Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "Sharing Tommy's." To improve, use correct verb tenses and clarify your examples. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly.

Example: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share with others because they believed it was good behavior that strengthens relationships. For example, when I was a child, they praised me for sharing my toys with my cousins, which made me feel proud and motivated to keep sharing.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but has some awkward phrasing and minor errors, such as "try something else" and "try decks." To improve, use more natural expressions and correct vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: I usually share food and drinks with my friends because I enjoy trying new things. Whenever I discover something interesting, I tell them, which makes our conversations more enjoyable. As a result, we often plan meet-ups to try new dishes or beverages together.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like "I was not to share" and "my word content." To improve, use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Also, organize your ideas with linking words.

Example: Of course, I prefer not to share personal information such as my salary because it is confidential. Additionally, I avoid discussing my work content or strategies with colleagues to maintain my competitive edge and keep my projects unique.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but has repetition and unclear phrases like "the sharing because" and "Stats are very important." To improve, avoid repetition, clarify your points, and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: No, I don't think more people will share cars because most prefer to own their own vehicles for convenience and privacy. Moreover, concerns such as insurance liability make car sharing less appealing to many.

× Yes, my parents always encourage me to share things with others because they believe it was a good behavior and also strengthen relationship with others.

✓ Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share things with others because they believed it was good behavior and also strengthened relationships with others.

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'encouraged', 'believed', and 'strengthened' should be used instead of present tense. Also, 'a good behavior' should be 'good behavior' (uncountable), and 'relationship' should be plural 'relationships' to match the context.

× For example, when I was a child, they praised me that I share my choice with my cousins and I also felt proud and motivated to continue sharing.

✓ For example, when I was a child, they praised me for sharing my choices with my cousins and I also felt proud and motivated to continue sharing.

The phrase 'praised me that I share' is incorrect; it should be 'praised me for sharing' using the gerund form after 'praised'. Also, 'choice' should be plural 'choices' to match the context.

× Sharing Tommy's.

✓ Sharing Tommy's toys.

The sentence fragment 'Sharing Tommy's.' is incomplete and unclear. It needs an object to complete the meaning, such as 'Sharing Tommy's toys.' or similar.

× I would like to share foods and beverage with my friends because I like to try something else.

✓ I would like to share food and beverages with my friends because I like to try something different.

'Foods' is usually uncountable as 'food' unless referring to types of food; 'beverage' should be plural 'beverages' to match 'foods'. Also, 'something else' is better expressed as 'something different' in this context.

× Whenever I discover something new, I'll make sure to tell my friends.

✓ Whenever I discover something new, I make sure to tell my friends.

The sentence describes a habitual action, so present tense 'I make sure' is more appropriate than future tense 'I'll make sure'.

× This makes our conversation more enjoyable and interesting so that we can also schedule a meet up to try decks, new food, or new drinks.

✓ This makes our conversations more enjoyable and interesting, so we can also schedule meet-ups to try snacks, new food, or new drinks.

'Decks' is likely a typo or incorrect word; 'snacks' or 'dishes' fits better. 'Meet up' should be 'meet-ups' as plural noun. Also, 'conversation' should be plural 'conversations' to match the context.

× Of course, I was not to share my personal information such as payroll, that is quite confidential and I also avoid discussing my word content or strategies with my colleagues which can maintain my competitive edge and ensure my projects unique.

✓ Of course, I do not share my personal information such as payroll, which is quite confidential, and I also avoid discussing my work content or strategies with my colleagues to maintain my competitive edge and ensure my projects are unique.

'I was not to share' is incorrect; 'I do not share' is appropriate. 'That is' should be 'which is' to refer to payroll. 'Word content' is likely a typo for 'work content'. 'Which can maintain' should be 'to maintain' to express purpose. 'Ensure my projects unique' needs verb 'are'.

× No, I don't because the sharing because most people would like to own their their cars and they enjoy the convenience and privacy that owning their cars.

✓ No, I don't think so because most people would like to own their cars and enjoy the convenience and privacy that comes with owning them.

The sentence has redundant 'because the sharing because' and repeated 'their'. It needs restructuring for clarity and correctness.

× Stats are very important for them.

✓ Status is very important to them.

'Stats' is likely a typo for 'status'. 'Status' is uncountable singular noun, so 'is' is correct. Also, 'important for' should be 'important to'.

× On the other hand, there were some concerns about sharing cars like insurance liability.

✓ On the other hand, there are some concerns about sharing cars, such as insurance liability.

The sentence discusses current concerns, so present tense 'are' is appropriate instead of past tense 'were'. 'Like' should be 'such as' to introduce examples.