Sharing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason or short example. Avoid repeating or awkward phrasing (e.g., "something I like").

Example: Yes. My parents taught me to share from a young age because it’s an important part of Chinese culture. For example, they encouraged me to bring snacks to school so I could make friends and enjoy time together.

Suggestion: Organize into a clear topic sentence plus specific examples. Remove filler words (umm, uh) and correct grammar ("I only share others" is incorrect). Use linking words like "also" or "for example."

Example: I like to share snacks and books. For example, I often bring snacks to social gatherings so people can chat and relax, and I also exchange books with friends to try new authors without buying them.

Suggestion: Good clear answer and specific examples. Improve by using a stronger topic sentence and smoother phrasing, and remove hesitation markers.

Example: Personal hygiene items should not be shared. For example, toothbrushes and underwear can spread germs, so it’s best to keep them private.

Suggestion: Be concise and accurate. Fix vocabulary mistakes ("veneers" seems wrong—perhaps "souvenirs"), use past tense consistently, and give one clear reason for sharing. Remove fillers and repetition.

Example: Yes. Last week I went to Fiji and bought some souvenirs, which I shared with colleagues so we could enjoy them together and I could tell them about my trip.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and one concise reason. Avoid unclear or irrelevant follow-up (the last sentence is confusing). Use linking words like "because" and give a short example of how you celebrate.

Example: I would share good news with my parents because they’re the closest to me and always supportive. For instance, when I get a promotion I call them first so we can celebrate together.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and give one or two specific examples. Remove repetition and finish the sentence logically ("we also talk about solutions or advice").

Example: I usually share news about work or studies because my friends have similar experiences. For example, I tell them about project challenges so we can give each other advice.

× Yes, my parents often told me to share something I like with my friends because it's a traditional virtue of Chinese culture and it also brings you enjoyment.

✓ Yes, my parents often told me to share things I liked with my friends because sharing is a traditional virtue in Chinese culture and it also brings enjoyment.

Issues: plural and tense/context and article use. Change 'something I like' to 'things I liked' to match plural sharing and past teaching; 'share is a traditional virtue in Chinese culture' clarifies noun usage and uses correct article 'a' removed before 'traditional virtue' and rephrased; 'brings you enjoyment' changed to 'brings enjoyment' for natural phrasing. Relevant problem types: 1 (Singular and plural issue), 6 (Present tense issue) and 22 (Article errors).

× I only share umm, others with some snacks because it's often good to uh, share snacks so that we can chat and have some fun together.

✓ I only share snacks with others because it's often good to share snacks so that we can chat and have some fun together.

Issue: incorrect word order and wrong use of 'others' and 'some snacks'. 'Share others with some snacks' is ungrammatical; correct is 'share snacks with others'. Problem type: 1 (Singular and plural issue) and 26 (Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: place object before 'with' and remove filler words.

× Other things I think is book because umm, we can exchange books so that we don't need to buy.

✓ Other things, I think, are books because we can exchange books so that we don't need to buy them.

Issues: subject-verb agreement and plural form. 'Other things' (plural) requires 'are' not 'is', and 'book' should be plural 'books'; add object pronoun 'them'. Problem types: 27 (Subject-verb agreement errors) and 1 (Singular and plural issue). Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and nouns.

× I guess personal items, uh, something related to hygiene issues, for example the toothbrush or lingerie.

✓ I guess personal items, such as things related to hygiene, for example a toothbrush or underwear, are not suitable for sharing.

Issues: preposition and article use and word choice. 'Something related to hygiene issues' is awkward; use 'things related to hygiene' and use 'a toothbrush' (singular with article) and 'underwear' rather than 'lingerie' for general sharing context. Problem type: 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions) and 22 (Article errors). Suggestion: add verb and restructure sentence to state they are 'not suitable for sharing.'

× Yes, of course, last week I just went to Fiji and bought some veneers and and after I came back, I share it with my colleagues and friends so that we can enjoy the enjoy them together and help me. Yeah.

✓ Yes, of course. Last week I went to Fiji and bought some souvenirs, and after I came back, I shared them with my colleagues and friends so that we could enjoy them together.

Issues: past tense consistency, word choice, pronoun agreement, and repetition. 'Just went' can be 'went' and actions are past so use 'shared' not 'share'; 'veneers' is likely wrong word — use 'souvenirs'; fix 'share it' to 'shared them' and remove duplicated words. Problem types: 5 (Past tense issue), 1 (Singular and plural issue), 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns). Suggestion: keep past tense for past events and ensure pronouns match plural nouns.

× Definitely my parents because umm, they are the closest ones to me and I often share anything with them so that we can celebrate together all they can. I'll think of some solutions for me.

✓ Definitely my parents because they are the closest people to me and I often share anything with them so that we can celebrate together. I also ask them for advice when I need solutions.

Issues: pronoun/reference and sentence coherence. 'Closest ones' is vague; 'closest people' is better. The clause 'celebrate together all they can' is ungrammatical — rephrase to 'celebrate together.' The second sentence 'I'll think of some solutions for me' is odd in context; better to say you ask parents for advice when needing solutions. Problem types: 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns) and 26 (Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: use clear pronoun references and express intentions simply.

× Mostly things related to work or study because we have the same experience so that they can they can relate to me when I told those things to them and we also talk about some.

✓ Mostly things related to work or study because we have similar experiences, so they can relate to me when I tell them about those things and we also talk about them.

Issues: tense consistency, repetition, and pronoun/reference. Use present simple for habitual actions: 'have similar experiences' and 'tell them'. Remove duplicated 'they can' and finish with 'talk about them.' Problem types: 6 (Present tense issue) and 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns). Suggestion: use consistent present tense for routines and avoid repetition.