Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp, từ vựng và độ tự nhiên. Hãy sửa các lỗi động từ (ví dụ: "touched" → "taught"), luôn mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, tiếp theo là chi tiết cụ thể, và tránh lặp từ. Thêm liên từ để mạch lạc hơn và giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

Example: Yes, they did. My parents taught me to be generous from a young age and still encourage it now. For example, they often asked me to share clothes and food with underprivileged children so I could learn the value of helping others.

Suggestion: Nội dung có ý tưởng nhưng cấu trúc câu, ngữ pháp (thời thì, danh động từ), và lựa chọn từ chưa chính xác. Tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như "empathetics"; nên dùng "empathy" hoặc nói "my feelings". Dùng thì nhất quán (present simple / past simple) và kết nối logic bằng 'also' hoặc 'for example'. Giữ 2-4 câu súc tích.

Example: I like to share personal stories and practical items. For example, I often tell my friends about my life experiences to offer support, and I also donate clothes and food to children in the mountains; last summer I volunteered there.

Suggestion: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng từ ngữ lẫn trật tự câu lẫn lộn khiến khó hiểu. Cần dùng từ chính xác (ví dụ: 'expired food' thay vì 'spotlight food'; 'broken phones' thay vì 'phone clothes'), và cấu trúc câu đơn giản, mạch lạc. Giải thích vì sao là không phù hợp (vì không an toàn hoặc thiếu tôn trọng). Giữ 2-3 câu.

Example: Items that are unsuitable to share include damaged or unsafe goods. For example, expired food or broken phones should not be donated because they can be dangerous or disrespectful to the recipients.

Suggestion: Nên chỉnh ngữ pháp (đại từ, thì), dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và sắp xếp ý hợp lý. Tránh lỗi như 'call it' → 'call them' hoặc 'call my friends'; đồng nhất thì (present perfect / past simple). Thêm linking words như 'so' hoặc 'which' để giải thích kết quả. Giữ 2-3 câu.

Example: Yes. Recently I have been calling and messaging my friends because I felt nervous about my exams. They gave me advice and encouragement, which made me feel much more confident.

Suggestion: Ý tốt và gần đúng nhưng cần sửa lỗi ảnh hưởng tính tự nhiên: 'I want it to be proud' → 'I want them to be proud'; số ít/đa số 'an important exam'. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu lý do ngắn gọn. Hạn chế lỗi nhỏ để tự nhiên hơn.

Example: I would tell my parents first. Whenever I get good results or pass an important exam, I tell them because I want them to be proud and they are the people who know me best and always support me.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời lặp từ, ngữ pháp sai (word order, articles, plural), và mô tả thiếu chính xác. Nên dùng 'my friends and I' và 'celebrity news' hoặc 'news about celebrities'. Giải thích ngắn cách chia sẻ (e.g., via group chat) và giữ 2-3 câu. Tránh lặp 'then'.

Example: My friends and I often share celebrity news on social media. For example, if there is a new drama or scandal about a celebrity, we post links in our group chat and discuss it together.

× Yes, they did. They often touched me to be generous when I was a child and still encourage me now.

✓ Yes, they did. They often taught me to be generous when I was a child and still encourage me now.

'Touched' is the wrong verb; the past tense of 'teach' is 'taught'. Use 'taught me to be generous' to show parents instructed the child. Ensure verb choice matches intended meaning.

× For instance, they often told me to share clothes or food for underprivileged children or elderly people so I can learn the value of helping others in life.

✓ For instance, they often told me to share clothes or food with underprivileged children or elderly people so I could learn the value of helping others in life.

Use 'with' not 'for' when indicating sharing recipients. Also maintain past tense consistency: 'told' + 'could' (not 'can') because the action refers to the past.

× I think it's various things such as story or empathetics.

✓ I think it's various things such as stories or empathy.

Use the plural 'stories' for countable items and the noun 'empathy' (not 'empathetics'). 'Various things' should be followed by appropriate noun forms.

× For example, when I was talking with my friends, I often share my life story with them.

✓ For example, when I was talking with my friends, I often shared my life stories with them.

Maintain past tense consistency: 'was talking' (past continuous) should pair with 'shared' (past simple). Also use plural 'stories' for multiple instances.

× Not only that, but also Sir, I'm often share my clothes or food to mountain children.

✓ Not only that, Sir, I often share my clothes or food with mountain children.

Remove 'I'm' before 'often' and use correct word order: subject + adverb + verb. Use 'with' instead of 'to' for sharing recipients.

× Like last summer, I go to the mountain to make a volunteer.

✓ Like last summer, I went to the mountains to do volunteer work.

Use past tense 'went' for a past time marker 'last summer'. Use 'mountains' plural and the phrase 'do volunteer work' or 'volunteer' as noun; 'make a volunteer' is incorrect.

× I think items that are unsuitable for sharing are things that are damaged or unsafe, for example like spotlight food or phone clothes.

✓ I think items that are unsuitable for sharing are things that are damaged or unsafe, for example spoiled food or used phones/clothing.

'Spotlight food' is incorrect; likely 'spoiled food'. 'Phone clothes' is unclear; suggest 'used phones' or 'used clothing'. Choose precise nouns.

× If volunteers donate this, it cannot maybe use it and even though and even it can helpful and disrespectful to the local children.

✓ If volunteers donate these items, the children may not be able to use them, and the donations could be unhelpful or even disrespectful to the local children.

Original sentence has multiple structure problems. Use plural 'these items', correct modal placement 'may not be able to', and clarify 'unhelpful or disrespectful'. Avoid redundant connectors.

× Yes, recently I often call it and send message with my friends because I'm really nervous about my exams.

✓ Yes, recently I have often called and sent messages to my friends because I'm really nervous about my exams.

Use present perfect 'have often called' for recent repeated actions; use correct verb forms 'sent messages' and preposition 'to' for recipients. 'Call it' is incorrect.

× When I share with her, she gave me advice and encouraged me to do the best which make me feel much more confident.

✓ When I shared with her, she gave me advice and encouraged me to do my best, which made me feel much more confident.

Maintain past tense throughout: 'shared', 'gave', 'encouraged', 'made'. Use the idiom 'do my best'.

× It's my parents, for example, when I get good results or pass an important exams, I always tell them first because I want it to be proud of me and they are the people who know me best and support me in every situation.

✓ It’s my parents. For example, when I get good results or pass an important exam, I always tell them first because I want them to be proud of me, and they are the people who know me best and support me in every situation.

Use 'parents' as plural and refer with 'them'. 'An important exams' should be 'an important exam'. Replace 'it' with 'them'. Split into clearer sentences.

× I and my friends often share with each other about news of celebrities on social media.

✓ My friends and I often share news about celebrities on social media with each other.

Use the polite order 'My friends and I'. Do not use 'share with each other about'; use 'share news about' and 'with each other' if needed.

× For example, when I see what dramas about the celebrity, we are the fan and then we will share each other in our groups and then we will talk together about the news.

✓ For example, when I see dramas about a celebrity, we are fans and then we share them in our group, and we talk together about the news.

Use 'dramas about a celebrity', plural 'fans', present simple 'share' for habitual actions, 'share them in our group' is clearer than 'share each other'. Remove redundant 'then'.