptly and should be completed for full correctness.

× Memorize some important or emergency call numbers.

✓ memorize some important or emergency call numbers.

This is a sentence fragment. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased to form a complete sentence. Lowercase 'memorize' if continuing the previous sentence.