Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and could be more concise. For example, 'encouraged me to sharing' should be 'encouraged me to share'. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly. Try to use linking words to connect your points naturally.

Example: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share because it helps build positivity and strong relationships. For instance, they taught me to share toys and treats with my siblings.

Suggestion: Your answer lists items but lacks smooth flow and contains awkward phrasing like 'as well as my toys, my books'. Try to organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid repeating similar words unnecessarily.

Example: I usually share many things with my friends, including stories, personal experiences, toys, and books.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing. For example, 'because of hygiene issue' should be 'because of hygiene reasons', and 'I'm not discussed' should be 'I don't discuss'. Try to organise your answer with linking words and clearer sentences.

Example: I prefer not to share my toothbrush for hygiene reasons. Also, I don't discuss my financial situation with others, and I avoid talking about my future plans until they are certain.

Suggestion: Your answer has good ideas but some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For example, 'Sharing car' should be 'Sharing cars', and 'make it very easier' should be 'makes it much easier'. Use linking words to connect your points smoothly and be more specific where possible.

Example: I think more people will share cars nowadays because of environmental concerns. Additionally, car sharing helps reduce traffic congestion, and technology makes it much easier through online apps and platforms.

× Yes, my parents always encouraged me to sharing things because it helps us to bring positivity and build strong relationship with each other.

✓ Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share things because it helps us to bring positivity and build strong relationships with each other.

The verb 'encouraged' should be followed by the base form 'to share' not the gerund 'to sharing'. Also, 'relationship' should be plural 'relationships' because it refers to multiple relationships with each other.

× Yes, my parents always encouraged me to sharing things because it helps us to bring positivity and build strong relationship with each other.

✓ Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share things because it helps us to bring positivity and build strong relationships with each other.

The noun 'relationship' should be plural 'relationships' because it refers to multiple relationships among people.

× For example, they always taught me to share toys and treats with siblings.

✓ For example, they always taught me to share toys and treats with my siblings.

The noun 'siblings' needs a possessive determiner 'my' to specify whose siblings are being referred to.

× A lot of things usually I share with my friends, such as stories, my experience and as well as my toys, my books.

✓ I usually share a lot of things with my friends, such as stories, my experiences, as well as my toys and my books.

The sentence structure is awkward; 'I usually share a lot of things' is clearer. 'Experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match the context. Also, 'as well as' should not be preceded by 'and'.

× A lot of things usually I share with my friends, such as stories, my experience and as well as my toys, my books.

✓ I usually share a lot of things with my friends, such as stories, my experiences, as well as my toys and my books.

'Experience' should be plural 'experiences' because it refers to multiple events or instances.

× I don't want to share my toothbrush because of hygiene issue as also I'm not discussed about my financial situation with others and I don't want to talk about my future plans till they are certain.

✓ I don't want to share my toothbrush because of hygiene issues, and also I don't discuss my financial situation with others, and I don't want to talk about my future plans until they are certain.

The phrase 'hygiene issue' should be plural 'hygiene issues'. 'I'm not discussed about' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't discuss'. 'Till' is informal; 'until' is preferred in formal speech.

× I don't want to share my toothbrush because of hygiene issue as also I'm not discussed about my financial situation with others and I don't want to talk about my future plans till they are certain.

✓ I don't want to share my toothbrush because of hygiene issues, and also I don't discuss my financial situation with others, and I don't want to talk about my future plans until they are certain.

The modal verb 'don't want to' is correctly used, but the phrase 'I'm not discussed about' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't discuss'. The sentence needed restructuring for clarity.

× Sharing car nowadays is more crucial because of environmental concern.

✓ Sharing cars nowadays is more crucial because of environmental concerns.

'Car' should be plural 'cars' because sharing involves multiple cars. 'Concern' should be plural 'concerns' to refer to various environmental issues.

× Also, they reduce the congestion of traffic and we can see technology make it very easier throughout the online apps and platforms.

✓ Also, it reduces traffic congestion, and we can see technology making it much easier through online apps and platforms.

'They' is unclear; 'it' refers to sharing cars. 'Make it very easier' is incorrect; it should be 'making it much easier'. 'Throughout' is incorrect preposition; 'through' is correct.