Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar (past tense and plurals), reduce repetition and make the answer more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (for example, "for instance" or "also"). Avoid repeating words like "always" and correct pronouns and noun forms (e.g., "belongings", "others").

Example: Yes. My parents taught me to share when I was a child. For instance, in kindergarten they encouraged me and my classmates to share toys, and at home my parents asked my brother and me to share snacks so we learned to be generous.

Suggestion: Clarify and organize ideas: give a direct topic sentence, then two specific examples with linking words. Fix awkward phrasing ("share knowledge", "refresh my memory") and avoid redundancy. Use appropriate prepositions and remove extra filler words.

Example: I usually like to share knowledge and useful items with others. For example, I often explain study topics to friends, which helps me remember the material, and I sometimes lend hiking gear to friends when we go outdoors.

Suggestion: Use correct noun forms and clearer vocabulary ("personal belongings", "underwear"). Make the response concise: state the general rule, give 2–3 specific examples, and a short reason. Avoid repetition and correct word order.

Example: I usually avoid sharing personal belongings because they are intimate. For example, I would not lend underwear, pajamas, or my toothbrush, as these items are hygienic and personal.

Suggestion: Use correct verb tenses and simpler phrasing. Start with a clear sentence about what you shared, then give brief supporting details (flavors, who helped, why you shared). Avoid fillers and contradictory phrases like "even though it's already past" — say when it happened.

Example: Yes. Recently I baked homemade cookies for Chinese New Year, both chocolate and butter flavors. I made them with my family, and because they were low in fat, I happily shared them with close friends to celebrate together.

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar: use past/present consistently and fix awkward phrases ("when I lack confidence"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason with an example. Avoid repeating the same idea.

Example: My mother is the first person I would share good news with because she always encourages me during difficult times. For example, when I struggled with exams she helped me regain confidence and celebrate any success.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and fillers; use clear categories and one linking phrase. Start with a topic sentence listing the main types of news, then give one brief example for clarity. Use plural forms and correct verb forms.

Example: With close friends I share personal news such as relationship updates, current challenges, and achievements. For instance, I often tell them about milestones in my relationship and ask for advice when I face problems.

× Yes, when I was a child my parents always teach me to share my belonging with the other friends.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my parents always taught me to share my belongings with other friends.

The sentence describes past habitual action, so the verb should be in past tense (teach -> taught). 'Belonging' should be plural 'belongings' to match general items, and 'the other friends' is unnecessary article; use 'other friends'.

× So for example when I was in the kindergarten, my parents al always ask us to share with one another and play together with the other.

✓ So, for example, when I was in kindergarten, my parents always asked us to share with one another and play together with others.

Past context requires past tense 'ask' -> 'asked'. 'the kindergarten' should be 'kindergarten' without article. 'al always' is a typo -> 'always'. 'the other' should be 'others'.

× Well when I'm in home my parents always ask my brother to share the toy with me and I also share my favorite food with them so we are really loving.

✓ Well, when I'm at home my parents always ask my brother to share his toys with me, and I also share my favorite food with them, so we are very close.

Use preposition 'at home' not 'in home' (preposition error). 'ask' is acceptable as habitual present but context mixes tenses; keeping present is fine. 'the toy' should be 'his toys' (plural and possessive). 'we are really loving' is incorrect adjective use; 'close' or 'loving towards each other' is better.

× Right now I usually like to share the knowledge with the others.

✓ Right now I usually like to share knowledge with others.

Remove the definite article 'the' before 'knowledge' (article error) and 'the others' -> 'others' (article/preposition).

× So whenever I share my knowledge with them, I can also learn something from my friend and it can also help me to freshen up my knowledge so that it can enhance my memories on them.

✓ So whenever I share my knowledge with them, I can also learn something from my friends, and it helps me refresh my knowledge and remember things better.

'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'them' (pronoun agreement). 'help me to freshen up my knowledge' is awkward; use 'helps me refresh my knowledge'. 'enhance my memories on them' is incorrect phrasing; use 'remember things better'.

× So and beside this, I also like to share anything they need with from my to my friends.

✓ Besides this, I also like to share anything my friends need from me.

