Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy such as repeating 'my parents' and 'I had a little brother' in the same sentence. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

Example: Yes, they did because as the oldest sister, I was often encouraged to share my toys and food with my little brother to set a good example.

Suggestion: Your answer is friendly and shows willingness to share, but try to avoid vague phrases like 'basically everything' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: I enjoy sharing many things with others, such as my thoughts with friends and even food when we dine out; for example, we often exchange dishes to try different flavors.

Suggestion: Good content with specific examples. To improve, avoid filler words like 'uh' and try to use more formal vocabulary such as 'private' instead of 'intimate stuff'. Also, use linking words to list examples clearly.

Example: Certain personal matters should not be shared, such as private details about relationships, financial information, or negative feelings towards others.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but contains some unclear phrases like 'how's that cheap?'. Try to avoid informal or unclear expressions and improve sentence flow with linking words. Also, be concise and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, recently I visited Beijing for a week, which is very different from Hong Kong. When I returned, I shared my experiences and interesting historical facts about the city with my friends.

Suggestion: Your answer is thoughtful but could be more concise and structured. Avoid repeating 'I would' and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: It depends on the situation; if I'm with someone, I share the good news immediately, but if I'm alone, I usually tell my best friend or boyfriend first.

Suggestion: Your answer has good content but incomplete ending and some grammar issues. Try to complete your sentences fully and use linking words to connect ideas clearly.

Example: I usually share news related to my personal growth, such as meaningful books I've read, life lessons I've learned, or interesting people I've met recently.

× I had a little brother and whenever I got a new toy or I was having some delicious food, my parents they would ask me to share with my little brother because they said that I'm a big sister.

✓ I have a little brother and whenever I get a new toy or I am having some delicious food, my parents ask me to share with my little brother because they say that I am a big sister.

The student used past tense 'had' and 'got' but the context implies a habitual action in the past or present. Also, 'my parents they would ask' is redundant; 'they would ask' or 'my parents ask' is sufficient. The singular and plural forms are correct but the tense consistency is important here. The correction aligns the sentence with present tense to reflect habitual actions and removes redundancy.

× my parents they would ask me to share with my little brother because they said that I'm a big sister.

✓ my parents would ask me to share with my little brother because they said that I am a big sister.

The phrase 'my parents they would ask' contains a redundant pronoun 'they'. In English, subject pronouns should not be repeated unnecessarily. Removing 'they' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× I'm kind of person who enjoy sharing stuff with people, basically everything.

✓ I'm the kind of person who enjoys sharing stuff with people, basically everything.

The phrase 'I'm kind of person' is missing the definite article 'the'. Also, 'who enjoy' should be 'who enjoys' to agree with the singular subject 'person'. This correction fixes article usage and subject-verb agreement.

× I'm kind of person who enjoy sharing stuff with people, basically everything.

✓ I'm the kind of person who enjoys sharing stuff with people, basically everything.

The verb 'enjoy' should be in third person singular form 'enjoys' to agree with the singular subject 'person'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue.

× my parents they would ask me to share with my little brother because they said that I'm a big sister.

✓ my parents would ask me to share with my little brother because they said that I am a big sister.

The pronoun 'they' after 'my parents' is redundant and should be removed to avoid repetition.

× Some personal matters are not supposed to share with others.

✓ Some personal matters are not supposed to be shared with others.

The verb 'share' needs to be in the passive form 'be shared' because the sentence is in passive voice. Also, 'supposed to share' is incorrect; it should be 'supposed to be shared' to indicate that sharing is not appropriate.

× I think those things are not supposed to share with others.

✓ I think those things are not supposed to be shared with others.

Same as above, the verb 'share' should be in passive form 'be shared' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, I do, because recently I have been to Beijing for seven days and Beijing is quite a different city compared to Hong Kong.

✓ Yes, I do, because recently I went to Beijing for seven days and Beijing is quite a different city compared to Hong Kong.

The present perfect 'have been' is acceptable but 'went' is more natural when specifying a completed action in the recent past. Both can be correct but 'went' fits better in spoken English for a specific past event.

× So when I came back to Hong Kong, everyone around me was asking, oh, how's that cheap? Is that fun?

✓ So when I came back to Hong Kong, everyone around me was asking, oh, how was that trip? Was it fun?

The phrase 'how's that cheap?' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the student meant 'how was that trip?'. Also, 'Is that fun?' should be 'Was it fun?' to match past tense context.

× So I will share a lot with them about what I've done in Beijing and also I'll share some historical stuff with them.

✓ So I will share a lot with them about what I did in Beijing and also I'll share some historical stuff with them.

'I've done' is present perfect, which is acceptable, but 'I did' is more natural when referring to specific past actions. Both are acceptable but 'I did' fits better here.

× So if I was talking to someone and I got the good news then I would directly share with that person.

✓ So if I am talking to someone and I get good news then I will directly share with that person.

The sentence is a conditional statement about a general situation, so present tense 'am talking' and 'get' with future 'will share' is appropriate. Using past tense 'was talking' and 'got' is incorrect here.

× But if I was alone and I got the good news then I would just share with my very best friend and also my boyfriend.

✓ But if I am alone and I get good news then I will just share with my very best friend and also my boyfriend.

Same as above, the conditional sentence should use present tense for the condition and future tense for the result.

× Mostly it's related to my personal growth.

✓ Mostly, it is related to my personal growth.

Adding a comma after 'Mostly' improves sentence clarity and flow.

× For example if I read some book which is very meaningful then I will share it with my friends.

✓ For example, if I read a book which is very meaningful, then I will share it with my friends.

The article 'some' is incorrect here; 'a book' is appropriate. Also, commas after introductory phrases improve clarity.

× Or if I learn something through my life moments then I will share with my friends.

✓ Or if I learn something from my life experiences, then I will share it with my friends.

'Through my life moments' is awkward; 'from my life experiences' is more natural. Also, 'share with my friends' should be 'share it with my friends' to specify the object.

× Or even when I met someone new I will.

✓ Or even when I meet someone new, I will share with my friends.

The sentence is incomplete and inconsistent in tense. Changing 'met' to 'meet' and completing the sentence clarifies the meaning and maintains tense consistency.