Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答较自然且内容相关，但可以更简洁，避免冗余。建议开头直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体细节支持。

Example: Yes, my parents taught me to share from a young age because they believed it was an important virtue. For example, they encouraged me to share snacks and toys with my friends.

Suggestion: 句子结构不够自然，有语法错误，且表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

Example: I like to share things like books or pens with others because they can return them to me later.

Suggestion: 表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议明确表达观点，使用连接词，并补充具体原因。

Example: Identity cards are not suitable for sharing because others might use them to commit crimes or misuse your personal information.

Suggestion: 语法错误较多，句子不完整且重复。建议重组句子，注意时态和连贯性。

Example: Recently, I shared my computer with my team members during an entrepreneurship competition because one of their computers was broken and being repaired.

Suggestion: 表达不完整且语法错误明显。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并用连贯的句子补充细节。

Example: I would first share good news with my parents because they have supported me a lot financially and emotionally throughout my journey.

Suggestion: 表达基本清楚，但用词和句式可以更自然。建议使用更地道的表达和连接词。

Example: I usually share recent news from the media or social events with my friends, but I avoid sharing private or personal matters.

× Well, although I develop sharing skill when I was a child, but I only share the things like books or pens to others since they will return to me.

✓ Well, although I developed sharing skills when I was a child, I only share things like books or pens with others since they will return them to me.

句中时态不一致，前半句描述过去发生的事情，应使用过去时developed；另外，'sharing skill'应为复数形式'sharing skills'，且去掉了多余的连词'but'，'share the things like books or pens to others'应改为'share things like books or pens with others'，因为动词share后接介词with表示分享给某人。

× Well, although I develop sharing skill when I was a child, but I only share the things like books or pens to others since they will return to me.

✓ Well, although I developed sharing skills when I was a child, I only share things like books or pens with others since they will return them to me.

'sharing skill'应为复数形式'sharing skills'，因为这里指的是多种分享技能。

× Well, although I develop sharing skill when I was a child, but I only share the things like books or pens to others since they will return to me.

✓ Well, although I developed sharing skills when I was a child, I only share things like books or pens with others since they will return them to me.

动词share后应接介词with表示分享给某人，不能用to。

× Yes, I share my computer with my team members when we were preparing for an entrepreneurship competition. Since my since one of my team members computer was broken and under repair.

✓ Yes, I shared my computer with my team members when we were preparing for an entrepreneurship competition, since one of my team member's computers was broken and under repair.

描述过去的动作应使用过去时，'share'应改为'shared'。另外，'team members computer'应为所有格形式'team member's computer'，且computer应为复数'computers'。

× Yes, I share my computer with my team members when we were preparing for an entrepreneurship competition. Since my since one of my team members computer was broken and under repair.

✓ Yes, I shared my computer with my team members when we were preparing for an entrepreneurship competition, since one of my team member's computers was broken and under repair.

句中多余的'since'应去掉，且应使用逗号连接两个分句。

× My parents of course, since they spend a lot of money and time supporting me to pursue my dreams. So when I get success I will firstly. Take some message to them to share my.

✓ My parents, of course, since they spend a lot of money and time supporting me to pursue my dreams. So when I succeed, I will first share the good news with them.

句子结构混乱，'So when I get success I will firstly. Take some message to them to share my.'不完整且断句错误，应合并并调整为完整句子。

× So when I get success I will firstly. Take some message to them to share my.

✓ So when I succeed, I will first share the good news with them.

'firstly'用法不当，通常用'first'作为副词；'get success'表达不自然，应改为'succeed'。

× The most dangerous one is your identity card, because the people may use your card to commit crime and what's more, maybe your card is also not suitable.

✓ The most dangerous one is your identity card, because people may use your card to commit crimes, and what's more, your card is also not suitable for sharing.

'the people'应改为'people'，泛指人群时不加定冠词；'commit crime'应为复数形式'commit crimes'；句尾不完整，补充完整表达。

× I usually discuss the recent media news or some social events with my friends as I would not share the privates and personal things.

✓ I usually discuss recent media news or some social events with my friends as I would not share private and personal things.

'the privates'用法错误，应为'private'作为形容词修饰名词；'privates'作为名词不合适。