Word order is incorrect: 'with from my to my friends' is mixed up. Correct order: 'share anything my friends need from me'. Also 'So and beside this' should be 'Besides this'.

× For example, I used to share the hiking gear to my friends.

✓ For example, I used to share hiking gear with my friends.

Preposition 'to' is wrong here; use 'with'. Also 'the hiking gear' can be 'hiking gear' (no article required).

× In my opinion, I don't really feel comfortable to share my personal belonging to the others.

✓ In my opinion, I don't really feel comfortable sharing my personal belongings with others.

Use gerund 'sharing' after 'feel comfortable' (verb + -ing). 'belonging' should be plural 'belongings'. Preposition 'to the others' is incorrect; use 'with others'. },{

× So for example like my tower, my undergarments or my my blankets and my clothes because it's this kind of thing feel personal and intimate.

✓ For example, my towel, my undergarments, my blankets, and my clothes, because these kinds of things feel personal and intimate.

'tower' is likely 'towel' (spelling). Use plural 'these kinds of things' to match list. 'it's this kind of thing feel' is ungrammatical; use 'these kinds of things feel'.

× So I prefer to use it my for my own and I will usually ask my friend to bring this if they want to sleep well in my house.

✓ So I prefer to use them for myself, and I usually ask my friends to bring their own if they want to sleep over at my house.

Pronouns and word order fixed: 'use it my for my own' -> 'use them for myself'. 'ask my friend to bring this' -> 'ask my friends to bring their own'. Use 'sleep over at my house' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, recently I make a cook, I make a homemade cookie, which is a chocolate flavors and also a butter flavor during the Chinese New Year.

✓ Yes, recently I made homemade cookies, which were chocolate-flavored and butter-flavored, during Chinese New Year.

Recent past action uses past tense 'make' -> 'made'. 'a cook' is wrong; say 'made cookies'. Use plural 'cookies'. Adjective forms: 'chocolate-flavored' and 'butter-flavored'.

× And then I made it together with my family members, which is low calorie, low fats and really delicious.

✓ I made them together with my family members; they were low in calories, low in fat, and really delicious.

Refer to 'cookies' with 'them' and adjust adjectives: 'low in calories' and 'low in fat'. 'which is' incorrect for plural; use 'they were'.

× So I would love to share with my close friends to share my, uh, happiness and also this celebrated Chinese New Year together with them, even though it's already past.

✓ So I would love to share my happiness and the celebration of Chinese New Year with my close friends, even though it has already passed.

Remove duplicate 'share'. Use 'share my happiness and the celebration' and correct tense 'has already passed'.

× I would say my mother is the first person that I would like to share good news with because she's the one who always encouraged me when I face a difficulty or when I'm UN, when I lack a confidence in myself.

✓ I would say my mother is the first person I would like to share good news with because she's the one who always encourages me when I face difficulty or when I lack confidence in myself.

Maintain present habitual 'encourages' not past 'encouraged'. 'face a difficulty' -> 'face difficulty' or 'a difficulty'. 'lack a confidence' -> 'lack confidence'. Remove unclear 'UN'.

× And even though when I've faced the failure, she will always encourage me to get up again.

✓ And even when I've faced failure, she always encourages me to get up again.

Mixing tenses: use present perfect 'I've faced' with present 'encourages' for habitual support. Remove article before 'failure'.

× So I feel really happy to share the good news with her.

✓ So I feel really happy to share good news with her.

'the good news' can be 'good news'—both acceptable; removed article for natural phrasing. Sentence is otherwise fine.

× So with my close friend, I usually share the news about my relationship, the recent update of my relationship or my current, uh, current challenges that I'm, I face or even the current achievements that I achieve because they are my close friend and they understand everything about me and they would like to encourage me when I face the challenges.

✓ With my close friends, I usually share news about my relationship, recent updates to my relationship, my current challenges that I face, or achievements I have, because they are my close friends and they understand me and encourage me when I face challenges.

Make plural 'friends' consistent. Remove redundant words and fix verb forms: 'the recent update of my relationship' -> 'recent updates to my relationship'; 'current achievements that I achieve' -> 'achievements I have'. Simplify and correct agreement.