Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be careful with grammar (verb forms) and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct tense and subject-verb agreement.

Example: Yes. My parents taught me to share from a young age, so I often gave my toys and snacks to friends. As a result, they were happy and I felt less lonely during playtime.

Suggestion: Use consistent tense and avoid mixing contractions awkwardly. Provide a clear contrast with linking words (e.g., 'when... but now...'). Make details specific and correct verb forms.

Example: It depends. When I was a child, I liked sharing snacks and toys because it made playtime more fun. Now I usually share personal stories and feelings with close friends so we can support each other.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and be more precise in vocabulary (e.g., 'gossip' not 'gossips'). Use correct grammar and give a clear reason with a linking phrase like 'because' or 'so'.

Example: I think personal secrets and harmful gossip are unsuitable to share, because if people learn you revealed private matters they may lose trust in you.

Suggestion: Be concise and ensure subject-verb agreement (singular/plural). Use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific descriptive details with linking words such as 'because' or 'which'.

Example: Yes, I recently shared photos of the cherry blossoms in my neighborhood because they looked beautiful and symbolized the arrival of spring.

Suggestion: Avoid answering 'Yes' to a 'who' question. Start with the person’s role, use correct verb forms and natural phrases (e.g., 'understands me', 'sees things from my perspective'). Keep it to two or three sentences.

Example: I would share good news with my closest friend because she understands me better than anyone and always sees things from my perspective, so she would be genuinely happy for me.

Suggestion: Begin with a full topic sentence and link ideas smoothly with 'when' or 'and'. Use plural agreement when referring to 'friends' and avoid repeating similar phrases.

Example: I share both good and bad news with my friends: they support me emotionally when I'm upset, and they celebrate with me when something good happens.

× It make others cheerful and it made me feel less lonely.

✓ It made others cheerful and it made me feel less lonely.

The verb 'make' should agree with the past-tense subject 'It' in this sentence. The surrounding context is past tense ('taught', 'was a little child'), so both verbs should be in the past tense: 'made'. Use consistent tense to maintain clarity. Suggestion: Use past tense for both verbs when describing past events: 'It made others cheerful.'

× It depends, When I was a little child, I'd like to share my snacks and toys with my friends because it will made our playtime more fun.

✓ It depends. When I was a little child, I'd like to share my snacks and toys with my friends because it would make our playtime more fun.

The clause mixes tenses and forms incorrectly. 'Will made' is ungrammatical: 'made' is past participle but 'will' requires base verb; context of hypothetical past preference requires 'would make'. Also 'When' after a comma should start a new sentence or be lowercased. Suggestion: Keep conditional/habitual past using 'would' or use present for current habits. Example: '...because it would make our playtime more fun.'

× But when I grow up, I prefer to share my personal stories and secrets with my friends so that we can support each other.

✓ But when I grow up, I prefer to share my personal stories and secrets with my friends so that we can support each other.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but note tense consistency: 'When I grow up' refers to future; 'prefer' can be used for present habitual preference about the future. No change needed. Suggestion: Alternatively use 'When I grew up' if referring to past change, or 'As I grew up' to describe past development.

× I think we should avoid negative gossips and, uh, other secrets because when someone found that you shared her private life, they may stop trusting in you.

✓ I think we should avoid negative gossip and other people's secrets because when someone finds out that you shared their private life, they may stop trusting you.

Several preposition and noun form issues: 'gossips' is uncountable as 'gossip'; 'other secrets' is vague—'other people's secrets' is clearer. 'Found that' should be 'finds out that' for present-tense general statement. Pronoun agreement: avoid mixing 'her' with singular 'someone' and plural 'they'—use 'their' as a gender-neutral singular. 'Trusting in you' should be 'trusting you'. Suggestion: Use 'gossip' (uncountable), 'finds out', 'their', and drop 'in' after 'trusting'.

× I'd like to share the cherry blossom in the neighborhood garden because they looked really impressive and hopeful, which signaled the arrival of spring and new life.

✓ I'd like to share the cherry blossoms in the neighborhood garden because they look really impressive and hopeful, which signals the arrival of spring and new life.

Number and tense issues: 'cherry blossom' should be plural 'cherry blossoms' if referring to multiple blooms. The sentence shifts tense: 'I'd like' (present conditional) should pair with present 'look' and 'signals' to describe a general or current impression. Use plural noun and present verbs for consistency. Suggestion: Keep number and tense consistent: 'cherry blossoms... look... which signals'.

× Yes, I'd like to share my good news to my close friend. She understand me most, even more than my parents.

✓ Yes, I'd like to share my good news with my close friend. She understands me most, even more than my parents.

Preposition: use 'share... with' not 'share... to'. Subject-verb agreement: 'She understand' should be 'She understands'. 'Most' is acceptable but consider 'better than' for clarity. Suggestion: 'share my good news with' and use third-person singular 'understands'.

× She always seems from my perspective.

✓ She always sees things from my perspective.

Verb and preposition misuse: 'seems from my perspective' is unnatural. Use 'sees things from my perspective' or 'understands my perspective'. Suggestion: Use 'sees things from' or 'understands'.

× So I believe that she will be genuinely cheerful for my good news.

✓ So I believe that she will be genuinely happy for my good news.

The preposition 'cheerful for' is not idiomatic; use 'happy for' or 'happy about'. 'Cheerful' describes a general mood rather than a reaction to someone's news. Suggestion: Use 'happy for' to indicate being pleased about someone else's success.

× A mix of bad and good news. I think when I say something sad, my friend will always support me emotionally and when I share good news with them, they will be genuinely cheerful about it.

✓ A mix of bad and good news. I think when I say something sad, my friend will always support me emotionally, and when I share good news with them, they will be genuinely happy about it.

Pronoun consistency: the speaker uses 'my friend' (singular) and then 'them/they' (plural). While singular 'they' is acceptable, maintain consistency. Also 'cheerful about it' is less natural than 'happy about it'. Suggestion: Either say 'my friends... they will' or 'my friend... she/he will'; or keep singular 'they' but adjust wording to 'happy about it'.