E-books— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar; give a clear topic sentence, one supporting reason, and a short example. Avoid repetition and unfinished words. Also correct small errors (e-books, eye strain, paper books). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Example: I prefer paper books to e-books because long screen time causes eye strain and distracts me. For example, when I read a novel in print I can focus for longer without headaches, so I enjoy it more.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating words. Use linking words (for example, because) and correct small errors (news, social media, during my commute). Be specific about times and types of content in one or two supporting sentences.

Example: I usually read online after work when I have a break. For example, I check news sites for updates on Canadian laws and browse social media during my commute to stay informed and entertained.

Suggestion: Make a direct, grammatical response and avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases (mention of 'dad' and 'ice creams' is confusing). Use one reason and one supporting detail. Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (even when I get older, often).

Example: No, I don't think I will read more online in the future; I prefer paper books because turning pages gives me satisfaction and feels more comfortable. For instance, when I read a printed book before bed I relax and sleep better.

Suggestion: Use precise grammar and vocabulary (content -> types of content; 'often' not 'more oftenly'); give specific examples and link them with words like 'for example' or 'such as'. Keep sentences short and focused.

Example: I read several types of content online, especially recent news and updates about immigration rules. For example, I also follow social sites to keep up with developments in the entertainment industry.

Suggestion: State the main difference clearly, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, therefore). Correct grammar (information, less time online). Avoid vague phrases and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Reading online differs from paper mainly in speed and depth because people look for quick information online. For example, busy readers often read summaries or skim articles online, whereas printed books are read more slowly and in depth.

× For instance, reading a paper books helps me to be more focused and dis.

✓ For instance, reading a paper book helps me to be more focused and relaxed.

The noun 'books' is plural but modified by the singular article 'a'; this is a singular/plural mismatch. Use 'a paper book' for singular or 'paper books' without 'a' for plural. Also 'dis' appears to be an incomplete word; 'relaxed' fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: match articles and noun number and complete unclear words.

× I usually read online, usually after work when I get some time after my job to catch up the news or articles.

✓ I usually read online after work when I have some time to catch up on the news or articles.

The phrase 'get some time after my job' is awkward and 'catch up the news' uses incorrect verb pattern and preposition. Use present simple 'have' for habitual actions and the correct collocation 'catch up on the news'. Also remove duplicate 'usually' for conciseness.

× For instance to get the new updates on Canadian laws and the social media post during commute break to stay informed and entertain.

✓ For instance, to get updates on changes to Canadian laws and social media posts during my commute to stay informed and entertained.

Problems: missing commas, incorrect preposition use ('updates on changes to'), singular/plural mismatch ('post' -> 'posts'), missing possessive ('commute break' -> 'my commute'), and incorrect verb form 'entertain' which should be adjective 'entertained'. Suggestion: use 'updates on', pluralize where needed, and use 'entertained'.

× I believe I will not prefer reading more books online, I would rather go through paper books even I get older because dad gives me a sense of satisfaction when I turn papers and it's quite comfortable for me.

✓ I don't think I will prefer reading more books online; I would rather read paper books as I get older because they give me a sense of satisfaction when I turn the pages and they are comfortable for me.

Errors: awkward future-negative phrasing 'I believe I will not prefer' and comma splice. Use 'I don't think I will' or 'I will not'. 'Even I get older' should be 'as I get older'. 'Dad' seems incorrect contextually; likely meant 'they' or 'paper books' — changed to 'they'. 'Turn papers' is incorrect collocation; use 'turn the pages'. Suggestion: use natural future negation, correct conjunctions, and proper pronouns.

× And reduce getting the ice creams more oftenly.

✓ And reduce getting ice cream so often.

'More oftenly' is nonstandard; the adverb should be 'so often' or 'more often'. 'Ice creams' as count noun is awkward; 'ice cream' as uncountable fits. Also sentence fragment 'And reduce...' lacks a clear subject; in context it's continuation so make structure parallel: 'and reduce getting ice cream so often.' Suggestion: use standard adverbs 'so often' or 'more often' and use uncountable 'ice cream'.

× There are various content that I like to read online, especially based on the recent news and any immigration rules change happens in the recent times.

✓ There is various content that I like to read online, especially recent news and any changes to immigration rules.

'There are various content' is incorrect because 'content' is uncountable and takes singular verb 'is' (or rephrase to 'a variety of content'). 'Any immigration rules change happens in the recent times' is ungrammatical; correct to 'any changes to immigration rules'. Also 'in the recent times' is awkward; use 'recently' or 'in recent times'. Suggestion: treat 'content' as uncountable or use 'pieces of content' if plural intended, and use 'changes to' for rule changes.

× More oftenly, I go to the social sites to know what's going in the entertainment drama industry.

✓ More often, I go to social sites to find out what's going on in the entertainment industry.

'More oftenly' is incorrect; use 'more often'. 'Social sites' is fine but 'find out' is a better collocation than 'to know'. 'What's going in' should be 'what's going on'. 'Entertainment drama industry' is redundant; 'entertainment industry' suffices. Suggestion: use correct adverb 'more often' and proper phrasal verbs and prepositions.

× Reading online has a huge difference than reading on paper.

✓ Reading online is very different from reading on paper.

The structure 'has a huge difference than' is ungrammatical; use the adjective 'different' with the preposition 'from' or 'is very different from'. Suggestion: use 'is different from' for comparisons.

× Nowadays people are quite impatient, so they mostly visit online platforms to get informations.

✓ Nowadays people are quite impatient, so they mostly visit online platforms to get information.

'Informations' is incorrect; 'information' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Use 'information'. Suggestion: remember that 'information' has no plural form.

× For instance, people that have very less amount of time for Internet, they usually get summaries about an article or books on.

✓ For instance, people who have very little time for the internet usually read summaries of articles or books online.

Errors: 'very less amount of time' is nonstandard; use 'very little time'. 'People that' should be 'people who'. 'For Internet' should be 'for the internet' or 'online'. Redundant pronoun 'they' creates awkwardness. 'Summaries about an article or books on' is ungrammatical; use 'summaries of articles or books online'. Suggestion: use 'little' with uncountable nouns, 'who' for people, and proper prepositions.