Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas. For example, you can say "My parents taught me that sharing happiness doubles it, so I often shared snacks with my friends in primary school, which helped me build strong friendships and created memorable moments."

Example: My parents taught me that sharing happiness doubles it. Therefore, I often shared my snacks with friends during primary school, which helped me build strong friendships and created memorable moments that I still cherish today.

Suggestion: Improve your grammar and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about the types of knowledge or experiences you share. For example, "I enjoy sharing study tips and personal experiences during study week because exchanging ideas helps us prepare thoroughly for exams."

Example: I enjoy sharing study tips and personal experiences during study week because exchanging ideas helps us prepare thoroughly for our exams.

Suggestion: Good answer with clear reasons and examples. To improve, use linking words like "because" and "for example" more effectively and correct minor grammar errors. For instance, "Personal items such as cosmetics and toothbrushes are not suitable for sharing because they can easily transmit bacteria and affect hygiene. For example, sharing toothbrushes or cosmetic brushes can cause skin infections and redness."

Example: Personal items such as cosmetics and toothbrushes are not suitable for sharing because they can easily transmit bacteria and affect hygiene. For example, sharing toothbrushes or cosmetic brushes can cause skin infections and redness.

Suggestion: Focus on correct grammar and clarity. Avoid unclear phrases like "make it more tired of." Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Recently, I shared notes I prepared with a friend because I believe she can help me make them more detailed and well-organised. By discussing the material together, we can both understand it better and prepare more effectively for our exams."

Example: Recently, I shared notes I prepared with a friend because I believe she can help me make them more detailed and well-organised. By discussing the material together, we can both understand it better and prepare more effectively for our exams.

Suggestion: Good content and structure. Improve grammar by using correct verb forms and plural/singular agreement. For example, "I would say my family because they always support me unconditionally in every decision I make. So, no matter whether the news is positive or not, I tell them immediately because they truly encourage and support me."

Example: I would say my family because they always support me unconditionally in every decision I make. So, no matter whether the news is positive or not, I tell them immediately because they truly encourage and support me.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and word choice, for example, use "graduation" instead of "graduatings." Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "I mostly share news about exams, such as examination dates and result release times, because passing exams and graduation are our top priorities. Therefore, we like to keep each other updated."

Example: I mostly share news about exams, such as examination dates and result release times, because passing exams and graduation are our top priorities. Therefore, we like to keep each other updated.

× Yes, my parents one told me have sharing happiness means happiness double.

✓ Yes, my parents once told me that sharing happiness means happiness doubles.

The sentence has singular and plural issues: 'one' should be 'once' to indicate time, and 'happiness double' should be 'happiness doubles' to agree in number and verb form. Also, 'have sharing' is incorrect; it should be 'that sharing'. The correction improves clarity and grammatical agreement.

× So I often share my snacks with my friends when I was in primary school.

✓ So I often shared my snacks with my friends when I was in primary school.

The sentence mixes present tense 'share' with past time 'when I was in primary school'. The verb should be in past tense 'shared' to match the time frame.

× It helps me to create strong relationship with my friends and it creates the memorable moment until today.

✓ It helps me to create strong relationships with my friends and it creates memorable moments until today.

'Relationship' and 'moment' should be plural to match the context of multiple friends and multiple moments. Also, 'the memorable moment' is incorrect; 'memorable moments' is more natural.

× There is a wide variety of things that I would enjoy to share, such as knowledge and personal experiences during study week.

✓ There is a wide variety of things that I would enjoy sharing, such as knowledge and personal experiences during study week.

The verb after 'would enjoy' should be in the -ing form ('sharing'), not the infinitive ('to share'). This is a modal verb usage rule.

× I believe that discussion that exchange ideas would benefits us to prepare for our exam thoroughly.

✓ I believe that discussions that exchange ideas would benefit us to prepare for our exams thoroughly.

'Discussion' should be plural 'discussions' to match 'exchange ideas'. 'Benefits' should be 'benefit' to agree with plural subject. 'Exam' should be plural 'exams' to match context.

× I think personal items like cosmetics and toothbrushes because these things can transmit the bacteria easily and affect hygiene.

✓ I think personal items like cosmetics and toothbrushes should not be shared because these things can transmit bacteria easily and affect hygiene.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a preposition or phrase to connect the idea. Adding 'should not be shared' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'the bacteria' should be 'bacteria' without 'the'.

× For example, sharing toothbrushes or the brushes for cosmetic will cause skin infection and lead to skin redness.

✓ For example, sharing toothbrushes or cosmetic brushes will cause skin infections and lead to skin redness.

'Brushes for cosmetic' should be 'cosmetic brushes' for correct adjective order. 'Skin infection' should be plural 'skin infections' to match general statement.

× Recently I share a note with my friends that I prepare myself.

✓ Recently I shared a note with my friends that I prepared myself.

The adverb 'recently' indicates past time, so verbs 'share' and 'prepare' should be in past tense 'shared' and 'prepared'.

× I share to her because I believe she can help me to make it more tired of and well organised.

✓ I shared it with her because I believe she can help me make it more thorough and well organised.

'Share to her' is incorrect; correct preposition is 'with her'. 'Make it more tired of' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'more thorough'. Also, 'well organised' should be hyphenated as 'well-organised' but acceptable as is.

× By discussing the material together, we can both have a deeper understanding about it and prepare more effectively for our exams.

✓ By discussing the material together, we can both have a deeper understanding of it and prepare more effectively for our exams.

The correct preposition with 'understanding' is 'of', not 'about'.

× I would say my family because they always support me unconditionally in every decision I made.

✓ I would say my family because they always support me unconditionally in every decision I make.

The phrase 'every decision I made' mixes past tense 'made' with present context. It should be present tense 'make' to match 'always support'.

× So no matter the news is positive or not, I would tell them immediately because they are the person who truly encourage and support me.

✓ So no matter whether the news is positive or not, I would tell them immediately because they are the people who truly encourage and support me.

'The person' should be plural 'the people' to agree with plural pronoun 'them'. Also, 'encourage' should be 'encourage' (plural verb) to agree with plural subject.

× I think it's mostly about exams like examination days and when the result will be released.

✓ I think it's mostly about exams like examination days and when the results will be released.

'Result' should be plural 'results' to match 'exams' and plural context.

× This is because passing exams and graduatings are the prioritized task for us, so we would like to keep each other updated about it.

✓ This is because passing exams and graduations are the prioritized tasks for us, so we would like to keep each other updated about them.

'Graduatings' is incorrect; correct noun is 'graduations'. 'Task' should be plural 'tasks' to match plural subjects. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'exams and graduations'.