E-books— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and slightly incorrect phrasing (e.g., "less focused" is unclear).

Example: I prefer paper books to e-books. For example, reading on screens often gives me eye strain and watery eyes, whereas physical books feel more comfortable and relaxing, so I can read for longer without discomfort.

Suggestion: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and structured supporting details; reduce hesitations and filler words. Use linking words (for example, otherwise, for instance) and give specific examples (types of projects, which newspapers).

Example: I usually read online when I need information quickly or current news. For instance, I research academic articles or project reports online, and I read newspapers on news websites; otherwise I prefer physical books because I enjoy their smell and feel.

Suggestion: Give a direct, confident topic sentence then explain with concise, specific reasons and contrast using linking words. Correct minor word choices (Kindle, not Kindler) and reduce repetition/fillers.

Example: Probably not, although I might buy a Kindle. For example, I tried a patient's Kindle and found its e-ink display much more comfortable than a regular screen, so I might use it occasionally but still prefer paper books for long reading sessions.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear statement, then list specific items using linking words like "mainly" or "for example." Avoid vague phrases like "something to eat" or "project"—specify types of recipes or projects.

Example: I rarely read online, but when I do I mainly check news websites to catch up and look for recipes. For example, I often search for quick dinner recipes or tutorials for work-related projects.

Suggestion: Start with a clear comparative topic sentence, then give specific physiological or behavioural differences with linking words (for example, therefore, as a result). Avoid vague statistics unless confident of accuracy; if using numbers, frame them as approximate.

Example: Reading online causes more eye discomfort than paper for me. For example, I tend to blink much less when using screens, so my eyes get dry and I lose focus; as a result I often feel sleepy or get headaches, which does not happen with paper books.

× I prefer to read on paper books instead of ebooks.

✓ I prefer to read paper books instead of e-books.

The phrase 'read on paper books' incorrectly uses the preposition 'on' and the article usage is awkward. Use 'read paper books' or 'read books on paper'. Also use a hyphen in 'e-books' for clarity. Suggestion: say 'I prefer to read paper books instead of e-books.'

× While reading on ebooks, my eyes become very tired, I get eye strain, my eyes become watery.

✓ While reading e-books, my eyes become very tired; I get eye strain and my eyes become watery.

'ebooks' should be 'e-books' and the sentence run-on needs punctuation; combine related clauses with conjunctions. Maintain plural 'eyes' consistent. Suggest using semicolon or separate sentences and add 'and' before the last item.

× But when I'm reading in a regular book, like with real pages, my eyes become less focused and they become more calm.

✓ But when I'm reading a regular book with real pages, my eyes are less strained and become calmer.

Use 'reading a regular book' not 'reading in a regular book'. 'Less focused' is unnatural for this context; 'less strained' or 'less tired' fits. 'More calm' should be 'calmer'. Suggest concise phrasing: 'my eyes are less strained and become calmer.'

× I usually read online if I need to do some research for something for project or job thing, umm, or if I want to uh, read the the newspaper, I usually do it online.

✓ I usually read online if I need to do some research for a project or a job, or if I want to read the newspaper; I usually do that online.

Missing articles: 'for project' should be 'for a project', 'job thing' is vague—use 'a job'. Duplicate 'the the' is an error. Use 'do that online' to avoid repetition. Improve clarity by removing fillers.

× I prefer to do it in the book because I love this smell of the book.

✓ I prefer to do it in a book because I love the smell of books.

Use 'in a book' not 'in the book' for general preference. 'This smell of the book' is awkward; use 'the smell of books' for general statement.

× I've recently thought about buying a Kindler because a patient of mine had it and when I tried to read on it, it was really calming.

✓ I recently thought about buying a Kindle because a patient of mine had one, and when I tried reading on it, it was really calming.

Use 'recently thought' rather than present perfect 'I've recently thought' for recent past; 'Kindler' is misspelling—should be 'Kindle'. Use 'had one' instead of 'had it'. Use gerund 'reading' after 'tried' is more natural. Suggest: 'I recently thought about buying a Kindle... when I tried reading on it...'

× It was not as uh, I thought it would be.

✓ It was not as I had expected.

The colloquial filler makes structure awkward. Use past perfect 'had expected' to indicate expectation before the experience. This produces a clearer, more grammatical sentence.

× Uh, I thought it would be a very bright and umm may make my eyes strain, but here it was really really calming.

✓ I thought it would be very bright and might make my eyes strain, but it was actually very calming.

Use 'might' for possibility not 'may' in this past context; 'would be a very bright' should be 'would be very bright'. Also use 'it was actually' to contrast expectation and reality. Suggest: 'I thought it would be very bright and might make my eyes strain, but it was actually very calming.'

× I usually do not like to read online, but when I do those occasions I usually read about the news to catch up or I search for something to eat like new recipes.

✓ I usually do not like to read online, but on those occasions I read the news to catch up or search for recipes for something to eat.

Use 'on those occasions' not 'when I do those occasions'. 'the news' is correct; 'about the news' is unnecessary. 'new recipes' can be 'recipes' or 'new recipes'; reorder for natural phrasing.

× Or it could be that I'm searching for project, something like that.

✓ Or I might be searching for information for a project, something like that.

Missing article before 'project'—use 'a project' or 'information for a project'. Use 'might be' for possibility and add clarity with 'information for'.

× So when I read online, we usually tend to blink 60% less than reading on a regular book.

✓ So when I read online, I tend to blink about 60% less than when reading a regular book.

Pronoun 'we' is inconsistent with speaker 'I'; use 'I'. 'reading on a regular book' should be 'reading a regular book' or 'when reading a regular book'. Add 'about' for approximation.

× Which means that my eyes become very dry and I lose focus.

✓ This means that my eyes become very dry and I lose focus.

'Which means' starting sentence is informal; 'This means' is clearer. Grammatically acceptable but improve clarity. No major grammar error category matches better; treated as adjective/adverb clarity.

× I become more sleepy and I get a bit of eye strain.

✓ I become sleepier and get a bit of eye strain.

Use comparative adjective 'sleepier' rather than 'more sleepy'. Also omit repeated subject for conciseness: 'and get' is sufficient. This fits present habitual tense.

× Also a bit of headache.

✓ I also get a bit of a headache.

Original fragment lacks a verb and article. Add verb 'get' and article 'a' to form complete sentence: 'I also get a bit of a headache.'

× And that doesn't occur when I read on paper.

✓ And that doesn't happen when I read on paper.

'Occur' is formal but acceptable; 'happen' is more natural. No tense change required. This addresses word choice more than grammar but improves naturalness.