Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm), and complete the final clause. Add one specific example to support the statement. Keep to at most 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, definitely. My parents taught me to share, especially food, with my elder sister and relatives because our culture values generosity. For example, during festivals we always prepared extra food to give neighbors, which taught me not to waste and to care for others.

Suggestion: Provide a fluent, connected response with linking words and a specific example. Remove hesitations and slightly expand with a reason and an example. Keep it under five sentences.

Example: I usually like to share food items because they are perishable and I can’t eat everything I buy. For instance, if I cook too much rice or buy extra fruit, I give some to my neighbors so it doesn't go to waste.

Suggestion: Answer more clearly and accurately. Use correct categories and explain briefly why they are unsuitable. Avoid listing unrelated items and correct grammar (e.g., 'shaving blades, soap, and toothbrushes').

Example: I wouldn't share personal grooming items, such as shaving blades, toothbrushes, or used towels, because they can spread infections. These items are personal and inexpensive to replace, so sharing them is unsafe and unnecessary.

Suggestion: Make the timeline and intentions clear and use natural phrasing. Connect sentences with linking words and give a brief plan or result. Remove unnecessary words like 'anyone' when vague.

Example: Yes. I recently bought half a kilo of biryani, and because it is perishable I plan to invite some friends over to share it. That way the food will be enjoyed and not wasted.

Suggestion: Clarify and complete your idea. Start with a direct statement, avoid fillers, and explain why you tell your mother first with a concise reason and a short example. Keep sentences grammatical and connected.

Example: I would share good news with my mother first because she is very supportive and excited about my achievements. For example, when I got a promotion last year, she was the first person I called because she always encourages me.

Suggestion: Use clear vocabulary (e.g., 'job status' or 'career updates') and explain why you share such news. Remove hesitations and redundant phrases. Provide a short example of what you tell them and how they respond.

Example: I usually share job-related news or career updates with my friends, such as a new job, a promotion, or interview results, because they give advice and support. For instance, after an interview I told my friend about the outcome and she helped me prepare for the next step.

× They taught me share foods, uh, with my elder sister and with my relatives.

✓ They taught me to share food with my elder sister and my relatives.

Missing 'to' before the verb: after 'taught someone' we use the infinitive 'to share'. Also 'foods' is uncountable here; use 'food'. Suggestion: use 'taught me to share food'.

× I cannot consume all the food items I purchase, so it is better to share with others than wasting food.

✓ I cannot consume all the food items I purchase, so it is better to share them with others than to waste the food.

Comparison structure needs parallel forms: 'better to share... than to waste...'. Also refer back to 'food items' with 'them' and use 'the food' for specific reference. Suggestion: keep verbs in infinitive after 'better'.

× These are cheap available in our market and it is part of our personal.

✓ These are cheaply available in our market and are part of our personal items.

Use adverb 'cheaply' to modify 'available'. 'Part of our personal' is incomplete; add 'items' and use plural agreement. Suggestion: say 'are part of our personal items'.

× I recently have purchased half KG of biryani.

✓ I recently purchased half a kilogram of biryani.

For recent past actions native usage prefers simple past 'purchased' rather than 'have purchased' with 'recently' (both possible but simple past is more natural). Also use 'half a kilogram' instead of 'half KG'. Suggestion: use 'I recently purchased half a kilogram of biryani.'

× Since it is perishable, it is better to share with anyone.

✓ Since it is perishable, it is better to share it with someone.

'Share with anyone' is unnatural here; use 'share it with someone' and include the object pronoun 'it' to refer to the biryani. Suggestion: 'share it with someone'.

× I am planning to call my friends to visit my home so I can share the food with them.

✓ I am planning to invite my friends to my home so I can share the food with them.

'Call my friends to visit my home' is awkward; 'invite my friends to my home' is more natural. Tense 'am planning' fits future intent. Suggestion: use 'invite'.

× The first preferred person to share the good news, umm, with is my mother.

✓ The first person I would prefer to share good news with is my mother.

Rewrite for natural English: place clause 'I would prefer' and place 'with' at end is acceptable. Original word order is awkward. Suggestion: use 'The first person I would prefer to share good news with is my mother.'

× My mother is.

✓ My mother is the first person I would tell.

Original fragment 'My mother is.' lacks a verb and is incomplete. Provide a complete clause indicating role. Suggestion: finish the sentence to convey meaning.

× I'm so happy and keen to, uh, know my status.

✓ She is very eager to know my status.

Pronoun reference: earlier sentence intended about mother; 'I'm so happy and keen to know my status' conflicts. Likely meant 'She is very eager to know my status.' Use 'eager' to mean 'keen' plus 'very'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun refers to correct person and use 'eager'.

× She's, uh, very much engaged.

✓ She is very interested and involved.

'Very much engaged' is informal and ambiguous; 'interested and involved' clarifies meaning. Also expand contraction for formality. Suggestion: use clearer adjectives.

× I like to share my status of job UMM with my friends.

✓ I like to share news about my job status with my friends.

'Status of job' is awkward; use 'job status' or 'news about my job status'. Remove filler 'UMM'. Suggestion: 'share news about my job status'.

× Since it is my responsibility to update the status and news in my career UMM, it is better to share my information with them.

✓ Since I am responsible for updating others about my career, it is better to share this information with them.

Awkward phrasing 'update the status and news in my career' and filler 'UMM'. Use 'I am responsible for updating others about my career' and 'this information'. Suggestion: simplify to clear subject-verb structure.