Internet— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: คำตอบของคุณควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคที่ตอบตรงคำถามอย่างชัดเจน และใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงข้อมูลให้ลื่นไหลมากขึ้น เช่น การใช้ 'because' หรือ 'for example' เพื่ออธิบายเพิ่มเติม นอกจากนี้ควรหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำคำว่า 'Internet' หลายครั้ง และใช้คำศัพท์ที่หลากหลายมากขึ้น

Example: I started using the internet when I was in primary school because it helped me improve my reading skills. For example, I often used a website called Reading ATC, which provided useful learning materials.

Suggestion: ควรตอบคำถามโดยตรงและใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ รวมถึงใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด เช่น 'because' หรือ 'so' และควรระวังการใช้คำผิด เช่น 'tick tock' ควรเป็น 'TikTok' และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดไม่จบประโยค

Example: I go online almost every hour because I am really addicted to social media, especially TikTok. As a result, I spend about 10 to 11 hours online daily, which I know is too much, so I'm trying to reduce it.

Suggestion: ควรตอบคำถามให้ชัดเจนและใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ หลีกเลี่ยงการพูดติดขัดและใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด เช่น 'because' และควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'tolerating' ควรเป็น 'torturing' หรือ 'difficult'

Example: Yes, I remember when I attended an English camp in middle school, I wasn't allowed to use the internet. It was really difficult for me because I was very addicted to it at that time.

Suggestion: คำตอบควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ชัดเจนและหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำ เช่น 'It was very it is very time consuming' ควรแก้ไขให้เป็นประโยคเดียวที่สมบูรณ์ และใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด เช่น 'therefore' หรือ 'so'

Example: Yes, I definitely spend too much time on TikTok, which is very time-consuming. Therefore, I am trying to reduce my online time by doing more outdoor activities.

Suggestion: ควรตอบคำถามด้วยประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดติดขัด เช่น 'because.' และ 'I would Li read' ควรแก้เป็น 'I would read' นอกจากนี้ควรใช้ linking words เพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด เช่น 'however' หรือ 'if'

Example: Well, honestly, it's hard to imagine life without the internet because I rely on it a lot. However, if I couldn't access it, I would read physical books like novels or textbooks instead.

× I started using Internet when I was very young.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was very young.

The word 'Internet' is a unique noun and requires the definite article 'the' before it to be grammatically correct.

× I used the websites for learning the website called Reading ATC.

✓ I used a website for learning called Reading ATC.

The phrase 'the websites' is incorrect here because the student refers to a specific website, so 'a website' is appropriate. Also, 'the website called Reading ATC' is better rephrased for clarity.

× I used the websites for learning the website called Reading ATC.

✓ I used a website called Reading ATC for learning.

The preposition 'for' is better placed after the object to clarify the purpose of using the website.

× Well, every single hour's I suppose, because I'm really addicted to social media and tick tock especially.

✓ Well, every single hour, I suppose, because I'm really addicted to social media and TikTok especially.

The phrase 'hour's' is incorrect; it should be 'hour' without the possessive 's'. Also, 'tick tock' should be capitalized as 'TikTok' as it is a proper noun.

× So yeah, I go online for like 10 to 11 hours a day, which is quite too much an I'm trying to find a way to.

✓ So yeah, I go online for like 10 to 11 hours a day, which is quite too much and I'm trying to find a way to reduce it.

The phrase 'an I'm trying to find a way to' is incomplete and contains a typo; 'an' should be 'and'. The sentence needs completion for clarity.

× I wasn't allowed to use the Internet on as an English camp during my.

✓ I wasn't allowed to use the Internet during an English camp in my middle school years.

The original sentence is incomplete and has incorrect word order. 'On as an English camp' is incorrect; it should be 'during an English camp'.

× Middle school years. It was really, really tolerating because.

✓ Middle school years. It was really, really frustrating because.

The word 'tolerating' is incorrectly used; the correct adjective is 'frustrating' to express the feeling.

× I was really addicted to it back then, but I'm forced to not use them so.

✓ I was really addicted to it back then, but I was forced not to use it.

The pronoun 'them' is incorrect when referring to 'Internet' which is singular; 'it' should be used. Also, the verb tense should be consistent.

× Yes, definitely. I spent too much time playing TikTok.

✓ Yes, definitely. I spend too much time playing TikTok.

The question is about current habits, so present tense 'spend' is appropriate instead of past tense 'spent'.

× It was very it is very time consuming.

✓ It is very time-consuming.

The sentence is redundant and incorrectly structured. 'Time-consuming' should be hyphenated and the tense should be consistent.

× So as a result, I'm trying to find an approach to cut down my time on line.

✓ So as a result, I'm trying to find an approach to cut down my time online.

The phrase 'on line' should be one word 'online' when referring to internet usage.

× Well, honestly, it's hard to answer because. And these days I can't live without Internet.

✓ Well, honestly, it's hard to answer because these days I can't live without the Internet.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly split. 'Because' should not be at the end of a sentence, and 'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'.

× But if I cannot access the Internet. I would Li read some physical books like novels.

✓ But if I cannot access the Internet, I would read some physical books like novels.

The sentence is fragmented and contains a typo 'Li' which should be removed. The two parts should be connected with a comma.