Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は直接質問に答えており内容も適切ですが、発話に不要な「uh」や繰り返しが多く、文のまとまりが弱いです。また具体性を高めるために短い例を入れると良いでしょう。5文以内で主題文→補足→具体例の順で話す練習をしてください。

Example: Yes. My parents taught me to share because I grew up with an older sister and a younger brother. For example, we often shared clothes and snacks, so I learned to take turns and respect others' needs.

Suggestion: 良い構成で直接答えていますが、接続が不自然な箇所（"so and"など）や、もう少し具体的な説明（どんな服か、どんな場面で）を加えるとより説得力が増します。接続詞（because, therefore, so）を正しく使う練習をしてください。

Example: I like to share clothes, especially casual T-shirts and jackets, with my younger brother because our fashion tastes are similar. Because we share, we both save money and can try each other's styles.

Suggestion: 考えは明確ですが文法ミス（単数・複数、語順）や語句の抜けがあり、論理の流れが途切れています。理由を具体的に述べ、接続詞で文をつなげてください。また語彙を少し増やして“skin infections”や“hygiene”といった語を使うとよいです。

Example: I think makeup products are not suitable for sharing because they can transfer bacteria. If someone shares lipstick or mascara, it can cause skin irritation or infections, so it's better to keep them personal.

Suggestion: 答えは明確ですが繰り返しや不自然な語順（"one computer, 1 laptop in at home in"）があり、詳細がやや不明瞭です。どのように時間を分けて使うか、または共有による利点や不便さを一つ加えると良いです。

Example: Yes. Recently I have been sharing a single laptop with my family. We take turns using it in the evenings, which saves money, though sometimes it can be inconvenient when someone needs it urgently.

Suggestion: 感情と理由は伝わりますが、最後が未完で文が切れているため、結論を明確にして終わらせる練習が必要です。また不必要なためらい語（uh）を減らしましょう。

Example: I would share good news with my parents first because they always encourage me and celebrate my achievements, which makes me feel more confident.

Suggestion: 答えは自然で具体性もありますが、語法や表現（"a story about relationship"）を改善するとより流暢になります。繋ぎの語（for example, such as）を使って具体的な話題を短く付け加えてください。

Example: I usually share news about relationships with my friends. For example, if I start dating someone or have a problem in a relationship, I tell them because they give advice and support.

× Yes they did. My parents taught me to share when I was a child, uh, because I have uh, older sister and younger brother, so I needed to, to share a lot of things such as clothes, food and so on. So.

✓ Yes, they did. My parents taught me to share when I was a child, because I have an older sister and a younger brother, so I needed to share many things such as clothes and food.

'older sister' and 'younger brother' need indefinite articles 'an' and 'a' before singular countable nouns. 'a lot of things' is informal; 'many things' is more natural here. Removed filler words and redundant 'to'.

× Well, I like to share clothes with others. I often share my clothes with my younger brothers because our taste of fashion is similar, so and if we share the clothes, we can save money.

✓ Well, I like to share clothes with others. I often share my clothes with my younger brother because our taste in fashion is similar, and if we share clothes, we can save money.

'younger brothers' was plural but earlier speaker mentioned one younger brother; ensure singular consistency. Use 'taste in fashion' not 'taste of fashion'. Remove redundant article 'the' before 'clothes' when speaking generally. Replace 'so and' with 'and'.

× I think makeup products is not suitable for sharing. When people share those items with others, it's not clean and people often. Face skin problems easily so.

✓ I think makeup products are not suitable for sharing. When people share those items, they are often not clean and can easily cause skin problems.

Plural subject 'makeup products' requires verb 'are' not 'is'. The sentence fragments were combined into a clear structure; use 'can easily cause skin problems' for natural expression.

× Yes I do. I share a computer with my family at home. We have one computer, 1 laptop in at home in. My parents and I often use the same things because we can save a lot of money in.

✓ Yes, I do. I share a computer with my family at home. We have one computer and one laptop at home. My parents and I often use the same devices because we can save a lot of money.

Use consistent wording for numbers: 'one computer and one laptop'. Remove duplicate prepositions 'in'. 'things' is vague; 'devices' is more precise. Remove trailing preposition 'in'.

× I would like to share good news with my parents at first uh, my parents always smile a lot when I talk about my good news, so it helps me feel confident and.

✓ I would like to share good news with my parents first. My parents always smile when I tell them my good news, so it makes me feel confident.

Use 'first' instead of 'at first' for intended order. Split run-on sentence into two. Use 'tell them my good news' for natural collocation. Removed trailing 'and' and filler 'uh'.

× I would like to talk about a story about relationship with my friends. My friends and I really like talking about romance relationships, so if I fall in love with someone I want to share with.

✓ I would like to talk about relationships with my friends. My friends and I really like talking about romantic relationships, so if I fall in love with someone, I want to share that with them.

Use plural 'relationships' and correct preposition: 'talk about relationships' not 'a story about relationship'. Use adjective 'romantic' not noun 'romance' as modifier. Add object 'that' and 'with them' to complete the sentence and clarify who is being told.