Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答中时态使用不准确，且表达不够自然流畅。建议注意时态一致性，避免语法错误，并使用更自然的表达方式。

Example: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. In Chinese culture, being generous and helpful to others is very important. They often told me historical stories that emphasized the value of sharing.

Suggestion: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够清晰。建议避免重复，注意单复数和冠词的使用，表达更具体。

Example: I like to share my opinions and ideas because they help me express myself and connect with others on a deeper level. Besides that, I also share useful items or information when appropriate.

Suggestion: 回答中词汇使用不当，表达不清晰。建议使用准确的词汇，简洁明了地表达观点。

Example: I believe personal and sensitive matters, like family emotions, are not suitable for sharing because they require trust and understanding.

Suggestion: 回答中有重复词汇，连接词使用不当。建议避免重复，合理使用连接词，使表达更流畅。

Example: Recently, I visited High Park and saw the stunning golden ginkgo trees. I really enjoyed the autumn scenery, so I shared pictures of it on social media.

Suggestion: 句子结构混乱，语法错误较多。建议简化句子结构，注意主谓一致和词汇搭配。

Example: I like to share good news with my parents because they always support me. Sharing my achievements makes me proud and shows them what I can accomplish on my own. Their encouragement lifts my spirits to keep working hard.

Suggestion: 回答中有重复词汇，表达不够连贯。建议使用更自然的表达，避免重复，增强连贯性。

Example: I share news that reflects my feelings with my friends. When I'm feeling down, I tell them about my problems to get advice or emotional support. When I have good news, I enjoy receiving their encouragement.

× Yes, my parents tell me to share when I was a child.

✓ Yes, my parents told me to share when I was a child.

这里描述的是过去发生的事情，动词应使用过去式。"tell"应改为过去式"told"。

× Due to traditional Chinese value, it's essential to be generous and helpful to other.

✓ Due to traditional Chinese values, it's essential to be generous and helpful to others.

"value"应为复数形式"values"，且"helpful to other"中"other"应为复数形式"others"，表示对他人。

× They usually tell me story from history that is emphasize the value of share.

✓ They usually tell me stories from history that emphasize the value of sharing.

"story"应为复数"stories"，"is emphasize"应为"emphasize"，且"value of share"中"share"应为动名词"sharing"。

× I share abstract things like my own opinion or idea.

✓ I share abstract things like my own opinions or ideas.

"opinion"和"idea"应使用复数形式，表示多种观点和想法。

× They help me to express myself and connect with other on the deeper level.

✓ They help me to express myself and connect with others on a deeper level.

"other"应为复数"others"，且"on the deeper level"应为不定冠词"on a deeper level"。

× When it comes to the particular thing, a particular thing, I like to share some, uh, helpful items or in information.

✓ When it comes to a particular thing, I like to share some helpful items or information.

去掉重复的"the particular thing"，"in information"应为"information"，且"information"不可数，不用冠词。

× I think something personal and sensitive such as emotion bounder bundles from family is not suitable for share.

✓ I think something personal and sensitive such as emotional boundary bundles from family are not suitable for sharing.

"emotion bounder bundles"应为"emotional boundary bundles"，且主语为复数，谓语动词用复数"are"，"for share"应为"for sharing"。

× Matters can be difficult to discuss from others because they are they require the trust and understanding.

✓ Matters can be difficult to discuss with others because they require trust and understanding.

"discuss from others"应为"discuss with others"，且"the trust and understanding"去掉定冠词"the"。

× Recently I went to be High Park.

✓ Recently I went to High Park.

"went to be High Park"中"to be"多余，应去掉。

× The golden ginkgo tree is absolutely absolutely stunning.

✓ The golden ginkgo tree is absolutely stunning.

"absolutely"重复，应去掉一个。

× I enjoy the scenery of autumn. Thus therefore I spread the picture on social media.

✓ I enjoy the scenery of autumn. Therefore, I shared the picture on social media.

"Thus therefore"重复，选用"Therefore"即可，且动作发生在过去，应使用过去式"shared"。

× I like to share with my parents who always support me, share my achievements with that made me feel proud and as it shows them I can accomplish a lot of thing with my own strength there.

✓ I like to share with my parents who always support me, share my achievements with them that make me feel proud and show them I can accomplish a lot of things with my own strength.

"share my achievements with that"应为"share my achievements with them"，"made"应为现在时"make"，"thing"应为复数"things"，"there"多余。

× Moreover, their encourage me encouragement, lift my spirit to keep working.

✓ Moreover, their encouragement encourages me and lifts my spirit to keep working.

"their encourage me encouragement"结构错误，应为"their encouragement encourages me"，动词和名词搭配正确，且"lift"应为第三人称单数形式"lifts"。

× I share some news that can reflect my feelings.

✓ I share some news that can reflect my feelings.

此句无明显语法错误，保持原句。

× Uh, when I feel blue, I share bad, bad news to seek their advice or emotional support.

✓ Uh, when I feel blue, I share bad news to seek their advice or emotional support.

"bad, bad news"重复，应去掉一个。

× Or when it comes to good news, I gain encouragement from them.

✓ When it comes to good news, I gain encouragement from them.

句首不宜用"Or"，应直接用"When"。